Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and more coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, use plural/singular correctly, and combine ideas into one or two concise sentences. Add a linking phrase for clarity and avoid sentence fragments.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, including shopping malls, condominiums and residential towers. For example, a large mixed-use complex opened last year that has shops on the lower floors and apartments above, which makes the area feel very modern.

Sugestão: Correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and avoid repetition. Use linking words to show sequence and purpose, and finish the thought instead of leaving it incomplete. Keep it within 2–4 clear sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, photography is one of my hobbies, and I enjoy collecting images on my phone. In particular, I often photograph interesting buildings because I like their shapes and details, and sometimes I share the best shots with my friends online.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid filler words. Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and finish the final idea. Use correct grammar (e.g., "it shows our culture") and avoid repeating phrases.

Exemplo: There are many notable buildings in my hometown, but I would most like to visit the Parliament building because its architecture is magnificent and it reflects our national history. I have read that the interior has ornate halls and historical paintings, so I would like to see those features in person.

× Yes, there are many tall building near to my home and there are shopping mall.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, and there are shopping malls.

The nouns 'building' and 'shopping mall' are countable and need plural forms when preceded by 'many' or referring to more than one. Also 'near to' is incorrect; use 'near'. Add comma and pluralize for grammatical agreement. Suggestion: Use plural nouns with quantifiers ('many tall buildings', 'shopping malls') and use 'near' not 'near to'.

× Condos and residential buildings.

✓ There are condos and residential buildings.

This fragment lacks a verb and subject; it is a sentence fragment. Complete the sentence by adding a subject and verb to match the previous sentence. Suggestion: Link fragments to a main clause (e.g., 'There are condos and residential buildings').

× Taking photographs is one of my hobby.

✓ Taking photographs is one of my hobbies.

The noun 'hobby' must be plural after the phrase 'one of my'. Also the gerund 'Taking' is acceptable here. Use 'hobbies' to agree with 'one of my'. Suggestion: Use 'one of my hobbies' for correct collocation.

× I like to collecting beautiful and attractive photographs in my phone.

✓ I like collecting beautiful and attractive photographs on my phone.

Use the gerund 'collecting' after 'like' (not 'to collecting') or use 'to collect'. Also use the preposition 'on' for storing items on a phone, not 'in'. Suggestion: Say 'I like collecting...' or 'I like to collect...' and use 'on my phone'.

× I also take some attractive and beautiful buildings photographs.

✓ I also take some attractive and beautiful photographs of buildings.

Word order is incorrect and 'buildings photographs' is a wrong noun phrase. Use 'photographs of buildings' and keep 'photographs' plural to match 'some'. Suggestion: Use the 'noun of noun' structure for photos: 'photographs of buildings'.

× Sometime I share these photographs with my friends and.

✓ Sometimes I share these photographs with my friends.

Use the adverb 'sometimes' (with s). The sentence ends with an extra 'and' producing an incomplete thought. Remove 'and' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Use 'Sometimes' and ensure the sentence is complete.

× And there are so many buildings in my hometown, but, uh, I would, if I had a chance, I would definitely like to visit a Parliament building.

✓ There are so many buildings in my hometown, but if I had the chance, I would definitely like to visit the Parliament building.

Starting with 'And' is unnecessary. The clause contains redundant commas and repeated 'I would'. Use 'if I had the chance' (not 'a chance') for natural phrasing and include definite article 'the' with 'Parliament building' or use 'Parliament' as a proper noun. Remove redundancies and filler words. Suggestion: Simplify conditional clause: 'if I had the chance, I would...' and use 'the Parliament building'.

× I heard about that.

✓ I have heard about it.

When relating past experience to the present, present perfect 'have heard' is more natural. Use 'it' rather than 'that' when referring to the building, and 'about it' is clearer. Suggestion: Use present perfect for experience: 'I have heard about it.'

× The architecture is magnificent.

✓ The architecture is magnificent.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× And uh, uh, it's also shows the culture of our.

✓ It also shows our culture.

The clause has filler words 'And uh, uh,' that should be removed. 'It's also shows' is incorrect: either 'it also shows' or 'it's also showing' but here simple present 'it also shows' is correct. 'The culture of our' is incomplete and misordered; use 'our culture'. Suggestion: Remove fillers, fix verb form to 'it also shows', and use 'our culture'.