Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (verb forms, articles, prepositions), and be more concise. Use linking words to organize reasons and give one or two specific details (e.g., types of buildings and their purposes). Avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city centre. Most are modern office towers and commercial blocks, while a few are high-rise apartment complexes. For example, the large glass office building next to the mall was built five years ago and houses several companies.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct topic sentence, use correct prepositions and word forms, and add a specific example of what you photograph and why. Use a linking word to connect reason and detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I’m fascinated by different architectural styles. For instance, I like to capture ornate facades and symmetrical proportions on my phone, especially the decorative details on old municipal buildings.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement naming the building, correct pronouns and articles, and avoid repetition. Give one specific reason or feature you want to see and use a linking word to explain why.

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to visit the City Art Museum in the heart of town because of its striking architecture and historic galleries. In particular, I want to see the museum’s glass atrium and the rooftop garden, which I’ve heard creates a peaceful atmosphere.

Sugestão: Provide a concise topic sentence, correct articles and verb forms, and avoid contradictory details (sunset is in the evening). Give specific examples of views and one reason why that appeals to you, using linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views of the city skyline. For example, from a high-floor balcony I could watch the sunrise over the park and see city lights at night, which would make the apartment feel more peaceful.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my home because my home is near the center of the city and most of them was built by for the commercial use and house office or some already high risk apartments.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my home because my home is near the center of the city and most of them were built for commercial use and as office buildings, or some are already high-risk apartments.

Original errors: 'most of them was built' uses singular verb with plural subject (subject-verb agreement / singular and plural issue), 'built by for' has extra preposition (incorrect use of prepositions), 'house office' is incorrect collocation and missing plurality, and 'some already high risk apartments' lacks a verb. Correction addresses plural verb 'were', removes the extra 'by', uses 'as office buildings' to show purpose, and adds 'are' before 'already high-risk apartments'. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs (they were), avoid stacking prepositions, and include verbs for clause completeness.

× Yes, I often photograph buildings because I'm really interested by their architecture styles from the really beautiful design or model designs.

✓ Yes, I often photograph buildings because I'm really interested in their architectural styles and the beautiful designs or models.

Original error: 'interested by' is incorrect preposition; 'interested in' is correct. 'architecture styles' should be 'architectural styles' (adjective form). 'from the really beautiful design or model designs' is unclear and uses wrong preposition 'from'. Correction uses 'interested in' and rephrases to 'architectural styles and the beautiful designs or models'. Suggestion: use 'interested in' and convert nouns to adjectives where needed (architecture -> architectural).

× I usually take serious shots on my phone to capture different details and proportions.

✓ I usually take close-up shots on my phone to capture different details and proportions.

Original error: 'serious shots' is an incorrect collocation ('serious' is not used to describe photos). Correction uses 'close-up shots' which correctly describes photos that capture details. Suggestion: choose adjectives commonly collocated with 'shots' (close-up, detailed, wide-angle).

× Yes, I think I would like to visit her museum, which we're located in our the heart of the city.

✓ Yes, I think I would like to visit the museum, which is located in the heart of the city.

Original errors: 'her museum' incorrectly uses a possessive pronoun for an inanimate place (incorrect use of pronouns), 'we're located' incorrectly uses first-person plural when describing the museum (incorrect subject), and 'in our the heart' has extra definite article. Correction uses 'the museum' and 'is located in the heart of the city'. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific places and 'is located' for singular third-person subjects.

× There are a lot of beautiful design around around the building and they also give a really beautiful atmosphere when I stay in there.

✓ There are a lot of beautiful designs around the building, and they also create a lovely atmosphere when I stay there.

Original errors: 'beautiful design' should be plural 'designs' (singular/plural issue), 'around around' duplicated word, 'give a really beautiful atmosphere' is awkward verb choice and register, and 'stay in there' uses unnecessary preposition 'in'. Correction pluralizes 'designs', removes duplication, changes verb to 'create', and uses 'stay there'. Suggestion: watch for duplicated words, match noun number to context, and use 'stay there' rather than 'stay in there'.

× Yes, I would like to live in the tall building because you can capture a lot of beautiful views, like in the morning you can see the sunset and you also can watch a lot of beautiful clouds.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because you can enjoy many beautiful views; for example, in the morning you can see the sunrise, and you can also watch many beautiful clouds.

Original errors: 'the tall building' uses unnecessary definite article for a general preference (article error), 'capture a lot of beautiful views' uses 'capture' awkwardly for experiencing views (wrong verb choice), and 'see the sunset' conflicts with 'in the morning' (logical/time inconsistency). Correction changes to 'a tall building', uses 'enjoy many beautiful views', corrects 'sunset' to 'sunrise' for morning, and repeats 'you can' consistently. Suggestion: match time-of-day words correctly and use appropriate verbs for perception (see, enjoy, watch).

× So it's like also give your really beautiful sense.

✓ So it also gives you a very pleasant feeling.

Original errors: 'it's like also give your really beautiful sense' is ungrammatical: incorrect subject-verb agreement, wrong pronoun 'your' vs 'you', and awkward adjective use 'really beautiful sense'. Correction fixes verb agreement 'gives', pronoun 'you', and rephrases to 'a very pleasant feeling'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and choose natural collocations (pleasant feeling, nice atmosphere).