Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, so, therefore). Avoid repetition and unclear words. Pronunciation and word choice (e.g., 'rehobinated', 'haptic') should be corrected to natural expressions like 're-energised' or 'refreshed'.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk regularly as part of my daily routine. I do it mainly to relieve stress and control my weight, because my busy schedule makes me tense. Therefore, walking helps me feel more relaxed and energized.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence. Keep it short and avoid filler words (uh, honestly). Give one concrete supporting detail or memory and use a linking word like 'because' to explain. Fix tenses and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went outside for walks when I was a child because it became a habit whenever I felt tired. For example, after playing all afternoon, my family and I used to walk around the neighborhood to relax.

Sugestão: Start with a clear general statement, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'first' and 'second'). Use precise vocabulary ('greenery', 'fresh air', 'exercise'). Avoid repetition and unclear comparisons.

Exemplo: Many people like walking in parks because they can enjoy fresh air and greenery. First, parks provide a peaceful environment to relax, and second, the soft paths are comfortable for long walks compared with busy sidewalks.

Sugestão: Answer directly with one clear preference and give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'so'). Correct word choice ('mountains', 'hiking', 'day trip') and avoid fillers. Mention who you would go with if relevant.

Exemplo: I would love to take a long walk in the mountains because hiking improves my stamina and offers beautiful views. Also, it would be a great day trip to enjoy with my friends or family.

Sugestão: Use past tense to describe a recent action and be specific about when and where. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one or two concrete details (who you walked with, how often). Avoid redundancy and correct grammar ('we both like', 'has become').

Exemplo: Lately, I went for a walk in the park with my husband last weekend. We walk there regularly because it helps us relax and keeps us fit.

× Yes, I often walk.

✓ Yes, I often walk.

No grammatical change needed. Sentence is correct: 'often' modifies present simple 'walk'. Keep simple present for habitual action.

× I even I included this habit in my daily routine in order to overcome my stress and in over to overcome my obesity.

✓ I even included this habit in my daily routine in order to overcome my stress and to overcome my obesity.

The original has a repeated subject 'I' and the phrase 'in over to' is incorrect. Use the conjunction structure 'in order to' or simply 'to' for purpose; keep one subject and parallel infinitives: 'to overcome my stress and to overcome my obesity.'

× Because of during the haptic schedule, I easily get stressed.

✓ Because of the hectic schedule, I easily get stressed.

'During' and 'because of' were incorrectly combined and 'haptic' is a wrong word; the correct phrase is 'because of the hectic schedule' or 'during a hectic schedule.' Use one connector and correct adjective 'hectic.'

× So by doing this kind of things I can become rehobinated so.

✓ So by doing these kinds of things I can become re-energized.

Plural and demonstrative mismatch and an incorrect invented word 'rehobinated.' Use 'these kinds of things' (or 'this kind of thing') and a correct adjective 're-energized' or 'rejuvenated.' Remove redundant 'so.'

× Honestly speaking, I did not reminisce about my childhood, uh, period of time, but uh, definitely, uh, I often go out whenever I was tired because it became my habit, uh, from my childhood because actually I, at that time, I don't, I did not have enough.

✓ Honestly speaking, I do not remember much about my childhood period, but I often went out whenever I was tired because it became a habit from my childhood; at that time, I did not have enough (information/energy/resources).

Mixing past and present tenses and incorrect verb choice 'reminisce' (means to recall with pleasure) caused confusion. Use 'do not remember' or 'did not remember' consistently; use past simple 'went out' for past habits. Clarify the incomplete ending with a noun (e.g. 'energy' or 'resources').

× Different people have different preferences. Some, some people prefer to walk in parks because they can feel refreshed and they can, uh, enjoy, uh, greenery whenever they, they can walk in the park as compared to some people prefer to walk in stairs, sidewalks, because, uh, they can boost their stamina and they can get, uh, relaxed from.

✓ Different people have different preferences. Some people prefer to walk in parks because they feel refreshed and can enjoy the greenery, while others prefer to walk on stairs or sidewalks because they can boost their stamina and relax.

Problems: repetition 'some, some', inconsistent clause structure, wrong preposition 'walk in stairs' should be 'walk on stairs' or 'use stairs', and awkward ending 'relaxed from.' Use 'while' to contrast two preferences, simplify verbs, and correct prepositions: 'in parks' is fine, 'on stairs' or 'along sidewalks.' Remove filler words.

× Honestly speaking, I'm hotel person and I love, uh, hiking.

✓ Honestly speaking, I'm a hotel person and I love hiking.

Missing article 'a' before 'hotel person' (though 'hotel person' is odd—if meaning 'outdoor person' say that). Remove unnecessary commas and filler. Use 'a' for singular countable noun.

× So whenever I get a chance, I would like to walk on a mountains because, uh, with the help of it, I can boost my stamina as well as I can enjoy my dad trip.

✓ So whenever I get a chance, I would like to walk on a mountain because it would boost my stamina and I can enjoy a day trip with my dad.

Use singular 'a mountain' or plural 'mountains' with correct article; 'on a mountains' is wrong. 'With the help of it' is awkward—use 'it would' or 'that would.' 'Dad trip' likely intended 'day trip' or 'a trip with my dad.' Correct articles and word choice.

× So this kind of, uh, it's my dream as well because I would like to spend my time with.

✓ This kind of trip is my dream because I would like to spend time with my dad.

Sentence incomplete and contains filler. 'Spend my time with' needs an object ('my dad'). Rephrase to a complete structure: 'This kind of trip is my dream because I would like to spend time with my dad.'

× I would like to go for a walk in lately in the park and it is the best way to spend my leisure time with my husband and we both likes walking because even it becomes our daily routine habit uh, because with the help of it uh, we feel rejuvenating and we can even boost our stamina.

✓ Lately I like to go for a walk in the park; it is the best way to spend my leisure time with my husband, and we both like walking because it has become our daily routine. With it, we feel rejuvenated and can boost our stamina.

Problems include wrong adverb placement 'go for a walk in lately', subject-verb agreement 'we both likes' (should be 'like'), awkward phrase 'even it becomes our daily routine habit' (use 'it has become our daily routine'), incorrect adjective form 'rejuvenating' should be 'rejuvenated' to describe how they feel. Ensure consistent tense and correct verb forms.