Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct vocabulary, use clearer structure and avoid hesitation. Start with a direct topic sentence, briefly describe situation with precise words and one supporting detail. Correct errors like 'soul' -> 'city' and reduce filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot, mainly because my university is on a hill outside the city. After I get off the train I have to climb up to campus, so I walk every day to and from the station.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. Start with a clear past tense topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a linking word. Avoid repetition and minor grammar mistakes.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went for walks with my parents when I was a child, especially in the evenings after dinner. I usually asked them to join me, and although they sometimes refused, we still managed to walk together most weeks.

Sugestão: Be more natural and specific; avoid absolute words like 'only'. Use linking words and correct pronouns. Give a reason and an example for clarity.

Exemplo: I think many people walk in parks to enjoy nature and escape busy city life. For example, in Korea there are fewer green spaces in urban areas, so parks provide a peaceful place to relax and breathe fresh air.

Sugestão: Use a conditional structure correctly and avoid repetition. State the location clearly and give a specific reason. Remove hesitations and awkward phrasing like 'following the I' and 'unless the weather is not that bad.'

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the Hangang River in Seoul because the riverside paths are scenic and peaceful, especially on clear days.

Sugestão: Be precise and natural: say when you went and why the library counts as a walk destination. Avoid filler phrases and clarify names. Use one or two supporting details.

Exemplo: Recently I walked to the large Kyobo Library near my hometown. Even though it's indoors, the library has spacious corridors and a courtyard, so I enjoy strolling there and browsing books.

× Yes, I do walk a lot, especially when I go to university.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot, especially when I go to university.

The original uses 'do walk' which is unnecessary in a simple present affirmative sentence. Use the simple present 'I walk' to describe habitual actions. Suggestion: avoid emphatic 'do' unless emphasizing contrast or stress.

× Unfortunately my university is on the mountain in the middle of the soul, so after I take off from the train, I need to go to uh, climb the mountain to get university.

✓ Unfortunately my university is on a mountain in the middle of the soul, so after I get off the train, I need to climb the mountain to get to the university.

Multiple issues: 'on the mountain' can be 'on a mountain' (article); 'take off from the train' is incorrect — use 'get off the train' for leaving a train; 'go to uh, climb the mountain' is awkward — use 'need to climb the mountain'; 'to get university' needs the preposition 'to' and the article 'the university'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for transport ('get off') and include appropriate articles and prepositions ('a mountain', 'get to the university').

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This sentence is correct past tense question form; no change needed. Explanation: 'Did' plus base verb 'go' correctly forms a past simple question about habitual past actions.

× When I was a child, I really liked to take a walk with my parents, especially at evening after dinner.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked to take a walk with my parents, especially in the evening after dinner.

Use the prepositional phrase 'in the evening' instead of 'at evening'. 'In the evening' is the standard collocation. The rest of the sentence correctly uses past tense for past habits.

× I always ask for taking a walk with my parents and sometimes they refused it, but I really liked it.

✓ I always asked to take a walk with my parents and sometimes they refused, but I really liked it.

Tense consistency: the context is past ('When I was a child'), so change 'ask' to past 'asked'. 'Ask for taking a walk' is unidiomatic; use 'asked to take a walk'. 'They refused it' should be 'they refused' or 'they refused me' — 'refused' alone is sufficient. Ensure all verbs match past timeframe.

× Umm. I think it's the only chance to feel nature.

✓ Umm. I think it's the only chance to experience nature.

'Feel nature' is understandable but non-idiomatic; native speakers say 'experience nature'. This is a lexical/pronoun choice issue (better verb). Suggestion: use 'experience' or 'connect with' for natural settings.

× We don't have much nature, uh, inside of the cities.

✓ We don't have much nature inside the cities.

'Inside of the cities' is awkward; 'inside the cities' or better 'in the cities' is standard. Remove unnecessary 'of'. Suggestion: use 'in the cities' for general statements.

× So walking in the park is a kind of connection between US and nature.

✓ So walking in the park is a kind of connection between us and nature.

Use the lowercase pronoun 'us' rather than uppercase 'US' (which reads as United States). Ensure correct pronoun case and capitalization.

× If I have any chance to take long walk, then I would like to walk in following the I.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would like to walk along the Han River.

The sentence mixes present conditional with modal 'would'. For a hypothetical situation, use the past simple 'had' in the if-clause. 'take long walk' needs articles: 'take a long walk'. 'walk in following the I' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'walk along the Han River'. Use 'along' for walking beside a river and correct river name spelling.

× I would like to walk following the Hangang River.

✓ I would like to walk along the Hangang River.

Use the preposition 'along' to indicate walking beside a river. 'Following' is not idiomatic in this context.

× It's really good to take a walk usually, uh, unless the weather is not that bad.

✓ It's really good to take a walk usually, unless the weather is bad.

The phrase 'unless the weather is not that bad' is a double negative and confusing. 'Unless the weather is bad' clearly expresses the exception. Alternatively, use 'as long as the weather is not bad'. Suggestion: avoid double negatives.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is acceptable in questions about recent past, but native speakers more commonly use 'recently' with 'did'. Either is acceptable; recommended change to 'recently' for naturalness. No tense error.

× I went to the library to take a walk.

✓ I went to the library to study, not to take a walk.

Original sentence is grammatical but context indicates odd behavior 'went to library to take a walk'. If speaker intends to say they walked around the library area, rephrase to 'I went to the library area for a walk'. If they mean they visited the library, 'to study' fits. Provide clarified alternatives to fix semantic oddity.

× Actually, it's a little bit funny to say that I went to library to take a walk, but there is a really big library in front of my hometown and it's called, it means Kybo library.

✓ Actually, it's a little bit funny to say that I went to the library to take a walk, but there is a really big library near my hometown and it's called Kyobo Library.

Use the definite article 'the library' when referring to a specific library. 'In front of my hometown' is awkward; use 'near my hometown' or 'in front of my house in my hometown'. 'It's called, it means Kybo library' is ungrammatical; simply 'it's called Kyobo Library'. Also correct spelling to 'Kyobo' and capitalize proper noun. Suggestion: use articles with singular countable nouns and clean up phrasing.