Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct collocations (e.g. 'support pedestrians', 'no sidewalks'), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail to support your point and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. My city isn’t pedestrian-friendly and there are few sidewalks, so most people rely on private cars or buses. Consequently, I rarely walk for transportation.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, use past tense consistently, and add a brief specific memory or reason. Replace vague phrases like 'couldn't remember vividly' with clearer language and use linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so').

Exemplo: Not really. I rarely walked as a child because my neighborhood lacked sidewalks, and my family usually drove to school and shops.

Sugestão: Give a concise, natural answer and avoid awkward phrases. Use precise vocabulary ('keep fit', 'relax', 'enjoy fresh air') and provide 1–2 reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g. 'it also has a good vibe' not 'fuse').

Exemplo: People walk in parks to keep fit and relieve stress. Also, parks offer fresh air and a pleasant atmosphere, which makes exercise more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Use conditional and future forms correctly and be more specific about features you like. Keep sentences clear and limited to 2–3. Replace 'massive' with more natural adjectives if needed.

Exemplo: I would choose the lake near my office because it has wide paths, green spaces and facilities like a small gym and playground, so I could walk comfortably for hours.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and finish your ideas. Use varied vocabulary and correct articles/plurals ('a playground', 'a small park'). Combine short points with linking words and give one concrete detail about the experience.

Exemplo: Recently I walked with a coworker at the lake near our office. The park is large and green, with a playground and walking paths, and the air felt fresh so we enjoyed a relaxing hour there.

× I would say no because in my city it doesn't support for pedestrians and there is no sidewalk.

✓ I would say no because my city does not support pedestrians and there are no sidewalks.

Use of 'support for pedestrians' is incorrect; 'support pedestrians' (verb + object) is correct. Also 'there is no sidewalk' should match plural 'most of people' later, but here better 'there are no sidewalks' if referring generally. Use 'does not' instead of contraction 'doesn't' for formality is optional. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there are'. Suggestion: say 'my city does not support pedestrians and there are no sidewalks.'

× Most of people in my cities are using private vehicle or transportation such as buses or terrain.

✓ Most people in my city use private vehicles or public transportation such as buses or trains.

Errors: 'Most of people' should be 'Most people'; 'my cities' conflicts with 'my city' earlier; use singular 'city'; 'are using' unnecessary continuous—use simple present 'use'; 'private vehicle' needs plural 'vehicles'; 'transportation' collides with 'public transportation'; 'terrain' is wrong word, should be 'trains'. Suggestion: use: 'Most people in my city use private vehicles or public transportation such as buses or trains.'

× I couldn't remember vividly about my childhood but I would say no because once again my city is not friendly for pedestrians and also I used to go everywhere with cars or motorcycles.

✓ I cannot remember my childhood vividly, but I would say no because, once again, my city is not friendly to pedestrians and I used to go everywhere by car or motorcycle.

Use present tense 'cannot remember' or 'don't remember' to express current lack of memory; 'remember vividly about' is incorrect collocation—'remember vividly' or 'remember... vividly'; 'friendly for pedestrians' should be 'friendly to pedestrians'; 'go everywhere with cars' should be 'go everywhere by car' or 'by motorcycle'. Suggestion: 'I cannot remember my childhood vividly, but I would say no because my city is not friendly to pedestrians and I used to go everywhere by car or motorcycle.'

× These days people are trying to have good body and also trying to be healthy, especially for those around 30 and 40.

✓ These days people are trying to be in good shape and healthy, especially those in their 30s and 40s.

'Have good body' is not natural; use 'be in good shape' or 'be fit'; 'trying to be healthy' is fine but combine smoothly; 'those around 30 and 40' should be 'those in their 30s and 40s' to indicate age groups. Suggestion: 'These days people are trying to be in good shape and healthy, especially those in their 30s and 40s.'

× I think that's the reason they like going to the park because it also have a good fuse.

✓ I think that's why they like going to the park, because it also has good facilities.

'That's the reason they like' is okay but 'that's why they like' is more natural; 'it also have' has subject-verb agreement error—'it has'; 'a good fuse' is incorrect word choice—likely meant 'facilities' (amenities). Use plural 'facilities'. Suggestion: 'I think that's why they like going to the park, because it also has good facilities.'

× I probably going to take a walk into to the lake in front of my office.

✓ I will probably take a walk to the lake in front of my office.

Missing auxiliary verb: 'I probably going to' should be 'I will probably' or 'I'm probably going to'; 'take a walk into to the lake' incorrect preposition—use 'to the lake' or 'down to the lake'. Remove duplicate 'to'. Suggestion: 'I will probably take a walk to the lake in front of my office.'

× It's very massive and also it has lots of amenities that I can use such as playground or like a little gym.

✓ It's very large, and it also has many amenities I can use, such as a playground or a small gym.

'Massive' is acceptable but 'large' is more natural for a lake; 'lots of amenities' is informal—use 'many amenities'; 'such as playground or like a little gym' needs articles and clearer adjectives: 'a playground' and 'a small gym'. Also remove redundant 'like'. Suggestion: 'It's very large, and it also has many amenities I can use, such as a playground or a small gym.'

× The last time I had a walk, it was with my coworker.

✓ The last time I went for a walk, it was with my coworker.

'Had a walk' is understandable but 'went for a walk' is the natural past expression. Maintain past simple 'went'. Suggestion: 'The last time I went for a walk, it was with my coworker.'

× We went to the lake in front of our office. It's very massive, it has playground and it also has a little part there.

✓ We went to the lake in front of our office. It's very large; it has a playground and a small area there.

Comma splice between two independent clauses—replace with semicolon or period. 'Massive' better as 'large'; 'it has playground' needs article 'a playground'; 'little part' unclear—use 'small area' or 'a small park area'. Suggestion: 'We went to the lake in front of our office. It's very large; it has a playground and a small area there.'

× It's very green, it has good air, It doesn't have any pollution at all. And also.

✓ It's very green and has clean air; there is no pollution at all.

Comma splices: combine with conjunction or split sentences. 'Has good air' should be 'has clean air' or 'the air is clean'; 'It doesn't have any pollution' awkward—use 'there is no pollution' or 'it has no pollution'. Trailing 'And also.' is a sentence fragment—remove it. Suggestion: 'It's very green and has clean air; there is no pollution at all.'