Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one contrasting detail about the village, and finish with a brief reason. Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors (e.g. “very few” not “very less”, plural agreement). Use a linking word to contrast (e.g. “however”).

Exemplo: Yes. I live in the city, so there are many tall buildings near my home. However, in my village there are very few tall buildings — mostly two-storey houses. I prefer taller buildings in the city because they offer better views and a pleasant breeze.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid conflicting phrasing. Begin with a clear yes/no, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Fix subject-verb agreement and reduce fillers. Use a linking word like “but” or “because” to connect ideas.

Exemplo: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings, but when I see an impressive skyscraper I often admire its design because I'm curious about how it was constructed. For example, I was fascinated by the exposed steel framework of a new office tower downtown.

Sugestão: Keep the answer focused on one building and give specific reasons why you want to visit it. Avoid repetition (don’t repeat the city name) and informal fillers like “I was like”. Use linking words to sequence ideas (e.g. “for example”, “because”).

Exemplo: Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa. For example, when I visited Singapore I saw Marina Bay and was fascinated by its modern architecture, which made me curious about iconic buildings. The Burj Khalifa attracts me because of its record height and striking design, and I would like to experience the observation deck views in person.

Sugestão: Start with a concise topic sentence and then add two specific benefits with linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Correct minor phrasing (e.g. “feel more connected to nature”).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would provide great views and natural ventilation. For instance, from a high-floor apartment I could enjoy wide sky views and a steady breeze, which helps me feel more relaxed and connected to nature.

× As I live in a city there are lots of tall buildings near my home, but when I go to my village I find very less tall buildings.

✓ As I live in a city, there are lots of tall buildings near my home, but when I go to my village I find very few tall buildings.

The phrase 'very less tall buildings' is incorrect; 'less' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'few' is used with countable plural nouns like 'buildings'. Use 'very few' to indicate a small number. Also added a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.

× There are buildings uh two-story building.

✓ There are buildings, for example, two-story buildings.

The original mixes plural 'There are buildings' with singular 'two-story building', causing number disagreement. Make both plural ('two-story buildings') or rephrase to refer to an example. Also added punctuation to reflect a clearer spoken pause.

× Highest I find it better is because you can see the sky more clearly and you can feel the wind or the breeze more accurately.

✓ I find higher floors better because you can see the sky more clearly and feel the breeze more strongly.

'Highest I find it better' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'I find higher floors better'. 'Feel the wind or the breeze more accurately' is awkward; use 'feel the breeze more strongly' or 'more clearly' for perception verbs. Removed redundant 'the wind or' and simplified wording.

× I never found myself taking photos of buildings but I like when I see any tall buildings it make me wonder how they have built it.

✓ I never find myself taking photos of buildings, but when I see tall buildings they make me wonder how they were built.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly ('never found' vs general habit). Use present simple 'never find' for habitual action. 'It make me' is subject-verb agreement error and should be 'they make me'. 'How they have built it' is awkward; use passive past 'how they were built' to ask about construction.

× It's quite interesting uh, to see the infrastructure.

✓ It's quite interesting to see the infrastructure.

Remove filler 'uh' in written form and unnecessary comma; sentence is otherwise acceptable. This corrects an informal spoken filler not suitable in written corrections.

× When I was in Singapore, I visited Singapore, I saw Marina Bay.

✓ When I was in Singapore, I visited Marina Bay.

Repeating 'I visited Singapore' after 'When I was in Singapore' is redundant. Use past simple consistently for completed actions: 'visited' and 'saw' are past tense; combining both is unnecessary. Simplified to one clear past action.

× It was fascinating. I was like what is this architecture, how they have made it?

✓ It was fascinating. I wondered, what is this architecture and how did they make it?

'I was like' is informal speech; in standard English use 'I wondered'. 'How they have made it' is awkward word order for a question; use 'how did they make it' or 'how they made it' (embedded question). Adjusted punctuation to reflect a question in reported thought.

× It made me wonder their hard work.

✓ It made me think about their hard work.

'Made me wonder their hard work' is ungrammatical because 'wonder' does not take a direct object in this way. Use 'think about' or 'make me wonder about' followed by the topic: 'their hard work'.

× But Burj Khalifa, when I see it on reels, it attracts me a lot.

✓ But Burj Khalifa attracts me a lot when I see it on reels.

Word order was awkward. For general truths or repeated actions, use present simple 'attracts'. Remove extra pronoun 'it' after the comma to avoid redundancy.

× Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because I will be able to see the sky more clearly and will be able to feel the breeze and I feel like I'm very much connected with the nature, so it will soothe me.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because I would be able to see the sky more clearly and feel the breeze, and I feel very connected with nature, so it would soothe me.

Mixing 'would' and 'will' is inconsistent in conditional/wish contexts. Use 'would' consistently after 'I would love'. 'Feel like I'm very much connected with the nature' should be 'feel very connected with nature' (no article before 'nature'). Also streamline repeated 'will be able to' to 'would be able to' and remove redundant wording.

× It will make my house feel like a home.

✓ It would make my house feel like a home.

To match the conditional 'I would love' and hypothetical mood, use 'would' instead of 'will'. The structure is otherwise fine, but tense/modal consistency is important.