Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “tall and skyscrapers” is repetitive) and correct verb forms and articles.

Exemplo: Yes — I live in downtown Toronto, where many skyscrapers dominate the skyline. For example, the Financial District has numerous office towers and glass high-rises that you can see from my neighbourhood.

Sugestão: Use a clear time contrast with linking words and avoid repeating phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and add one specific example to make it vivid.

Exemplo: Not anymore. When I first moved to Canada, I often photographed striking buildings, such as the CN Tower and heritage facades, and sent the photos to my family back home to show them the city.

Sugestão: Give a clear statement and two accurate supporting details. Correct factual and grammatical errors (e.g., "a famous architect", clarify ownership). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to explain why you want to visit.

Exemplo: Yes — I would like to visit Casa Loma because it is a historic Gothic Revival mansion in downtown Toronto. It was built by architect E.J. Lennox and is now run as a museum by the city, so I want to see the ornate rooms and gardens.

Sugestão: Make your position clear and correct grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons and give one concrete image or example of what you like about living in a tall building.

Exemplo: Honestly, I have never lived in a high-rise; I grew up in detached and semi‑detached houses. However, I would consider living in a tall building to enjoy panoramic night views of the city, especially from a balcony or high‑floor window.

× I am living in Toronto downtown and the whole city is captured and covered by tall and skyscrapers.

✓ I live in downtown Toronto and the whole city is filled with tall buildings and skyscrapers.

Use simple present 'I live' for permanent situations rather than present continuous 'I am living'. 'Captured and covered by' is unnatural; use 'filled with' or 'full of'. Also 'tall and skyscrapers' mixes forms; use 'tall buildings and skyscrapers'. Suggestion: Use simple present for general facts and choose natural collocations like 'filled with'.

× So I would say in my city there are numbers of tall buildings.

✓ So I would say in my city there are a number of tall buildings.

'Numbers of' is incorrect here; the correct quantifier is 'a number of' to indicate several. Alternatively use 'many' or 'numerous'. Suggestion: Use 'a number of', 'many', or 'numerous' when referring to several items.

× I don't take photos of buildings these days, but when I was new in Canada I used to take a lot of pictures of tall buildings and some eye-catching buildings and I used to send those pictures to back home to my family members.

✓ I don't take photos of buildings these days, but when I was new to Canada I used to take a lot of pictures of tall and eye-catching buildings and I used to send those pictures back home to my family.

Use 'new to Canada' rather than 'new in Canada'. Remove the extra 'to' in 'send those pictures to back home'. 'Family members' can be simplified to 'family'. Also combine adjectives 'tall and eye-catching'. Suggestion: Use correct preposition 'new to' and place 'back home' without 'to'.

× I would like to visit our building which is called Casa Loma.

✓ I would like to visit a building called Casa Loma.

Using 'our' implies ownership which is likely incorrect; use 'a building called' or 'the building called' if previously referenced. Choose 'a' for introducing a place. Suggestion: Use 'a' when introducing a place not owned by the speaker, or 'the' if already known.

× This building is situated in the center of the downtown.

✓ This building is situated in the center of downtown.

'the downtown' is unnecessary; 'downtown' as a noun does not need 'the' when paired with 'in the center of'. Use 'in the center of downtown' or 'in downtown' depending on style. Suggestion: Use 'in the center of downtown' for natural phrasing.

× It was made by a famous architecture from Europe and after that government took this over and it is being run under the city of.

✓ It was built by a famous architect from Europe. After that, the government took it over, and it is now managed by the city.

'Architecture' is the field; the person is an 'architect'. 'Government took this over' should be 'the government took it over' and 'it is being run under the city of' is incomplete and unnatural; use 'managed by the city' or 'run by the city'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'architect', include definite article 'the government', and finish the phrase 'managed by the city'.

× To be honest I have never lived in tall building, I used to live in individual or semi detached homes and if I get a chance I will definitely leave a tall building so I can enjoy the city view during the nights.

✓ To be honest, I have never lived in a tall building. I used to live in detached or semi-detached houses, and if I get the chance I will definitely live in a tall building so I can enjoy the city view at night.

Use the article 'a' before 'tall building'. 'Individual' is unnatural here; use 'detached' houses. 'Semi detached' should be hyphenated 'semi-detached'. 'Leave a tall building' is incorrect—use 'live in a tall building'. 'During the nights' should be 'at night'. Also split into sentences and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use appropriate articles, correct housing terms, and 'live in' for residence. Use 'at night' for general time reference.