Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve naturalness and fluency by removing filler words, correcting small grammatical errors, and combining sentences more smoothly. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "for example", "because").

Exemplo: Yes — I live in a 32‑storey apartment block, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, Hong Kong has numerous skyscrapers, which makes high‑rise living and impressive city views very common here.

Sugestão: Make the answer complete and coherent, avoid sentence fragments, and use linking words to expand one clear reason with a specific example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "facades", "minimalist design"). Keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings with intriguing facades and interesting designs because they offer unique shapes and textures. For example, I recently photographed a minimalist glass tower in Central that creates striking reflections at sunset, which I then shared on my Instagram.

Sugestão: Correct small grammar and vocabulary mistakes, and add specific reasons and linking words to make the answer more convincing. Mention what specifically attracts you (e.g., observation deck, design) and give a brief explanation.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Rockefeller Center in New York City because it is a famous example of Art Deco architecture. I especially want to see the observation deck and the surrounding plazas, since I’ve seen photos of the building’s design and would like to experience the views in person.

Sugestão: Avoid sentence fragments and correct grammar (e.g., "a high‑rise apartment"). Start with a clear opinion, then give two coherent supporting reasons using linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Be specific about concerns and balance with positives if relevant.

Exemplo: I wouldn’t choose to live in a tall building. Although high‑rises are convenient and often have good facilities, I’m concerned about emergency evacuation and fire safety because escaping from high floors can be difficult in an emergency.

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, and actually I've been living in a apartment with 32 floors since I was a child.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, and actually I've been living in an apartment with 32 floors since I was a child.

The indefinite article before a noun beginning with a vowel sound should be 'an' not 'a'. Use 'an apartment' because 'apartment' begins with a vowel sound. Suggestion: remember 'an' before vowel sounds and 'a' before consonant sounds.

× Yes, I like to capture buildings with intriguing facade or interesting design.

✓ Yes, I like to capture buildings with intriguing facades or interesting designs.

Both 'facade' and 'design' should agree in number with 'buildings' here. Use the plural forms 'facades' and 'designs'. Also 'intriguing facade' needs plural when referring generally to many buildings. Suggestion: match noun plurality to the context (many buildings -> plural nouns).

× I found there are many. Fascinating beauties that can be found in Hong Kong.

✓ I found that there are many fascinating beauties to be found in Hong Kong.

The original is fragmented and has an incorrect period splitting the sentence. Combine into one sentence and use 'that' as a complementizer: 'found that there are many'. Also 'to be found' or 'that can be found' is natural. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and ensure clauses are connected properly.

× I particularly appreciate a minimalist and.

✓ I particularly appreciate minimalist design.

The original is incomplete and misuses the article 'a' before an adjective without a noun. Replace with a noun phrase 'minimalist design' or 'a minimalist style' to complete the idea. Suggestion: ensure adjective is followed by a noun when using an article, or use the adjective attributively with a noun.

× Yes, I'd like to visit the Rockefeller Building in the New York City one day.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit the Rockefeller Building in New York City one day.

The definite article 'the' is not used before most city names. Use 'in New York City' rather than 'in the New York City'. Suggestion: omit 'the' before city names unless part of the official name.

× I want to go there because apparently it's a very famous building architecture and I would really like to see how spectacular.

✓ I want to go there because apparently it's a very famous piece of architecture and I would really like to see how spectacular it is.

'Building architecture' is awkward; use 'piece of architecture' or 'architectural landmark'. Also the clause 'see how spectacular' is incomplete; add 'it is' to finish the clause. Suggestion: use complete noun phrases and finish comparative or descriptive clauses with a verb or clause.

× Although I appreciate the convenience and. Of living in an high rise apartment.

✓ Although I appreciate the convenience of living in a high-rise apartment,

The original is fragmented and has an incorrect period splitting the sentence. Also use 'a high-rise apartment' (hyphenated adjective) and 'a' before 'high' (consonant sound). Suggestion: do not split clauses incorrectly and place articles before adjectives plus nouns; use hyphenation for compound adjectives before nouns.

× If I have a choice, I would prefer not to live in a tall building.

✓ If I had a choice, I would prefer not to live in a tall building.

The conditional meaning here contrasts present preference; use the unreal conditional 'If I had a choice' to express hypothetical preference. This is a tense/mood choice rather than article, but it matches list: use correct conditional form. Suggestion: use 'If I had a choice' for hypothetical situations. Note: sentence also had correct articles originally.

× It is my greatest concern is about how you can escape fire.

✓ My greatest concern is how people can escape a fire.

The original repeats the verb 'is' and uses 'you' awkwardly. Remove the redundant 'It is' or rephrase to 'My greatest concern is...'. Use 'people' or 'residents' and include the article 'a' before 'fire'. Suggestion: avoid redundant copula and use a clear subject and noun phrase.