Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 句子结构不够自然，有语法和表达问题（例如“leaving the dormitory”应为“living”或“located near”），信息较好但有点冗长，建议用更直接的主题句并用一两句补充细节，注意主谓一致和正确词汇。可练习用简洁的方式描述位置、原因和影响。

Exemplo: Yes. My dormitory at Shenzhen University is surrounded by tall skyscrapers, including offices of big tech companies like Tencent. This proximity makes it much easier for me to find internships and network with industry professionals.

Sugestão: 总体表达清晰且相关，但有个别词语用错（“architectural fictions”应为“architectural features/details”），可以在一两句里更具体说明如何使用照片，并使用连接词使逻辑更紧凑。建议注意专业词汇的准确性并避免冗长表达。

Exemplo: Definitely. As an urban and rural planning student, I often photograph architectural features such as facades, layouts and structural details. I then use these images for research and design projects, which helps me analyse patterns and develop better proposals.

Sugestão: 回答自然且具体，但有小的语法冗余（“from of the city”应为“of the city”或“from the top”），可以稍微丰富理由或感受并用连接词。保持简洁同时展示个人动机即可。

Exemplo: I'd love to visit the Eiffel Tower. It's an iconic symbol of Paris, and I want to enjoy the breathtaking view of the city from the top. I would also take photos to capture the experience and study the tower's iron structure up close.

Sugestão: 观点明确且有具体理由，但句子衔接略显口语化（例如开头使用“I wouldn't want to be in a tall building”可更自然为“I wouldn't want to live in one”），有重复信息，可以用连接词合并句子使表达更连贯。建议精简并用一到两句支持理由。

Exemplo: I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I already live on the 14th floor and find it inconvenient to go up and down, especially with heavy bags, and the lifts are often crowded so I have to wait a long time.

× Yes, leaving the dormitory of Shenzhen University surrounded by skyscrapers belonging to big tech company like Tencent, it's really convenient to find an internship and networking with industry professionals.

✓ Yes. Leaving the dormitory of Shenzhen University, which is surrounded by skyscrapers belonging to big tech companies like Tencent, it's really convenient to find an internship and network with industry professionals.

句子原结构混乱，有悬垂分词短语（'Leaving the dormitory...'）使主句主语不明确；同时名词单复数和动词形式有错误：'big tech company' 应为复数 'big tech companies'；'networking' 在此处应与动词 'find' 并列，改为动词原形 'network'。建议将从句用关系从句清晰连接并使动词并列一致。

× I'm majoring in urban and rural planning, so I often take photos to record architectural fictions like facades, layouts, and structural details.

✓ I'm majoring in urban and rural planning, so I often take photos to record architectural features like facades, layouts, and structural details.

原句中 'architectural fictions' 用词不当，'fictions' 意为虚构，与语境不符。应使用 'features'（特征/要素）。这不是冠词错误本身，但属于词汇搭配问题，按可接受列表中最接近的项归为“Incorrect use of the definite article”以提示用词调整。建议使用语义合适的名词 'features'。

× I use these images for my research and design projects, which is crucial for my later analysis.

✓ I use these images for my research and design projects, which are crucial for my later analysis.

关系代词引导的非限制性定语从句的先行词是复数 'projects'，因此从句谓语动词应使用复数 'are' 而不是单数 'is'，属于主谓一致（也可视为时态/数错误）。建议将动词改为复数以保持一致。

× I'm majoring in urban and rural planning, so I often take photos to record architectural fictions like facades, layouts, and structural details.

✓ I'm majoring in urban and rural planning, so I often take photos to record architectural features such as facades, layouts, and structural details.

句中 'like' 用法可接受，但在学术描述中 'such as' 更正式；同时前文已改正 'fictions' 为 'features'。指出现在分词 'majoring' 用法正确，无需改动。建议在正式场合使用更合适搭配 'such as'。

× If possible, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower. It's an iconic symbol of Paris and I want to see the breathtaking view from of the city from the top.

✓ If possible, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower. It's an iconic symbol of Paris and I want to see the breathtaking view of the city from the top.

原句中存在多余介词 'from of'，应删除 'from' 或 'of' 保留一个以表达 '从顶部看城市的景色'。正确搭配为 'view of the city' 或 'view from the top'，两者不能重复。建议使用 'view of the city from the top'。

× I wouldn't want to be in a tall building. I'm currently living on the 14th floor. And it's quite inconvenient for me to go up and down, especially when I'm carrying heavy things.

✓ I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I'm currently living on the 14th floor, and it's quite inconvenient for me to go up and down, especially when I'm carrying heavy things.

第一句中 'wouldn't want to be in a tall building' 用法虽能被理解，但更自然的表达是 'wouldn't want to live in a tall building'（居住在高楼）；第二句可合并为一个句子以避免以连词开头的短句 'And...'。建议使用更自然的动词搭配 'live in' 并将句子连贯起来。

× By the way, the elevator is always crowded, which makes waiting longer.

✓ By the way, the elevator is always crowded, which makes the wait longer.

原句中 'waiting longer' 语法上可理解但不够地道，名词短语 'the wait' 更自然；同时 'the elevator' 使用正确。建议将动名词短语替换为名词短语 'the wait' 以提高表达自然度。