Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh, um). Also use correct collocations (e.g., "I walk a lot" not "I do work a lot").

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I find walking helps me keep fit and reduces stress, and it’s convenient since there are many safe routes near my home.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and concise structure. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give specific supporting details and use linking words like "because" or "so". Replace vague phrases like "it's great" with concrete reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because they helped me relax and I could meet friends. We usually played games or explored nearby fields, which was fun and energetic.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific, complete reasons. Use linking phrases ("first", "also") and precise vocabulary ("greenery" not "greening"). Avoid trailing off—finish each idea with an explanation or example.

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because of the greenery, which is pleasant and restful for the eyes. Also, parks are social places where people can meet others or join group activities.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a correct verb and be concise. Use one reason and a supporting detail, avoiding repetition. Use vocabulary accurately (e.g., "walk" not "word", "historic" instead of "old and ancient" which is redundant).

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk in the Forbidden City in Beijing because I want to admire the historic architecture and learn about its cultural significance.

Sugestão: Use past tense and clear phrasing. Start with a direct answer naming the place, then give 1–2 specific reasons or activities. Remove fillers and correct collocations (e.g., "I went for a walk in the park near my neighborhood").

Exemplo: Lately I went for a walk in the park near my home because it is quiet and peaceful. I enjoyed walking there with my parents and we often sit and talk on a bench.

× Yes, I do work a lot because it uh, helps me build my strength, uh, helps me relax myself and uh, it's a very convenient and accessible.

✓ Yes, I do a lot of walking because it helps me build my strength, helps me relax, and it is very convenient and accessible.

The original mixes 'do work a lot' with intended meaning of walking; 'do work' is incorrect for habitual exercise here. Use the noun phrase 'a lot of walking' or the gerund 'walking a lot'. Also 'relax myself' is unnatural in English; use 'relax'. Replace contraction 'it's' with 'it is' for formality and remove redundant fillers. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× Yes, I often go outside to have a walk when I was a child, umm, because it's great and I relax myself and I can go outside to find my friends and hang out with them to do different activities.

✓ Yes, I often went outside for a walk when I was a child because it was fun, helped me relax, and I could meet my friends and hang out with them.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I often go' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past simple 'went' to match 'when I was a child' and change 'have a walk' to the more natural 'for a walk'. Replace 'it's great' with 'it was fun' and 'relax myself' with 'helped me relax'. Use 'could' for ability in the past.

× 1st, the parks are really greening umm, which can relax people's eyes. Umm uh, what's more, there are a lot of people in the park, so people can feel.

✓ First, the parks are very green, which is relaxing for people's eyes. What's more, many people visit the park, so it feels lively.

'Really greening' is incorrect; use adjective 'very green'. 'Relax people's eyes' is better expressed as 'is relaxing for people's eyes'. 'There are a lot of people in the park' is grammatical but 'many people visit the park' is clearer. The fragment 'so people can feel' is incomplete; specify the feeling, e.g., 'it feels lively'.

× I would like to take a word in the Forbidden City in Beijing, because I really want to appreciate these old and ancient buildings, which is really charming and attracts a lot of tourists from around the world, and I really want to.

✓ I would like to take a walk in the Forbidden City in Beijing because I really want to appreciate the old, historic buildings, which are very charming and attract many tourists from around the world.

'Take a word' is a mispronunciation/confusion; it should be 'take a walk'. 'These old and ancient buildings' is redundant; use 'old, historic buildings'. Subject-verb agreement: 'which is really charming and attracts' refers to plural 'buildings', so use 'are' and 'attract'. Also complete the sentence by removing trailing 'and I really want to' or finishing it; here it's removed for clarity.

× I, uh, wonderful work in the park around my neighborhood because this is a place very quiet and, uh, for our energy and, uh, I really enjoy the time with my parents in there.

✓ I went for a walk in the park near my neighborhood recently because it is a very quiet place where I can relax, and I really enjoyed spending time there with my parents.

The original is ungrammatical and contains wrong word choices like 'wonderful work' and wrong tense. Use past simple 'went' with 'recently' (question asked 'Where did you go for a walk lately?'). 'Around my neighborhood' is better as 'near my neighborhood'. 'This is a place very quiet' should be 'it is a very quiet place'. 'For our energy' is unclear; use 'where I can relax'. 'I really enjoy the time with my parents in there' should be 'I really enjoyed spending time there with my parents' to match past tense and natural phrasing.