Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh), correct vocabulary errors (huge, city centre), and combine ideas with linking words. Also give one specific detail to support your statement.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. In fact, I live close to a large city centre where numerous office towers and residential high-rises stand, and many people in my neighbourhood live in those apartment buildings.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use clearer grammar and linking words. State whether you usually take photos, then explain with a specific reason and one example. Avoid repetition and correct word choice (busy, high rush → busy, high-traffic).

Exemplo: I sometimes take photos of buildings. For example, when I visited Toronto last year I photographed several skyscrapers, but I rarely take pictures in Brampton because the streets are busy and crowded, so it's difficult to stop and compose shots.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, use correct tense and natural expressions, and add a specific reason why you want to visit. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the CN Tower in Toronto. I plan to go with my family next summer because my friends praised the observation deck and the views of the city, so I am excited to see it for myself.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and expand with two specific benefits, linking them smoothly. Remove fillers and correct awkward phrasing (fond of a lot of sunlight → I enjoy abundant natural light).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views of the surrounding area. In addition, apartments high up usually receive more natural light and enjoy quieter streets, which appeals to me.

× Definitely, where I live there are many tall buildings.

✓ Definitely, where I live there are many tall buildings.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It correctly uses 'there are' for plural 'tall buildings'. (No correction required.)

× Uh, it's actually there is a hug city centre where a lot of, uh, tall buildings are available.

✓ Uh, actually there is a huge city centre where a lot of tall buildings are located.

Errors: 'it's actually there is' is redundant and incorrect combination of subjects; 'hug' is a typo for 'huge'; 'available' is odd for buildings. Suggestion: remove redundancy, correct spelling, and use 'located' or 'situated' to describe where buildings are. Also remove unnecessary commas. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× In some buildings people used to live as their residents.

✓ In some buildings people live as residents.

Errors: 'used to live' implies past habit, but context suggests general fact; 'as their residents' is incorrect pronoun/phrase choice. Suggestion: use simple present 'live' for habitual/current state and 'as residents' to indicate role. Grammar problem type ID: 12.

× Uh, last year I went to Toronto where many of the tall buildings and I took many of the photographs.

✓ Last year I went to Toronto where there are many tall buildings, and I took many photographs.

Errors: missing verb after 'buildings' and unnecessary 'of' before 'the tall buildings' and 'photographs'. Use 'there are' to state existence and remove unnecessary articles. Past tense 'went' and 'took' are correct. Grammar problem type ID: 5.

× But here in Brampton I don't like to take photos because of busy and high rush area, so I don't take photo here much.

✓ But here in Brampton I don't like to take photos because it is a busy, high-traffic area, so I don't take photos here much.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'busy and high rush area'; 'high rush' is unnatural — use 'high-traffic'; inconsistent plural 'photos' vs 'photo'. Suggestion: use 'a busy, high-traffic area' and keep 'photos' plural. Also use 'it is' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 14.

× I haven't been to CN Tower in Toronto.

✓ I haven't been to the CN Tower in Toronto.

Error: missing definite article 'the' before a specific famous landmark 'CN Tower'. Suggestion: use 'the CN Tower'. Present perfect 'haven't been' is appropriate for experience. Grammar problem type ID: 22.

× In coming summer I would like to visit with my family because I had a lot of praise from my friends about this building.

✓ Next summer I would like to visit with my family because I have heard a lot of praise about this building from my friends.

Errors: 'In coming summer' is non-native phrasing — use 'next summer'; 'had a lot of praise from my friends' mixes past tense and meaning — use present perfect 'have heard' to indicate recent reports. Reorder 'from my friends' for natural word order. Grammar problem type ID: 7.

× So I would definitely visit this place and I'm planning to visit soon.

✓ So I will definitely visit this place; I'm planning to go soon.

Issues: repetition of 'visit' is redundant. 'Would definitely' is less certain; use 'will definitely' to express intention given planning. Use 'go' to avoid repeating 'visit'. Keep present continuous 'I'm planning' for near-future arrangement. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× I would love to live in a tall building because I want to see my surroundings from a height.

✓ I would love to live in a tall building because I want to see my surroundings from a height.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Would love to' expresses desire and 'want to' gives reason; no change necessary. Grammar problem type ID: 4.

× Apart from that, I am fond of a lot of sunlight and uh, natural view, so I would definitely want to.

✓ Apart from that, I am fond of lots of sunlight and natural views, so I definitely would.

Errors: 'a lot of sunlight' can be improved to 'lots of sunlight' or 'a lot of sunlight' is acceptable but pairing with 'natural view' (singular) is awkward — use plural 'natural views'. 'So I would definitely want to' is incomplete; better 'so I definitely would' or 'so I definitely would like to'. Suggest reordering for natural flow. Grammar problem type ID: 14