Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start directly (avoid filler like 'But'), use a clear topic sentence then one or two specific details. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' correctly and avoid repetition (e.g. 'walk a lot' repeated).

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot because I don't own a car or a bicycle, so I commute on foot to my research institute every day. I actually enjoy it, as walking clears my mind and gives me a break from a busy workday.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and be more specific about activities. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then provide one or two concrete memories linked with a connective like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid vague phrases like 'very memorable'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked and played outside as a child. For example, my friends and I spent entire afternoons playing tag and climbing trees, so I have vivid memories of how excited we always were.

Sugestão: Give one clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples, using linking words (for example, moreover). Avoid awkward phrasing like 'a walking'.

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because it's good exercise and reduces stress. Moreover, parks provide a pleasant setting to meet friends or take a quiet stroll, which helps clear the mind and improve mood.

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural by giving one clear reason and a concrete image or detail. Replace vague adjectives like 'creative and productive' with specific feelings or outcomes. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Exemplo: I'd like to take a long walk along a sandy beach because I love the sea. Walking there with my family would be relaxing and a great chance to talk and reconnect away from our busy routines.

Sugestão: Remove fillers like 'Uh' and use past tense consistently. Be specific but concise: say the route and one detail about what you noticed. Avoid unclear phrase 'I enjoy watching'—specify what you watched.

Exemplo: Yesterday I walked from the station to my research institute in Newtown, Sydney; it took about 30 minutes to cover the two-kilometre route. I enjoyed watching local shops and street scenes along the way.

× But yes, I work every day a lot because I don't have a car and bicycle.

✓ But yes, I work a lot every day because I don't have a car or a bicycle.

The sentence omits the indefinite article before 'bicycle' and uses 'and' incorrectly between 'car' and 'bicycle'. Use 'a car or a bicycle' to indicate one of those items. Also move 'a lot' to natural position 'work a lot every day' for fluency.

× I have to walk a lot to go to my research institution.

✓ I have to walk a lot to get to my research institution.

While 'go to' is not strictly wrong, native speakers more commonly say 'get to' or 'walk to' in this context. 'Get to my research institution' is more natural. Alternatively 'walk to my research institution' is acceptable.

× Actually, I prefer walking because walking clears my mind and it's important because I'm very busy during daytime.

✓ Actually, I prefer walking because it clears my mind, and it's important since I'm very busy during the daytime.

Repeated use of 'walking' is clumsy; replace the second 'walking' with 'it' (pronoun) to avoid repetition (pronoun usage relates to clarity). Also 'since' fits causal connection, and include 'the' before 'daytime' for correctness.

× Yes, when I was a child, I prefer walking and playing outside.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I preferred walking and playing outside.

The time reference 'when I was a child' requires past tense. 'Prefer' should be past form 'preferred' to match the past time frame.

× I really spend a lot of time outside for playing with my friends.

✓ I really spent a lot of time playing outside with my friends.

Past time requires past tense 'spent'. Also 'playing outside with my friends' is the natural word order; remove unnecessary preposition 'for'.

× It is very memorable and I still remember how we were excited.

✓ It is very memorable, and I still remember how excited we were.

The clause 'how we were excited' is ungrammatical in English word order. Use 'how excited we were' to describe their emotional state. Also add comma for coordination.

× People like walking in parks because it's beneficial for their health.

✓ People like walking in parks because it's beneficial to their health.

Use 'beneficial to' rather than 'beneficial for' in this context; both are sometimes used, but 'beneficial to their health' is more idiomatic.

× Additionally, they can enjoy communication with others and a walking can clear their minds.

✓ Additionally, they can enjoy socializing with others, and a walk can clear their minds.

'Communication' is odd; 'socializing' fits better. 'A walking' is incorrect; use the noun 'a walk'. Also comma before coordinate conjunction improves flow.

× I'd like to walk on the beach because simply I like the sea.

✓ I'd like to walk on the beach simply because I like the sea.

'Simply' is misplaced; place it before 'because' or after subject for natural order. This is a word order correction to improve clarity.

× It would be a creative and productive moment for me.

✓ It would be a pleasant and refreshing time for me.

'Creative and productive moment' is unusual for a walk on the beach; 'pleasant and refreshing time' is more appropriate. This corrects word choice (adjectives) for natural meaning.

× Uh, yesterday I walked to the research institution in Newtown, Sydney.

✓ Yesterday I walked to the research institution in Newtown, Sydney.

Remove filler 'Uh' in formal responses. Past tense 'walked' is correct for 'yesterday'. This suggestion improves register rather than correcting grammar.

× It takes about 30 minutes because I need to walk for a 2 kilometers from the station to the research institution.

✓ It takes about 30 minutes because I need to walk about 2 kilometres from the station to the research institution.

Do not use 'a' before '2 kilometres'. Use 'about' for approximation and correct noun form 'kilometres'. Also remove 'for' which is unnecessary. Use local spelling 'kilometres' or 'kilometers' consistently.

× I enjoy watching.

✓ I enjoy watching people and the surroundings.

'I enjoy watching' is a sentence fragment; it needs an object to complete the meaning. Provide a likely object such as 'people and the surroundings' to make it grammatical and coherent.