Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid filler words (uh) and keep sentences natural. Also correct small grammar issues (three-storey, I live, sit on the balcony).

Exemplo: I live in a three-storey building and most nearby buildings are also multi-storey, so I often enjoy the view from my upper floor. For example, there is a river in front of the Opera House, and I like to sit on my balcony at evening to watch the lights and listen to the water.

Sugestão: Start with a direct, concise statement, then give a specific reason and one short example. Reduce repetition (pictures/preserve) and avoid fillers. Use clearer vocabulary (ancestors → earlier generations or builders).

Exemplo: Yes, I often photograph historic buildings when I visit museums or old sites because I want to preserve memories and study the craftsmanship. For instance, on my last trip I photographed a 19th-century mosque to examine its intricate stone carvings later.

Sugestão: Clarify which building and facts—avoid incorrect or mixed information (Burj Khalifa, Dubai, United Arab Emirates; not in the US; not a ‘park’; not one of the seven wonders). Use a clear topic sentence, one factual detail, and a plan. Keep to two or three sentences.

Exemplo: I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. I plan to travel to Dubai next year to see its observation deck and enjoy the city views in person.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons with specific examples. Remove fillers and fix minor grammar (I can enjoy, balconies, more refreshing on upper floors). Avoid vague statements like 'many benefits' without examples.

Exemplo: Yes, I prefer living in a high-rise building because it offers excellent city views both day and night. For example, on upper floors I can sit on a balcony and enjoy cooler breezes and an unobstructed view of the skyline.

× Yes, I am living in a three Storey building, uh and uh, all the adjacent buildings are also very tall and uh multi Storey so I can also enjoy the view from the upper level.

✓ Yes, I live in a three-storey building, and all the adjacent buildings are also very tall and multi-storey, so I can enjoy the view from the upper levels.

Use simple present (live) for a permanent or habitual situation instead of present continuous (am living). 'Storey' should be hyphenated in compounds and lowercased: 'three-storey'. 'Upper level' pluralized to 'upper levels' fits general reference to floors. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant words for clarity.

× Uh, there is a river in front of the Opera House and I love in the evening to set in the balcony and enjoy the view.

✓ There is a river in front of the Opera House and I love to sit on the balcony in the evening and enjoy the view.

Use correct verb 'sit' (not 'set'). Preposition 'on the balcony' is standard, not 'in the balcony'. Place time expression 'in the evening' after the infinitive phrase or at sentence end: 'love to sit on the balcony in the evening.' Remove filler 'Uh'.

× When I wish to, when I visit any historic building or museum, I love to take pictures and preserve those pictures as a memory.

✓ When I visit a historic building or museum, I like to take pictures and keep them as memories.

Phrase 'When I wish to' is unnecessary and awkward; 'when I visit' suffices. 'Love to' can be natural but 'like to' is more idiomatic for habitual actions. 'Preserve those pictures as a memory' is awkward: use 'keep them as memories.' Also use singular 'a historic' not 'any historic' for smoother speech.

× Uh, because these are some things which, uh, our ancestors did and, uh, I love to explore all these things and admire their creativity and determination throughout their work.

✓ Because these are things our ancestors made, I love to explore them and admire their creativity and determination in their work.

Avoid vague 'which' and repeated 'things.' Use 'made' instead of 'did' for creating buildings/artifacts. Use 'them' as a clear pronoun reference. 'Throughout their work' is awkward; 'in their work' is clearer.

× I would love to visit a Burghley park in Dubai, United States of Emirates.

✓ I would love to visit Burj Khalifa Park in Dubai, United Arab Emirates.

Proper noun accuracy and adjective order: 'United Arab Emirates' is correct country name. 'Burghley park' seems incorrect for Dubai; likely 'Burj Khalifa' or 'Burj Park.' Use correct proper names and capitalization.

× Uh, this is the building which uh, is known for its tallness and is awarded as one of the seven wonders in the world.

✓ This is a building that is known for its height and has been listed as one of the modern wonders of the world.

Use 'a building' instead of 'the building' unless specific. 'Tallness' is awkward; use 'height.' Use passive perfect 'has been listed' for award/status. 'Seven wonders in the world' should be 'one of the modern wonders of the world' if referring to modern list; be specific.

× I love to watch it in the future and I'm plan to visit next year to Dubai.

✓ I would love to see it in the future, and I plan to visit Dubai next year.

Use 'would love' or 'want' for future desire. 'I'm plan' is incorrect; use 'I plan' or 'I'm planning.' Preposition 'to Dubai' after 'visit' is unnecessary; use 'visit Dubai.' Also 'watch it' is odd for a building; use 'see it.'

× Well, I prefer to live in a high rise building because there are many benefits for living in a skyscraper.

✓ Well, I prefer to live in a high-rise building because there are many benefits to living in a skyscraper.

Hyphenate 'high-rise.' Use preposition 'to' with 'benefits to living' rather than 'for living.' Sentence structure improved by consistent noun phrases.

× UH-1 can enjoy the whole city view during the night time and daytime.

✓ I can enjoy the whole city view during the night and the day.

'UH-1' appears as an error; replace with subject 'I.' Use 'night and day' or 'at night and during the day' for idiomatic time expressions. 'Whole city view' better as 'the whole city view' or 'a view of the whole city.'

× Sometimes, uh, uh, we can sit in the balcony and the air is uh, more refreshing, uh, in the upper floors.

✓ Sometimes we can sit on the balcony, and the air is more refreshing on the upper floors.

Use 'on the balcony' not 'in the balcony.' Use 'on the upper floors' rather than 'in the upper floors.' Remove fillers 'uh.'