Keys— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Watch verb tense and article use (e.g., “the electronic lock,” not “clock”).

Exemplo: Not really. My house now has an electronic lock, so I usually use my fingerprint to open the door. However, when I lived with a traditional lock, I always carried my keys with me.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, then provide one or two concise specific reasons. Use correct word forms and avoid fillers like “you know.” Improve coherence with linking words like “because” or “so.”

Exemplo: No, I haven't lost my keys. This is because I try to be very careful and I use a large keychain so my keys are harder to misplace.

Sugestão: Good direct answer and a specific example. Tighten wording: use past simple consistently and reduce unnecessary words. Use a linking word like “however” correctly to contrast.

Exemplo: No, I have never forgotten my keys. However, once I was locked out when the electronic lock’s battery died, so I used a portable power bank to restart the lock and get back in.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence and give two concise, specific conditions using linking words (e.g., “if…, but…”). Remove fillers and repetitions, and correct grammar (e.g., “trust is not built”).

Exemplo: It depends. If you have a close, trusting relationship with your neighbour, it can be convenient to leave a spare key with them; but if you don't know them well, I wouldn't recommend it.

× Not really because now my house used the the electronic clock so the keys are not that necessary anymore because I use the fingerprints to open my door.

✓ Not really, because now my house uses an electronic lock, so keys are not that necessary anymore since I use my fingerprint to open the door.

Errors: 'used the the electronic clock' is ungrammatical and wrong tense; subject-verb agreement: 'my house used' should be present 'uses'; 'the electronic clock' should be 'an electronic lock' for correct noun; 'I use the fingerprints' is awkward—use singular 'my fingerprint' or 'fingerprints' consistently; 'open my door' -> 'open the door' is more natural. Suggestion: use present simple for current facts (my house uses) and choose correct nouns ('electronic lock') and singular/plural consistency ('my fingerprint').

× But in the past when I use the traditional lock I always brought the keys with me.

✓ But in the past, when I used a traditional lock, I always brought the keys with me.

Error: tense mix. 'when I use' is present tense while referring to the past; should be past simple 'used'. Keep past time reference consistent. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits ('used', 'always brought').

× I don't think I have ever lost my keys, mainly because I'm self aware that I'm not a really careful person so I try to be as cautious as possible and I also use a really big key chains so you know, to reduce the possibility of losing key.

✓ I don't think I have ever lost my keys, mainly because I'm self-aware that I'm not a very careful person, so I try to be as cautious as possible, and I also use a really big keychain to reduce the possibility of losing keys.

Errors: 'self aware' should be hyphenated 'self-aware'; 'a really big key chains' mixes singular/plural—use 'a keychain' (singular) or 'big keychains' (plural); 'losing key' missing article/plural—use 'losing keys'. Also 'a really careful person' -> 'a very careful person' sounds natural. Suggestion: ensure adjective placement and noun number agreement, hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, and match singular/plural forms ('keychain' vs 'keychains', 'keys').

× No, I have never forgotten my keys. However once I was locked out when the electronic lock battery died, so I had to use a portable power bank to power the lock and get back in.

✓ No, I have never forgotten my keys. However, once I was locked out when the electronic lock's battery died, so I had to use a portable power bank to power the lock and get back in.

Error: missing possessive: 'electronic lock battery' should be 'electronic lock's battery' or 'the battery of the electronic lock'. Otherwise tense and structure are acceptable. Suggestion: use possessive or 'the battery of...' for clarity and add comma after 'However'.

× I think it depends on the closeness between the neighbors and our families because, you know, if we are very, very close and familiar with the neighbors, then it's, I think it's, it's, it's OK to leave the key with them.

✓ I think it depends on how close we are to our neighbors and their families, because if we are very familiar with them, then I think it's OK to leave the key with them.

Errors: awkward phrase 'the closeness between the neighbors and our families'—better 'how close we are to our neighbors and their families'; repeated 'it's, I think it's, it's, it's' is redundant—reduce to 'I think it's OK'; 'leave the key' is acceptable but ensure consistency with plural 'keys' if needed. Suggestion: simplify sentence structure, use natural collocations ('how close we are to someone'), and remove repetitions.

× But if, uh, the trust are not built yet, then I don't think it's a wise choice.

✓ But if trust has not been built yet, then I don't think it's a wise choice.

Errors: 'the trust are not built yet' has number and article issues: 'trust' is uncountable and takes singular verb; use passive perfect 'has not been built' to indicate the process of building trust. Suggestion: treat 'trust' as uncountable noun and use appropriate verb form ('trust has not been built' or 'we haven't built trust yet').