Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 개선하세요. 현재 답변은 중복(“no no”)과 어법 오류(‘hotel’ 대신 ‘town’ 혹은 ‘city’)가 있고, 설명이 불명확합니다. 주제문으로 직접 답한 후 한두 문장으로 이유를 덧붙이고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요. 예: ‘No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. My town is quite small and most buildings are low-rise, so the skyline is not very tall.’

Exemplo: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. My town is quite small, so most buildings are low-rise rather than skyscrapers.

Sugestão: 발음과 단어 선택(‘builders’ → ‘buildings’)을 고치고, 문장을 간결하고 논리적으로 구성하세요. 이유를 말할 때는 연결어를 사용하고 구체적인 예시를 포함하세요. 또한 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 제한하세요. 예: ‘Yes, I often photograph buildings because their windows reflect light beautifully. I especially like taking photos of modern glass facades in the morning.’

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because their windows reflect the sunlight and look very bright. For example, I like photographing modern glass facades in the morning when the light is best.

Sugestão: 비격식 표현(‘wanna’)을 피하고 명사 수와 관사 사용을 정확히 하세요(‘a building called the Eiffel Tower’). 이유를 두 부분으로 나눠 명확히 말하고 연결어를 사용하세요. 역사적 중요성과 디자인을 각각 간단히 설명하면 좋습니다. 예: ‘I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower because of its iconic shape and rich history as a symbol of Paris.’

Exemplo: I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower because its iconic shape is very striking and it has an interesting history as a landmark of Paris.

× No, there are no no tall buildings near my home because my hotel is just small city.

✓ No, there are no tall buildings near my home because my town is just small.

The sentence has redundant words and wrong nouns. Remove the repeated 'no'. 'Hotel' is incorrect for 'town'—use 'town' or 'city'. Also use 'small' as an adjective before 'town' without additional article. 개선 제안: 반복 단어 제거, 올바른 명사 선택(town), 형용사 위치 확인.

× Yes, I take photos of builders because the buildings window when I look at outside very shines bright and that is very pretty. So I mostly take photos of buildings.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings because their windows shine brightly when I look outside, and that looks very pretty. So I usually take photos of buildings.

Errors include wrong word 'builders' (people) instead of 'buildings', incorrect noun phrase 'buildings window', incorrect adverb form 'very shines bright' and awkward word order. Use plural possessive 'their windows', adverb 'brightly', and adverb placement 'when I look outside'. Also use 'usually' instead of 'mostly' for frequency. 개선 제안: 올바른 명사 선택(buildings), 소유격 사용(their), 부사 형태(brightly), 자연스러운 빈도 표현(usually).

× I wanna visit, I want to visit building that named Eiffel Tower because the shape of the building is so attractive and they have a history on it.

✓ I want to visit the building called the Eiffel Tower because its shape is very attractive and it has a lot of history.

Multiple issues: informal 'wanna' should be 'want to'; missing article 'the' before 'building' and before 'Eiffel Tower'; incorrect clause 'that named' should be 'called' or 'named'; pronoun agreement 'they have a history on it' is wrong—use 'it has a lot of history' or 'there is a lot of history associated with it'. 개선 제안: 구어체 표현 대체(wanna → want to), 관사 사용(the), 수일치와 자연스러운 표현(it has a lot of history).