Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and use correct names and grammar. Add one specific example with a brief detail (location or height) and use linking words for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home. For example, the Lotte Tower, which is one of the tallest skyscrapers in Vietnam, is only a 20-minute drive away. Its glass façade and observation deck attract a lot of visitors, so it’s a notable landmark in my area.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct word choice and grammar. Avoid filler words and mispronunciations. Give a short reason and one specific example of when you did take photos, using linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Not usually. I rarely take photos of buildings, but I did photograph the Landmark 81 when I visited it last year because I was impressed by its modern design and great height. The lighting at sunset made the building look spectacular, so I wanted to capture it.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and improve grammar. Mention particular features you want to see and what you expect to do there.

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower. I’m fascinated by its iron lattice structure and the panoramic views from the top, and I’d also enjoy walking around the Champ de Mars and talking to local people to practice my French.

× Yes, of course, there are actually many tall buildings where I was, where I'm living.

✓ Yes, of course, there are actually many tall buildings near where I live.

The original uses awkward prepositional phrases 'where I was, where I'm living'. Use a single prepositional structure 'near where I live' to indicate location. Also 'I'm living' is present progressive but simple present 'I live' is more natural for habitual location. Suggestion: Use 'near where I live' or 'near my home'.

× Uh, for example, you might heard about Lotte Towel, which is one of the highest tall building in Nonihana, but also Vietnam.

✓ Uh, for example, you might have heard about Lotte Tower, which is one of the tallest buildings in Nonihana and also in Vietnam.

Multiple issues: 'you might heard' is incorrect auxiliary use; correct form is 'might have heard' (modal perfect) — classified here as pronoun/auxiliary misuse. 'Lotte Towel' is likely a name error corrected to 'Lotte Tower'. 'one of the highest tall building' is ungrammatical: use 'one of the tallest buildings'. Also 'but also Vietnam' should be 'and also in Vietnam' to connect correctly. Suggestion: Use 'you might have heard about' and 'one of the tallest buildings'.

× Umm, I would say not really.

✓ Umm, I would say not really.

No grammatical error affecting the listed categories; sentence is acceptable as a response meaning 'not really'. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× The only time I took a photo of the toe beating was back when I visited a the tallest building of Vietnam, the landmark one.

✓ The only time I took a photo of the top building was back when I visited the tallest building in Vietnam, the Landmark 81.

Original contains several errors: 'toe beating' is likely a mispronunciation; corrected to 'top building' or the intended landmark name. 'a the tallest building' has incorrect article usage; use 'the tallest building'. Use 'in Vietnam' not 'of Vietnam' for location. 'the landmark one' is vague — use the actual name 'Landmark 81' if intended. Suggestion: Use definite article 'the' with unique buildings and correct noun names.

× I was surprised by their architecture and the the height.

✓ I was surprised by its architecture and its height.

The student used the plural possessive pronoun 'their' to refer to a singular building; use singular possessive 'its'. Also there is a repeated 'the the'. Suggestion: Use 'its architecture and its height' when referring to one building.

× MMM I was saying Eiffel Tower is my dream building to visit.

✓ Um, I would say the Eiffel Tower is my dream building to visit.

Awkward phrasing 'I was saying Eiffel Tower is my dream building to visit.' Use present tense 'I would say' or simple 'I say' and include the definite article 'the' before 'Eiffel Tower'. Suggestion: Say 'I would say the Eiffel Tower is my dream to visit' or 'The Eiffel Tower is my dream to visit.'

× I love the architecture of the building and also I love the feeling of walking right there talking to French people.

✓ I love the architecture of the building, and I also love the feeling of walking there and talking to French people.

Original runs verbs together without proper conjunctions and has awkward adverb placement 'right there talking'. Separate actions with 'and' and use parallel gerund forms 'walking there and talking to French people'. Suggestion: Use comma before 'and' and keep verb forms parallel.