Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve accuracy and coherence: correct verb choice and tense, avoid repetition, and give a concise reason plus a short supporting detail. Use a topic sentence then one supporting sentence linked with because/so. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. I usually cycle instead because I own a bicycle, so I only walk short distances near my home or workplace.

Sugestão: Make the story clear and chronological: start with a clear topic sentence about childhood habit, use past tense consistently, remove fillers, and give one specific reason linked with because. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often walked with my father in the park because he needed daily exercise for his diabetes, and I went with him most mornings and evenings.

Sugestão: Be clear and use appropriate vocabulary: replace incorrect words (work→walk, part→park), give two specific reasons linked with linking words (because, for example). Keep sentences concise and coherent.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and full of nature, and also because parks offer a safe space for physical exercise and fresh air.

Sugestão: Use correct conditional and tense forms and be concise: start with a clear conditional sentence (I would…), give a reason with linking words and one specific detail about motivation. Avoid repeating past events unnecessarily.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take part in the Vancouver Marathon because several friends ran it last year and they said it was a great experience and very rewarding.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: begin with a topic sentence stating where/when, use past tense correctly, and give one specific reason or detail. Remove filler words and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Last week I walked to my friend’s birthday gathering. The party started at 7:30 pm, but I arrived at 8:30 because I had a university class beforehand.

× No, I do not work a lot because I have a bicycle.

✓ No, I do not walk a lot because I have a bicycle.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk', which is a wrong word choice rather than verb tense, but it affects present-tense meaning. Replace with 'walk' to match the question about walking and keep present simple for habitual action.

× That's why if I visit anywhere near my home or my work, this time I use my bicycle.

✓ That's why if I visit anywhere near my home or my work, I use my bicycle.

Unnecessary phrase 'this time' disrupts present simple habit description. Use present simple 'I use' for habitual action and remove extraneous words for clarity.

× Yes. When I was served, uh, I opted and uh, frequently visited outside with my father because my uh, father has uh, had visited every day, uh, morning and evening in park because he has, uh, he had a diabetes problem.

✓ Yes. When I was young, I often went out with my father because he used to visit the park every morning and evening since he had diabetes.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'was served' is wrong — use 'was young'. 'Opted' is incorrect here; use 'often went out'. Use past simple 'went out' for repeated past actions. For habitual past, 'used to' or 'often' plus past simple is correct. Use past perfect 'had diabetes' to indicate his condition in the past; do not mix present perfect 'has had' with past context.

× That's why I frequently visit with him.

✓ That's why I frequently went with him.

Context is past habitual action, so use past simple 'went' rather than present 'visit'. Keep tense consistent with previous sentence describing childhood activities.

× Uh, people love to work in park because part is quite an also natural places.

✓ People love to walk in parks because parks are natural places.

Multiple errors: 'work' should be 'walk' (wrong verb for context). 'Park' singular should be plural 'parks' to generalize. 'Part is quite an also natural places' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'parks are natural places'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'parks are'.

× So people go visit a park and work there sometimes because they take physical exercise.

✓ So people visit parks and exercise there sometimes.

'Go visit a park and work there' uses wrong verbs; use 'visit' and 'exercise'. Use present simple plural 'parks' for general statement and 'exercise' as the correct verb for taking physical activity.

× If I had a chance, I definitely joined Vancouver Marathon because I had last year most of some of my friend had joined this marathon.

✓ If I had the chance, I would definitely join the Vancouver Marathon because many of my friends joined it last year.

This is a second conditional: use 'If I had the chance, I would ...' not past 'joined'. Also correct article 'the Vancouver Marathon'. Replace awkward phrase 'I had last year most of some of my friend had joined' with 'many of my friends joined it last year'.

× They complete the marathon and they got some prize and they told me their experience.

✓ They completed the marathon, won some prizes, and told me about their experience.

Use past simple 'completed' for finished past actions. Use 'won' for prize acquisition. Add 'about' after 'told me' to indicate what they told.

× So I am interested to join there.

✓ So I am interested in joining.

'Interested to join there' is unidiomatic. Use 'interested in joining' for expressing interest. Omit 'there' because location is already clear or add 'the marathon' if needed: 'interested in joining the marathon.'

× Yes, uh, last uh, week, uh, my friend had birthday and so their birthday uh, uh, occasion started 7:30 PM, but I had uh, joined with them, uh, 830 due to my university class.

✓ Last week was my friend's birthday, and the celebration started at 7:30 PM, but I joined them at 8:30 because of my university class.

Use past simple for specific past events: 'was my friend's birthday', 'started at 7:30 PM', 'joined them at 8:30'. Remove unnecessary past perfect 'had birthday' and 'had joined' because simple past is appropriate. Use 'at' with times and 'because of' for reason. Use singular 'friend's' and match pronouns: 'them' if friend gender unspecified.