Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and singular/plural errors and avoid redundancy (e.g., “stretch my legs” not “stretch my leg”).

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot at weekends. I live in a dormitory and rarely leave campus during the week, so walking gives me fresh air and helps me stretch my legs; I usually walk for about an hour around the nearby area.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and provide one specific detail. Begin with a topic sentence, then add a linked supporting detail. Fix grammar (e.g., “went,” “had a great time”).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My house was close to the community park, so when I was a child I often went there with my dad and we had a great time playing and feeding the ducks.

Sugestão: Be direct and give clear, specific reasons linked logically. Use correct grammar and simpler phrasing. Limit to two or three concise points and use linking words like “because” and “also.”

Exemplo: I think people like walking in parks because the air is fresher and the surroundings are peaceful. Also, parks provide safe space for exercise, which motivates people who see others walking.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct place names and grammar. Start with a clear choice, give one or two reasons, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use conditional tense correctly (e.g., “If I had the chance, I would go to…”).

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would go to Lumpini Park in Bangkok because it is beautiful and often hosts cultural events; I’d enjoy walking there and watching local dancers.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly with a clear past tense sentence describing the location and one specific detail about the walk. Avoid unclear phrases like “Conclude with many excellent people walking.”

Exemplo: Recently I walked in the small park near my house. It was easy to get to and popular with locals, so I enjoyed watching families and joggers while I walked.

× Yes I do walk a lot on weekends because I live in a dormitory and I don't have many chances to leave the campus during weeks, so walking helps me to get some fresh air and stretch my leg with also make me healthier and I usually go for an hour long walk around nearby.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot on weekends because I live in a dormitory and I don't have many chances to leave the campus during the week, so walking helps me get some fresh air, stretch my legs, and makes me healthier. I usually go for an hour-long walk nearby.

Multiple present tense and verb form issues: 'I do walk' is unnecessary emphasis; use simple present 'I walk'. 'During weeks' should be 'during the week' for habitual time. 'Stretch my leg' should be plural 'stretch my legs' when referring generally. The clause 'with also make me healthier' mixes structures; use parallel verbs 'helps me get..., stretch..., and makes me healthier'. Use hyphen in 'hour-long' and place 'nearby' after 'walk'. Suggestion: keep simple present for habits and use parallel structure for coordinated verbs.

× Yes, I usually did because my house is not that far from the park that exists in my community. So when I was a child I always go there with my dad and having great time together.

✓ Yes, I did because my house was not that far from the park in my community. When I was a child I always went there with my dad and had a great time together.

Inconsistent past tense usage: 'usually did' is acceptable but 'my house is' should be 'my house was' to match past context. 'The park that exists' is awkward; 'the park in my community' is natural. 'I always go' should be past 'I always went', and 'having great time' should be 'had a great time' to complete the past-tense clause. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout when talking about childhood.

× I think it because the fresh air in the park and also the environment that people are making themselves healthier and continuing exercise with, which inspired a lot for people who walking nearby.

✓ I think it's because of the fresh air in the park and the pleasant environment, which encourage people to exercise and become healthier. The atmosphere also inspires many people who are walking nearby.

Several sentence structure and grammar problems: 'I think it because' needs 'I think it's because of'. 'The environment that people are making themselves healthier and continuing exercise with' is ungrammatical; replace with a clear relative clause 'the pleasant environment, which encourages people to exercise and become healthier'. 'Which inspired a lot for people who walking nearby' should be 'which inspires many people who are walking nearby'. Suggestion: rewrite complex ideas into shorter clauses and ensure correct relative pronouns and verb forms.

× I would like to go many places but if I had to choose one it would be Umm Lumpy Park which you located in Bangkok which is now very popular in dancing Arabic also. So I if I have chance I would go there for some walk.

✓ I would like to visit many places, but if I had to choose one it would be Umm Lumpy Park, which is located in Bangkok and is now very popular for Arabic dancing. If I had the chance, I would go there for a walk.

Errors in conditional and present tense: 'which you located' should be 'which is located'. 'Popular in dancing Arabic' should be 'popular for Arabic dancing'. 'So I if I have chance I would go' mixes present and conditional; use 'If I had the chance, I would go' to match the hypothetical condition. Suggestion: use correct passive 'is located', correct preposition 'popular for', and maintain consistent conditional structure.

× It is the place that I'd sit before the park near my house because it is easy to get there and it's located not too far. Conclude with many excellent people walking.

✓ Recently I went to the park near my house because it is easy to get to and is not too far away. Many pleasant people were walking there.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical: 'It is the place that I'd sit before the park' is meaningless. Use specific past reference 'Recently I went to the park near my house'. 'Easy to get there' should be 'easy to get to'. 'Conclude with many excellent people walking' is incorrect; interpret as 'Many pleasant people were walking there'. Suggestion: state time clearly, use correct idioms ('get to'), and choose appropriate adjectives ('pleasant' rather than 'excellent').