Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "walking is a really good way" used twice), and correct collocations ('after dinner', not 'after the dinner'; 'digest my food', not 'digest your food'). Use one linking word to add a supporting detail and keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I usually walk with my grandmother after dinner because it helps me digest my food and gives us a chance to talk. For example, we often discuss her plans and family news during our walks.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer with clearer past-tense grammar and specific supporting details. Avoid vague or incorrect time references ('back to 50 years ago' is awkward). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly and limit to a few concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. At that time, we had few home activities—no smartphones and only an old TV—so I spent many afternoons walking and playing with my grandmother.

Sugestão: Structure the answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using correct vocabulary ('immerse yourself in nature', 'greenery' instead of 'green things', 'release hormones' not 'read'). Use a linking word and keep sentences concise.

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because they can connect with nature and relax. For example, immersing yourself in greenery and sunshine can help you unwind and may even boost mood by releasing feel-good hormones like dopamine.

Sugestão: Provide a concise direct answer with clearer reasons and correct grammar. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Mention specific attractions and use linking words ('because', 'for example') to explain why you would choose the place.

Exemplo: I would like to walk on Fenghuang Mountain in Shenzhen because my friend described its extraordinary scenery and many photo spots. For example, the mountain trails and viewpoints sound perfect for long, scenic walks and photography.

Sugestão: Use past tense and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence ('I recently walked...'), give a specific reason (convenience) and avoid informal or dismissive language ('Maybe you are lazy'). Use one linking word to connect idea and keep it polite.

Exemplo: Recently I walked with my grandmother around our neighborhood near our home because it is very convenient. We prefer local walks since parks are farther away and require more effort to reach.

× Actually, I do, I usually work every single night with my grandma after the dinner because I think walking is a really good way for you to digest your food, especially when you eat food.

✓ Actually, I do. I usually walk every night with my grandma after dinner because I think walking is a really good way to help you digest your food, especially after eating.

Uses incorrect verb 'work' instead of 'walk' and unnatural phrases. Tense is present habitual so use simple present 'walk'. 'After the dinner' should be 'after dinner' (article error). 'Help you to digest your food' or 'help you digest your food' is more natural than 'a really good way for you to digest your food'. Remove redundancy 'when you eat food' and replace with 'after eating'.

× And moreover, I think walking is a really good way for me to catch up with my grandma because, uh, she has so many plans to do.

✓ Moreover, I think walking is a really good way for me to catch up with my grandma because she has so many things to do.

Present tense OK but phrase 'plans to do' is awkward; use 'things to do' or 'plans' without 'to do'. Remove filler 'uh'. Maintain simple present 'has'.

× Definitely because when I was a child, it was back to 50 years ago and it doesn't have that much things we can do in our own home at that time.

✓ Definitely. When I was a child, which was about 50 years ago, we didn't have that many things to do at home.

Mixes past and present tenses: use past 'didn't have' not 'doesn't have'. Use 'that many' (quantifier) not 'that much' before countable 'things'. Reorder for clarity and correct time expression 'about 50 years ago'.

× Like we didn't have the cell phones and our television is like some of out of date things.

✓ For example, we didn't have cell phones, and our television was quite outdated.

Pronoun/subject consistency and tense: shift to past 'was'. 'The cell phones' should be 'cell phones' (article error). Phrase 'some of out of date things' is ungrammatical; use 'quite outdated'.

× So every single day I will just hang out with my grandma.

✓ So every day I would just hang out with my grandma.

Describing habitual past action: use past habitual 'would' or 'used to' instead of 'will'. Maintain past context from previous sentences.

× First of all, I think walking to the park is a way that you can get in touch with nature.

✓ First of all, I think walking in the park is a way to get in touch with nature.

Preposition: use 'in the park' not 'to the park' when referring to walking there. Also 'a way that you can get' is wordy; use infinitive 'a way to get'.

× Like when you just be immerse yourself into the nature, you will feel really relaxed.

✓ When you immerse yourself in nature, you will feel really relaxed.

Incorrect auxiliary and form: remove 'be' and use present simple 'immerse yourself'. Preposition 'in' is correct with 'nature' not 'into the nature'.

× And actually the sunshine and the green things can help your body to read some hormones like the dopamine, which can keep yourself in a really good mood.

✓ Actually, sunshine and greenery can help your body release hormones like dopamine, which can keep you in a really good mood.

Word choice and pronouns: 'green things' -> 'greenery'. 'Read' is wrong; use 'release'. 'Yourself' should be 'you'. Remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'sunshine'.

× I want to take a long walk in the Fenghuang mountain in Shenzhen because I I just my friend, she just told me the scenery in this mountain is wonderful and extraordinary.

✓ I want to take a long walk on Fenghuang Mountain in Shenzhen because my friend told me the scenery on the mountain is wonderful and extraordinary.

Article and preposition: names of mountains often use no 'the' with proper name or use 'on' for location: 'on Fenghuang Mountain'. Remove repeated 'I'. Fix redundant phrasing 'she just told me' to 'my friend told me'.

× And she also told me that like the. You can also take a really good picture on it.

✓ She also said that you can take really good pictures there.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Combine into one clear sentence. Use 'there' for location and plural 'pictures' for naturalness.

× So I'm looking forward to having.

✓ So I'm looking forward to going.

Incomplete sentence 'looking forward to having' requires an object; 'going' is the correct gerund to complete the idea. Tense 'I'm looking forward to' is present progressive used for future expectation, which is correct.

× Lately I just hang out with my grandma in my own community, like just this, the road nearby my home, because I think that is really convenient and it is not that hard to get to it.

✓ Lately I have just been hanging out with my grandma in my community, on the road near my home, because I think it is really convenient and not hard to get to.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been hanging out' for actions started in the past and continuing to present. 'Nearby my home' should be 'near my home' or 'on the road near my home'. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'road' and avoid ending with 'to it'.

× Like if you want to walk to in a park or something like that and you need to, uh, you need to take a long ways to go there.

✓ If you want to walk in a park and you need to go a long way to get there,

Incorrect preposition 'walk to in a park' -> 'walk in a park'. 'A long ways' should be 'a long way' or 'long distances'. Remove filler 'uh' and streamline structure.

× Maybe you are lazy.

✓ you might be lazy.

Tone and modality: in context it's better to use modal 'might' to show possibility rather than accusing 'are lazy'. Keeps register polite.