Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, reduce hesitation and organize response with a clear topic sentence then supporting detail. Use linking words (for example, 'also' or 'in addition') and avoid repetition. Provide specific routines and durations without filler sounds.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. Every morning I walk about ten minutes to the bus stop, and once I arrive at work I usually walk for another six minutes to reach the office. In addition, I take short walks during the day to stretch and clear my mind.

Sugestão: Correct tense and word choice, and be specific. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then explain the reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid incorrect words like 'dehydrate'—use 'digest'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. My parents made it a rule that after dinner we should walk for five to ten minutes because they believed it helped our digestion and kept us healthy.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and improve cohesion. Give a clear topic sentence, then use linking words ('because', 'so', 'for example') and specific reasons (fresh air, greenery, quiet). Use singular/plural correctly and finish your sentence.

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because the green surroundings and fresh air help them relax. For example, parks offer quiet paths and trees that reduce stress and allow people to clear their minds.

Sugestão: Be direct and avoid confusion. Start with a clear response naming the place, then explain reasons briefly and coherently. Avoid excessive hesitations and incorrect grammar ('have' → 'has', 'people like do this' → 'people do this'). Mention specific details concisely (distance, purpose).

Exemplo: I would like to join the Sun Run in downtown Vancouver, which is a 10-kilometre charity walk. I think it would be great because it combines exercise with fundraising, and the downtown atmosphere would make the walk enjoyable.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and structure answer: topic sentence, supporting detail, and a result or feeling. Remove filler and correct phrases ('went for a walk', 'one of my best friends'). Add specific details about the park and activities to make it vivid.

Exemplo: Last Sunday I went for a walk in the park near my house with one of my best friends. He loves nature, so we explored the trails and watched birds; we had a great time and felt relaxed afterwards.

× Yeah, by, uh, yeah, I walk a lot in a day.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot each day.

Use of conversational fillers 'by, uh' removed and 'in a day' replaced with 'each day' to match habitual present tense; 'walk a lot' is fine but 'each day' is more natural.

× Uh, in the morning I have to go to my work, then I have to take bus, uh, like by walking 10 minutes, then I have uh, when I reached my work, then I have a walk for 6 minutes and even in the day.

✓ In the morning I have to go to work, then I take a bus, which I reach by walking for about 10 minutes; when I reach my workplace I walk for another 6 minutes during the day.

Corrected tense and word forms: 'have to go to my work' -> 'have to go to work'; 'have to take bus' -> 'take a bus' with article; 'by walking 10 minutes' -> 'reach by walking for about 10 minutes' (use 'for' with duration); 'when I reached' -> 'when I reach' to match habitual present; 'I have a walk for 6 minutes' -> 'I walk for another 6 minutes'. Ensures subject-verb agreement and consistent present tense for habitual actions.

× Yeah, I often have work outside when I was child, 'cause my parents always told me after having dinner it's compulsory for everybody to have a walk for five to 10 minutes because it's easy for us to dehydrate our food.

✓ Yes, I often worked outside when I was a child, because my parents always said that after dinner it is compulsory for everyone to walk for five to ten minutes because it helps us digest our food.

Use past tense 'worked' to match 'when I was a child'; add article 'a' in 'a child'; 'told me' -> 'said that' and change 'it's' to 'it is' for clarity; 'everybody' -> 'everyone'; 'have a walk' -> 'walk'; 'dehydrate our food' is incorrect idiom; corrected to 'digest our food'. Also use consistent past tense for childhood habits.

× Some people like to walk in parks because it helps them to get relaxed because in our everyday lives all the peoples have different tensions, worries about their life.

✓ Some people like to walk in parks because it helps them relax; in everyday life all people have different tensions and worries about their lives.

Removed redundant 'to' after 'helps'; 'get relaxed' -> 'relax' is more natural; 'our everyday lives' -> 'everyday life' for general statement; 'all the peoples' -> 'all people'; 'worries about their life' -> 'worries about their lives' plural to match 'people'. Fixed plurality and article usage.

× So when they go to parks they can see their Greenway which can help them to get relaxed and. Help them to.

✓ So when they go to parks they can see greenery which can help them relax and feel better.

'Greenway' likely intended as 'greenery' or 'green space'; removed fragmented sentence and redundant 'to'; 'help them to get relaxed and. Help them to.' corrected to 'help them relax and feel better' for grammatical completeness and fluency.

× Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the sun?

✓ Where would you like to take a long walk if you had the chance?

Interviewer asks hypothetical; student mistakenly repeated question phrase 'if you had the sun' — likely meant 'chance'. Replaced with 'chance' to make sense. No special tense issues.

× If I got a chance for a long walk, Uh, so recently my friend told me that, uh, in the upcoming days, Vancouver have the sun run like it's a 10 kilometer walk.

✓ If I got a chance for a long walk, recently my friend told me that in the upcoming days Vancouver will have the Sun Run, which is a 10-kilometer walk.

Use 'will have' for scheduled future event; 'Vancouver have' -> 'Vancouver will have'; 'sun run' -> 'Sun Run' (event name) and hyphenated '10-kilometer'. Maintains conditional 'If I got a chance' but clarifies event timing.

× Uh, so person have to pay $60.00.

✓ A person has to pay $60.00.

Use indefinite article 'A' and singular verb 'has' to agree with 'person'. Alternatively 'participants have to pay' could be used for plural.

× Uh, it's just for the donation. Then most of the people like do this work for the. Those peoples who need and I think that it's a really good experience for me because it's in the downtown, so I'm gonna experience that atmosphere.

✓ It is just a charity event, and most people do this to help those in need. I think it would be a great experience for me because it is downtown, so I will be able to experience that atmosphere.

Rewrote fragmented sentences: 'just for the donation' -> 'just a charity event'; 'like do this work for the. Those peoples who need' -> 'do this to help those in need'; corrected 'peoples' to 'people'; 'I'm gonna' -> 'I will' or 'I would' for formality and tense consistency. Fixed sentence structure and clarity.

× So I remember last Sunday we went to a walk in a park that is nearby my house and I went there with my one of my best friend.

✓ I remember last Sunday we went for a walk in a park near my house and I went with one of my best friends.

Use 'went for a walk' (correct collocation); 'a park that is nearby my house' -> 'a park near my house'; 'my one of my best friend' -> 'one of my best friends' to correct word order and pluralization.

× He loves to explore nature. So I decided to go with him and yeah, we went there. We enjoy a lot we.

✓ He loves exploring nature, so I decided to go with him. We had a great time and really enjoyed it.

Maintain past tense: 'I decided' and 'we went' are past, so 'We enjoy a lot' should be 'We enjoyed it a lot' or 'We had a great time'. Corrected awkward repetition and pronoun placement for natural English.