Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (e.g., "Umm"), correct grammar, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to explain why and give a specific detail about your routine.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I use a step-tracking device and try to reach 10,000 steps a day because regular walking improves my fitness and energy. For example, I walk to work three times a week, which helps me stay active without going to the gym.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct statement, avoid contractions and colloquialisms, and add one or two specific details (linking reason and result). Keep it natural and under five sentences.

Exemplo: No, I did not walk much as a child. My parents and I prioritized my studies, so I spent most afternoons doing homework. As a result, I only walked occasionally, usually during weekend family outings.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes. Use clear linking words (for example, "because" and "also") and provide specific benefits (mental and physical). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use correct verb forms.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because being surrounded by greenery refreshes the mind and reduces stress. Also, walking in parks is good exercise that helps burn calories and improve cardiovascular health.

Sugestão: Make your answer clearer and more natural by starting with a direct location and then giving 2–3 specific reasons. Avoid vague or awkward phrases (e.g., "lane is white enough" or "randomly collapse"). Use linking words for clarity.

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk along a quiet seaside promenade. It should have mild weather and a wide, well-maintained path so I can walk comfortably and focus on my thoughts without worrying about crowds.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail about a recent walk (when, what you saw, or how long). This will make the answer more informative and natural while staying concise.

Exemplo: Lately I have been walking around Sanyatta Memorial Hall, which is near my home. Last weekend I walked there for about 40 minutes and enjoyed the open spaces and the nearby trees.

× Yes, I do walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

Using 'do' as an auxiliary in positive present simple statements is unnecessary and unnatural in this context. Native speakers say 'I walk a lot.' Use the simple present to describe habitual actions.

× So I do think it is important to our health that you make sure yourself to walk a certain amount of steps.

✓ So I do think it is important for our health that you make sure to walk a certain number of steps.

Multiple issues: the preposition 'to our health' should be 'for our health' (preposition error), 'make sure yourself to walk' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'make sure to walk' (pronoun/reflexive misuse and verb structure). Also 'amount of steps' should be 'number of steps' because steps are countable. Apply: replace 'to our health' with 'for our health', remove 'yourself', and use 'number' for countable noun.

× Not as much as of now 'cause my parents and I both think I should focus on academic performance, so I didn't walk as much as I do now.

✓ Not as much as now because my parents and I both thought I should focus on academic performance, so I didn't walk as much as I do now.

Tense inconsistency: speaker refers to past habit (didn't walk) so the verb 'think' should be past 'thought' to match time frame. Also 'as of now' is awkward here; use 'as now' or just 'as now'/'as I do now'. Replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because' for formality. Maintain contrast between past ('didn't walk') and present ('do now').

× I think people like to walk in parks because immersing yourself in some greenery will help refreshes people's mind and also having having walks can help burning fats.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because immersing yourself in greenery will help refresh people's minds, and taking walks can help burn fat.

Multiple errors: 'will help refreshes' mixes modal and verb forms; correct is 'will help refresh' or simply 'helps refresh'. Subject-verb agreement: 'mind' should be plural 'minds' when referring to people in general. 'Having having walks' is a repetition and awkward; use 'taking walks'. 'Help burning fats' is incorrect verb pattern and pluralization; use 'help burn fat' or 'help burn fats' is unnatural—'fat' uncountable. Remove extra 'having' and use base verb after 'help'.

× So I think that's the reason why people love to walk in parks.

✓ So I think that's the reason people love to walk in parks.

Redundant phrasing: 'the reason why' is wordy; 'the reason people' is clearer. This is a style improvement rather than strict grammar, but simplifies the sentence.

× Maybe it's a place that's not too cold and not too hot, and the lane is white enough for people to walk, just not to randomly collapse with somebody else and just can let me pay attention to myself and my steps.

✓ Maybe somewhere not too cold or too hot, with paths wide enough for people to walk without bumping into others, where I can focus on myself and my steps.

Original contains awkward and incorrect phrases: 'lane is white enough' likely intended 'wide enough'; 'randomly collapse with somebody else' is incorrect—use 'bumping into others'. 'Just can let me pay attention' is ungrammatical; use 'where I can focus'. Rephrase to improve clarity and correct word choice.

× I live around the Sanyatta Memorial Hall, so I do take walks out there when I have time.

✓ I live near the Sanyatta Memorial Hall, so I take walks there when I have time.

Use 'near' instead of 'around' for proximity (preposition choice). As in earlier feedback, using 'do' for emphasis in affirmative present simple is unnecessary; 'I take walks there' is natural. Remove 'out' which is redundant.