Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and avoid unfinished sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, there are tall buildings, but they are about five kilometres away. One of them is a very tall office tower that also attracts tourists who come to take photos, so it’s well-known in the area.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and a specific counterexample. Use correct verb forms and linking words (however, but, for example). Avoid vague phrases like ‘contains some privacy’.

Exemplo: Not usually, because I worry about invading people’s privacy when photographing office windows. However, I do enjoy taking pictures of famous landmarks in other cities, such as the Petronas Twin Towers in Malaysia, because they are iconic and photogenic.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid repeating ideas. Mention particular features you want to see or do inside.

Exemplo: Yes, I’d like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. I want to go to the observation deck for the view and take photos, and I’m also curious about the luxury apartments and restaurants inside.

Sugestão: State your opinion clearly and give specific, coherent reasons using correct phrases. Replace unclear words (e.g. 'afraid of hate') with accurate expressions (e.g. 'afraid of heights'). Use linking words and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I am afraid of heights and worried about safety during earthquakes or severe storms. For that reason, I prefer living on a lower floor or in a house, which feels safer and more comfortable.

× Yes, there are, but it's located a little bit far, almost 5 kilometers, but it's really high building that was used for company and for tourism place for they taking pictures.

✓ Yes, there are, but they are located a little far away, almost 5 kilometers. They are really tall buildings that were used by companies and as tourist attractions where people take pictures.

Original sentence mixes singular and plural (it / building) and has incorrect noun forms. Use plural pronouns and verbs to match plural subject 'buildings' and correct noun phrases: 'tall buildings', 'used by companies', 'tourist attractions', and 'where people take pictures'. Also break into two sentences for clarity.

× Sometimes it was an.

✓ Sometimes it was empty.

Original fragment 'Sometimes it was an.' is incomplete and missing a noun. Add an appropriate noun 'empty' or 'unused' to complete the predicate and make a full sentence.

× No, actually I didn't really like to taking pictures of buildings because it contains some privacy of the people who working inside of the buildings.

✓ No, actually I don't really like taking pictures of buildings because they contain some private areas of the people who work inside them.

Tense and verb form errors: 'didn't really like to taking' mixes past and gerund incorrectly; context suggests present preference so use 'don't really like taking'. 'It contains' should agree with plural 'buildings' so use 'they contain'. 'People who working' needs present simple 'people who work'. Also use 'private areas' or 'privacy' appropriately and refer back with 'them'.

× But for example, the buildings in another city, like the icon of its country, like twin towers of Malaysia.

✓ For example, the buildings in another city that are icons of their countries, such as the Petronas Twin Towers in Malaysia.

Preposition and noun usage: 'icon of its country' is awkward; use 'icons of their countries'. 'Like' repeated is unnecessary; use 'such as' and the correct name 'Petronas Twin Towers'. Also adjust plural agreement.

× I love it.

✓ I love them.

Refers to plural 'buildings', so pronoun should be plural 'them' rather than singular 'it'.

× I would like to visit. Burj Khalifa is the highest building in the world, located on Dubai, United Emirate Arab in the Middle East.

✓ I would like to visit. The Burj Khalifa is the tallest building in the world, located in Dubai, United Arab Emirates in the Middle East.

Use 'the' with specific building names 'the Burj Khalifa'. Use adjective 'tallest' (superlative) and correct preposition 'in Dubai' and correct country name 'United Arab Emirates'. 'Located on Dubai' and 'United Emirate Arab' are incorrect.

× And it's really famous because a lot of people were taking pictures there.

✓ And it's really famous because a lot of people take pictures there.

Use present simple 'take' to describe a general, habitual action. Past continuous 'were taking' suggests a specific past event, which doesn't fit this general statement.

× And I also want to taking picture there someday and visit inside because there is an apartment.

✓ And I also want to take pictures there someday and visit inside because there are apartments.

Use base verb 'to take' after 'want' (want to take). Use plural 'pictures' and plural 'apartments' if referring to multiple units; or say 'an apartment' if singular. Also use 'visit inside' -> 'visit the interior' or 'go inside' if preferred.

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of hate and I was wondering if when they there will be a earthquake and or like heavy raining.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of heights and I worry about earthquakes or heavy rain.

Several issues: 'afraid of hate' is wrong word choice; correct is 'afraid of heights'. Remove incorrect past progressive 'I was wondering if when they there will be'; use 'I worry about' for present concern. Use 'an earthquake' (article) and 'heavy rain' (uncountable).

× It must be very scary for people who live inside of the tall building.

✓ It would be very scary for people who live inside a tall building.

Use conditional/modal 'would' for hypothetical situations. 'Inside of' is informal; 'inside' or 'in' is preferred. Use 'a tall building' (general reference) rather than 'the tall building'.

× So I prefer the house on apartment in the lower floor.

✓ So I prefer a house or an apartment on a lower floor.

Original has incorrect article and preposition use: 'the house on apartment' is ungrammatical. Offer 'a house or an apartment' for choice and 'on a lower floor' to indicate preference. Use 'lower floor' not 'the lower floor' unless specific.