Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrases like "Nobody depends on my situation," reduce hesitations, and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "however", "so"). Be specific about frequency and routine. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually walk a lot when I have time. I aim for at least 10,000 steps most days, but recently I have been very busy with work, so I can only manage short walks in the evenings. However, I try to squeeze in a longer walk at weekends to keep fit.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "as a result") to explain reasons and feelings. Include a specific example or memory to enrich the answer and keep it concise.

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I couldn’t go out alone, so I always waited for my father to come home and we would walk together. I remember being excited about those walks because we often visited a small park near our house and he would buy me an ice cream afterward.

Sugestão: Give a clear, structured answer: state main reasons, then expand with specific details and avoid hesitations and vague words like "grandy." Use linking words such as "firstly" and "also". Mention concrete benefits (fresh air, exercise, scenery) to show range of vocabulary.

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks for several reasons. Firstly, parks offer green space and fresh air, which helps people relax and reduce stress. Also, parks provide social opportunities where friends and families can meet, and the scenery makes exercise more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Be precise and avoid incorrect or exaggerated facts (1212 kilometers seems unlikely). Use a clear topic sentence, add reasons why you chose the place (scenery, challenge, wildlife), and finish the thought without trailing off. Limit to three to four sentences.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would walk the Koonang Linear Trail near Melbourne because it follows a lovely creek and passes native bushland. I’d like it for the peaceful scenery and the opportunity to see local birds, and I think it would be a rewarding long-distance walk.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence and add one specific detail about the park or your routine to enrich the answer. Remove hesitations like "uh" and avoid redundant phrases such as "relax myself." Use linking words like "after" or "because" if needed.

Exemplo: Lately I went for a walk in Westerford Park, which is close to my home. After work I usually stroll there to unwind because the quiet paths and trees help me feel calm and refreshed.

× Nobody depends on my situation.

✓ No one depends on my situation.

'Nobody' is not wrong but 'no one' is more natural here. More importantly, the sentence is slightly awkward; using 'no one' clarifies the subject. Use 'no one' or rephrase as 'It depends on my situation' if intended meaning is different.

× If I have the time, I tend to walk a lot.

✓ If I have time, I tend to walk a lot.

Omit the article 'the' before 'time' in this general conditional; native speakers typically say 'have time'. Keep present tense for habitual actions.

× I try to complete at least 10,000 steps every day.

✓ I try to complete at least 10,000 steps every day.

Sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. Included for completeness that the article is fine.

× But these days I'm very busy with work so I don't really find a lot of free time to go for a walk.

✓ But these days I'm very busy with work, so I don't really have much free time to go for a walk.

Use 'have' with 'free time' instead of 'find' to sound natural. Replace 'a lot of free time' with 'much free time' in negative sentences. Add a comma before 'so' joining clauses.

× So when I was a child, I was not allowed to go on my own for a walk.

✓ When I was a child, I was not allowed to go for a walk on my own.

Move 'on my own' after the verb phrase for natural word order. Tense 'was not allowed' is correct.

× So I would always wait for my father to come home from work and then he would take me outside for a walk.

✓ I would always wait for my father to come home from work, and then he would take me outside for a walk.

Sentence is grammatically correct; add a comma before 'and' for clarity. 'Would' is appropriate to describe repeated past actions.

× Uh, but I would always enjoy walking and I would be very excited, uh, when my father would take me on a walk.

✓ I always enjoyed walking and I was very excited when my father took me on a walk.

When describing habitual actions in the past, use past simple ('enjoyed', 'was', 'took') rather than repeated 'would' to avoid redundancy and improve clarity.

× I believe the main reason why people like to walk in parks is that they can see other people and communicate with them.

✓ I believe the main reason people like to walk in parks is that they can see other people and communicate with them.

Remove 'why' after 'reason'—'the reason people...' or 'the reason why people...' both work, but 'the main reason why' is redundant. Either 'the main reason people...' or 'the main reason why people...' is preferred.

× Apart from that, parks are usually uh, green.

✓ Apart from that, parks are usually green.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. The adjective 'green' is correct; no other grammatical changes needed.

× So people have this connection with nature that they feel relaxed after they see grandy.

✓ So people feel a connection with nature and feel relaxed after they see greenery.

'Have this connection with nature that they feel relaxed' is awkward; restructure to 'feel a connection with nature and feel relaxed'. 'Grandy' is incorrect — likely intended 'greenery'. Use correct noun 'greenery' to refer to plants.

× Well, if I was to choose one place, I would definitely choose Kunang Linear Trail in Melbourne.

✓ Well, if I were to choose one place, I would definitely choose Kunang Linear Trail in Melbourne.

In hypothetical conditional sentences contrary to fact, use the subjunctive 'were' after 'if' ('if I were to...') for formal correctness. Many speakers say 'if I was', but 'if I were' is grammatically preferred.

× It's a very long 1212 kilometers walk.

✓ It's a very long 1,212-kilometre walk.

Use singular measure 'walk' with a hyphenated compound adjective: '1,212-kilometre walk' (British spelling 'kilometre' or 'kilometer' for US). Also format the number with commas and use hyphenation between number+unit and noun.

× It's a linear park and a lot of people, uh, they go for.

✓ It's a linear park and a lot of people go there for walks.

Original sentence is incomplete and contains an unnecessary pronoun 'they' after the subject. Remove filler 'uh' and complete the idea: 'go there for walks' or 'use it for walking'.

× I went for a walk in Westerford Park.

✓ I went for a walk in Westerford Park.

Sentence is correct; past simple 'went' correctly answers 'Where did you go for a walk?'. Included to indicate no change needed.

× It's very close to my home and when I come home from work, I usually go there, uh, just relax myself and I feel really, uh, at peace there.

✓ It's very close to my home, and when I come home from work I usually go there to relax and feel really at peace.

Replace 'go there, just relax myself' with 'go there to relax'—use infinitive 'to relax' for purpose. 'Relax myself' is non-idiomatic; simply 'relax' is correct. Remove filler 'uh' and combine clauses with proper punctuation. 'Feel really at peace' is idiomatic.