Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g. 'a 10-story building', 'I don't feel comfortable'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. My neighborhood has many tall buildings; for example, the block next to mine is a 10-story building. Because of the density, I often feel there is less fresh air and limited sunlight in my home.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific example and a brief reason. Use varied, accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'architectural landmarks', 'historical buildings').

Exemplo: Yes. I often photograph buildings with unique architecture or historical significance. For instance, I recently photographed the Burj Khalifa because I admired its striking design and height.

Sugestão: Make the answer direct and grammatically correct. State the building's name (if known) or the type, its location, and one clear reason for wanting to visit. Avoid vague phrases and filler words.

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to visit the Kingdom Tower in Saudi Arabia, which is on my bucket list. It has about 100 storeys and I want to go to the observation deck because the panoramic views must be mesmerizing.

Sugestão: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and include one or two specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and give a brief positive alternative. Correct grammar: 'I don't prefer living in tall buildings' -> 'I prefer not to live in a tall building.'

Exemplo: I prefer not to live in a tall building because it feels crowded and often lacks sunlight and fresh air. Instead, I would rather live in a detached house where I can have a garden and grow trees.

× It's a 10 story building and I usually don't feel good because too many buildings surrounded by too many large buildings.

✓ It's a 10-story building and I usually don't feel good because there are too many large buildings surrounding it.

The sentence mixes singular 'a 10-story building' with plural 'too many buildings'. Change to 'there are too many large buildings surrounding it' to match singular subject 'building' with the plural surrounding items and include the correct 'there are' construction. Also hyphenate '10-story' as a compound adjective.

× It's difficult to get fresh air and get the sunlight.

✓ It's difficult to get fresh air and sunlight.

Using 'get' twice is redundant and 'the sunlight' is unnecessary because general sunlight doesn't need the definite article. Remove the second 'get' and 'the' to produce a natural expression.

× I usually take pictures, uh, or images of the things which are uniquely constructed or, or have some history.

✓ I usually take pictures of things that are uniquely constructed or have some history.

Use 'things that' instead of 'things which' for natural spoken English, and remove repeated filler words and the unnecessary alternative 'images'. 'Uniquely constructed' is fine; simplify wording for clarity.

× So, uh, I usually, I often take pictures of, uh, of unique architect, uh, blocks.

✓ So I often take pictures of unique architectural blocks.

'Architect' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'architectural'. Remove repeated filler words and extra 'of'. Also 'blocks' can remain plural if referring to multiple building blocks.

× And especially recently I took one picture of Burj Khalifa.

✓ Recently I took a picture of the Burj Khalifa.

Place 'recently' before the verb for natural word order. Use 'a picture' instead of 'one picture'. Include the definite article 'the' before 'Burj Khalifa' which is customary in English.

× Yes, it is there in my bucket list had it the viewpoint.

✓ Yes, it is on my bucket list because of its viewpoint.

Original sentence is ungrammatical. Use 'on my bucket list' to indicate desire and 'because of its viewpoint' to explain why. Remove extraneous words 'had it'.

× It's it is located in Saudi Arabia and it's my uh, wish to visit that place because it was a unique and mesmerizing view from there.

✓ It is located in Saudi Arabia and I wish to visit that place because the view from there is unique and mesmerizing.

Remove duplicate 'it's it is'. Use 'I wish' rather than 'it's my wish' for concision. Change 'it was a unique and mesmerizing view from there' to 'the view from there is unique and mesmerizing' for correct tense and word order.

× It is 100 Storey building uh.

✓ It is a 100-storey building.

Include the indefinite article 'a' before '100-storey building' and hyphenate '100-storey'. Capitalization of 'Storey' should be lowercase.

× I usually don't prefer living living in a tall buildings because I feel it is very, I often feel that it is very crowded.

✓ I usually don't prefer living in tall buildings because I often feel they are very crowded.

Remove duplicated 'living'. Use 'living in tall buildings' (no article) for general plural. Replace 'it is' with 'they are' to agree with plural 'buildings' and avoid repetition by combining phrases.

× Uh, because of that, we get less air and sunlight and the flat will feel like, uh, gloomy.

✓ Because of that, we get less air and sunlight and the flat feels gloomy.

'Less air' is acceptable but 'less sunlight' is fine; remove unnecessary 'the' before 'gloomy' and change 'will feel like' to 'feels' to match general statement. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Instead, I want to stay in an independent house where I can, uh, grow my own trees surrounded by trees.

✓ Instead, I want to live in an independent house where I can grow my own trees and be surrounded by trees.

Use 'live' rather than 'stay' for permanent residence. 'Grow my own trees surrounded by trees' is awkward; clarify as 'grow my own trees and be surrounded by trees'. Remove filler 'uh'.