Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and awkward phrases, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are several large shopping malls and two schools within a five-minute walk, which makes the area very convenient but sometimes quite busy.

Sugestão: Fix grammatical errors and improve coherence. Begin with a direct answer, then give a clear reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and avoid vague expressions.

Exemplo: Sometimes. If a building is famous or has unusual architecture, I will photograph it, but usually I prefer taking pictures of people because they feel more lively and tell a story.

Sugestão: Correct factual and grammatical mistakes and be specific. Start with a direct statement of which building, then give two specific reasons why you want to visit using linking words. Do not make incorrect cultural claims (the Colosseum is not Asian).

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Colosseum in Rome because it is an impressive example of ancient Roman architecture and engineering. Also, visiting it would give me a chance to learn more about Roman history and imagine how events were held there.

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear yes/no, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'when you get dark'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the city lights at night look like stars and create a beautiful view. In addition, being higher up would give me more privacy and a quieter, more peaceful atmosphere.

× There are quite a lot of tall buildings near my house. I can see large shopping malls of its buildings and a couple of schools within a 5 minute walk, which makes the area very convenient but also rather than busy at times.

✓ There are quite a lot of tall buildings near my house. I can see large shopping malls among these buildings and a couple of schools within a 5-minute walk, which makes the area very convenient but also rather busy at times.

The phrase 'of its buildings' is incorrect for expressing that shopping malls are part of the area; use 'among these buildings' or 'in the area'. '5 minute' needs a hyphen when used as a compound adjective before a noun: '5-minute walk'. 'Rather than busy' is incorrect here; 'rather busy' correctly modifies 'busy' (no 'than'). These are plural/singular usage and word choice issues; revise to keep nouns and modifiers consistent and idiomatic.

× It depends, if a building a very famous I would take the picture, but most of the time I prefer photographing people and because they feel more likely and interesting.

✓ It depends; if a building is very famous I would take a picture, but most of the time I prefer photographing people because they seem more lively and interesting.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' (past participle error relates to verb forms). 'Take the picture' is unnatural; use 'take a picture'. 'Because they feel more likely and interesting' is ungrammatical: 'feel' should be 'seem' and 'likely' is wrong in this context—use 'lively' or 'interesting'. Also remove the extra conjunction 'and' before 'because'. Ensure correct verb forms and appropriate adjective choices.

× Yes, I'd like to with the Colosseum in Rome. I think it is an impressive piece of Asian architecture and with the with my eyes, I think it's so cool and it is a chance to learn about the Roman history.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit the Colosseum in Rome. I think it is an impressive piece of Roman architecture; seeing it with my own eyes would be amazing and it would be a chance to learn about Roman history.

Multiple structural errors: 'like to with' should be 'like to visit' (verb missing). Calling the Colosseum 'Asian architecture' is factually and grammatically wrong; it is Roman architecture. 'With the with my eyes' is redundant and ungrammatical—use 'with my own eyes'. 'The Roman history' should be 'Roman history' (no article). Fix sentence order and ensure subject-verb constructions are complete and factual.

× Yes, if I have a chance I would like to living in the tall building because when you get dark the city lights looks like stars which is very beautiful. I also think living higher will give me the nice view and feel more peaceful.

✓ Yes, if I had the chance I would like to live in a tall building because when it gets dark the city lights look like stars, which is very beautiful. I also think living higher would give me nice views and help me feel more peaceful.

Errors include incorrect verb form 'would like to living' (use base verb 'live' after 'would like to'). Tense sequence: use conditional 'if I had the chance' with 'would'. 'When you get dark' is wrong; use 'when it gets dark'. Subject-verb agreement: 'lights looks' should be 'lights look'. 'The nice view' is awkward; use 'nice views'. Use consistent conditional/modal forms and correct -ing usage for gerunds when appropriate (e.g., 'living' as a noun could be fine but here 'would like to live' is required).