Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변이 질문에 직접적이지 않고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 먼저 질문에 대한 명확한 주제문(예: "Yes, I walk a lot.")으로 시작하세요. 그 다음에 구체적인 상황(언제, 어디서 걷는지)과 이유(건강, 휴식 등)를 간결하게 1~2개의 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(for example, usually, after work 등)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 발음이나 문법에서 반복과 생략을 줄이고 동사 사용을 정확히 하세요 (work → walk, working parks → parks for walking 등).

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. Usually I go for a walk in the park after work because it helps me relax and get some exercise. For example, I often stroll for 30 minutes around a nearby green area before dinner.

Sugestão: 기억이 흐릿할 때에도 간단히 과거 형태의 주제문으로 답하고 구체적 기억을 하나 추가하세요. 주어와 동사의 시제를 일관되게(과거형) 사용하고, 'work'와 같은 단어 혼동을 피해 'walk'나 'play'를 사용하세요. 연결어(when I was young, often, usually 등)를 넣어 문장 흐름을 개선하세요.

Exemplo: I don't remember clearly, but I often went outside when I was a child. For example, my friends and I used to play football in the street or walk to the nearby park almost every afternoon.

Sugestão: 질문에 대한 이유를 간결하게 제시하고 구체적 근거를 1~2개 제공하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 단어 선택을 정확히 하세요('working people' → 'people' 또는 'busy people', 'soft' 대신 'crowded' 또는 'noisy' 등). 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 논리를 분명히 하세요.

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because parks offer a peaceful escape from the noise and traffic of the city. For example, the green spaces and trees make it easier to relax and breathe fresh air.

Sugestão: 조건문을 정확히 사용했고 장소를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 장소 설명을 더 구체적으로 하세요(어떤 경로, 풍경, 활동 등). 'Jaguar Land' 같은 표현이 부정확해 보이므로 정확한 지명이나 설명어를 사용하세요. 마지막 문장은 관련된 이유로 바꾸어 응답을 일관성 있게 만드세요.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on Jeju Island. The coastal trails there offer stunning sea views and pleasant weather, which would make a long walk very enjoyable.

Sugestão: 최근에 어디로 걸으러 갔는지 직접적으로 답하세요(과거형). 현재 일상 설명은 간단히 하되 질문에 대한 핵심은 'recent walk'에 집중하세요. 숫자 표현과 문법(‘I working every day 10 thousands over football’는 의미 불분명)을 정리하고, 한두 개의 구체적 디테일(어디에서, 누구와, 무엇을 보았는지)을 추가하세요.

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk in Seoul. I walked along a riverside park near the Han River and enjoyed the city views and people watching.

× Yes, I work a lot. I enjoy the working parks and anywhere I I'm going to working then after dinner or or relax it's enjoy.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot. I enjoy going to parks and anywhere I go to walk. After dinner I relax and enjoy it.

The student mixes present simple verbs with incorrect gerund and infinitive forms and unnecessary words. Use 'walk' for habitual actions (present simple). Use 'enjoy going to parks' (verb + -ing). Use 'anywhere I go to walk' for correct clause ordering. Remove repeated words and use simple present for routines. Suggestion: practice forming 'enjoy + verb-ing' and simple present sentences for habits.

× Actually I can't remember but I think I I like go outside and go work a lot with my friends and we are so activated kids.

✓ Actually I can't remember, but I think I liked going outside and playing a lot with my friends when we were kids.

The sentence mixes present and past. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense 'liked' and 'were'. Use 'liked going' (like + -ing) and a more natural verb 'playing' instead of 'work'. 'Activated' is the wrong form; use 'active' as an adjective. Suggestion: match verb tense to time frame and use 'like + -ing'.

× I think people working people likes working in parks because in urban cities the traffic and as part buildings is quite soft, so the parks green is for.

✓ I think working people like to be in parks because in urban areas traffic and buildings make the environment noisy and crowded, so parks are green and peaceful.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement (likes -> like) and wrong prepositions/phrasing ('in urban areas' not 'in urban cities', 'traffic and buildings make the environment noisy and crowded' clarifies meaning). 'Parks are green and peaceful' replaces unclear 'parks green is for'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence, use 'in urban areas' and clearer noun phrases.

× If I had the chance I would I would like to take a long walk in the Jeju Island. I like the place Jaguar Land because it's beautiful coast and nice climate. It's perfect place to work.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk on Jeju Island. I like the place because it has a beautiful coast and a nice climate. It's a perfect place to walk.

Use conditional correctly: 'If I had the chance, I would like...' Remove repeated 'I would'. Use 'on Jeju Island' (island preposition) and 'a beautiful coast' (article). 'Perfect place to walk' corrects 'work'. Suggestion: use 'on' with islands and check articles before singular countable nouns.

× Actually, in my daily lives, I worked a lot. I working every day 10 thousands over football, but recently I went to Seoul first working, it's a nice place.

✓ Actually, in my daily life, I work a lot. I play football every day for over ten thousand steps, but recently I went to Seoul; it was a nice trip.

The student mixes past and present. For habitual actions use present simple 'I work'. 'Daily life' is singular. 'I play football every day' is natural; 'ten thousand' likely refers to steps, so rephrase. 'Recently I went to Seoul; it was a nice trip' separates past event. Suggestion: match tense to meaning, use correct quantifier expression ('ten thousand') and avoid literal translations.