Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar, avoid filler sounds (umm) and reorganize into clear topic sentence plus specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct expressions (e.g., 'low-rise houses', 'I like the neighborhood'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. Instead, I can see low-rise houses, large fields and mountains, which I really like because the area is peaceful and scenic.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers and fix grammar (e.g., 'take photos of', 'nature scenery' → 'natural scenery'). Mention examples and a reason to support your preference.

Exemplo: No, I rarely take photos of buildings. Instead, I prefer photographing natural scenery such as seas, beaches, mountains and forests because those views relax me and capture memorable moments.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid informal fragments. Replace 'photo of it with me' with 'take a photo with it'.

Exemplo: Yes, I've always dreamed of visiting the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it looks so romantic and iconic in films and magazines. If I went there, I would take a photo with the tower and enjoy the view from the top.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, correct tense and vocabulary, and provide specific supporting details with linking words. Remove fillers and repetitive words. Mention advantages and maybe one concern to show balance.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views of the city, especially at night when the lights are on. However, I might be concerned about noise or higher rent, so I would weigh the benefits against these drawbacks.

× I just can see lots of how low umm low rise houses and large fields and mountains.

✓ I can just see lots of low-rise houses, large fields, and mountains.

The sentence had awkward word order and redundancy ('lots of how low umm low rise houses'). 'Lots of' requires a plural noun ('houses'), and 'low-rise' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before the noun. Removing filler words ('how', 'umm') and placing 'just' after the subject improves clarity.

× And I like these umm neighborhood though.

✓ And I like this neighborhood, though.

The noun 'neighborhood' is singular, so the demonstrative adjective should be 'this' not 'these'. Also remove filler 'umm' and add a comma before 'though' for natural rhythm.

× No, I don't like taking photo of umm buildings or city views.

✓ No, I don't like taking photos of buildings or city views.

The count noun 'photo' requires a plural form 'photos' after 'taking' when referring to photographs in general. Remove filler 'umm'.

× I prefer photographing to umm nature scenery like seas, beaches, mountains and forests umm.

✓ I prefer photographing natural scenery, such as seas, beaches, mountains, and forests.

Use the adjective 'natural' to modify 'scenery' rather than the noun 'nature'. 'Such as' is more natural than 'like' when listing examples. Remove filler 'umm' and add commas for list clarity.

× When I see the those kind of views I feel relaxed and I like this moment.

✓ When I see those kinds of views, I feel relaxed and enjoy the moment.

Use 'those' without 'the' (don't use 'the those'), and plural form 'kinds' matches 'those'. 'I like this moment' is awkward; 'enjoy the moment' is a natural collocation. Add a comma after the subordinate clause.

× I've always dreamed of visiting Eiffel Tower in Paris.

✓ I've always dreamed of visiting the Eiffel Tower in Paris.

Monuments like 'Eiffel Tower' require the definite article 'the'. Without 'the' the phrase is ungrammatical.

× I often see it in films and magazines and it's so romantic and iconic and I just go there and photo of it with me.

✓ I often see it in films and magazines; it's so romantic and iconic, and I would love to go there and take a photo with it.

Run-on sentence with tense and verb form errors. 'I just go there and photo of it with me' is ungrammatical. Use 'would love to' for desire, 'go there and take a photo with it' for correct verb and noun usage. Add punctuation for clarity.

× I'm never live in tall building before, but if I live there I could see the UMM views, city view, especially at night it will be really really great because umm, when the city lights are on it will be fantastic.

✓ I've never lived in a tall building before, but if I lived there I could see the city views, especially at night; it would be really great because when the city lights are on, it would be fantastic.

Use present perfect 'I've never lived' to describe experience up to now. 'Tall building' needs an article 'a'. Conditional sentence should use 'if I lived' with 'could' or 'would' consistently. Replace filler 'UMM' and 'umm'. Use 'city views' (plural) and add commas and semicolons to improve sentence flow.