Building— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, avoid repetitions, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Maintain natural phrasing and limit to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I live in New Delhi, so there are many tall buildings near my home because the area has seen major development over the past ten years. For example, my neighborhood now has several new apartment towers and office skyscrapers.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer and then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid repeating the same phrase and keep sentences varied. Use linking words like 'but', 'however', 'because', or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Not usually. I prefer photographing natural scenes like clouds, sunsets and greenery because they relax me. For example, I often wake up early to photograph the sunrise in a nearby park.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give two concise, specific reasons why you want to visit. Avoid fillers ('uh', 'so') and repetition. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. I would like to visit Qutub Minar in New Delhi because it is an impressive ancient tower with rich historical and architectural significance. For example, I want to see its intricate stone carvings and learn about the history of the surrounding monuments.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons with specific details. Remove hesitation words and fix grammar (e.g., 'I would be able'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make your response coherent and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy panoramic views. For example, from the top I could watch sunsets, spot birds and take better photos of the city skyline.

× As I reside in New Delhi which is the capital of India so yes there are so many tall buildings near my home and it is a great infrastructure development in my area since past 10 years and there there are a lot of skyscrapers in my in my neighborhood as I live in in a apartment so yes.

✓ I reside in New Delhi, which is the capital of India, so there are many tall buildings near my home; the area has seen great infrastructure development over the past 10 years and there are many skyscrapers in my neighborhood because I live in an apartment.

Run-on sentence and redundant words make the sentence unclear. Combine clauses with appropriate punctuation, remove repeated words ('there there','in in','in a apartment'), use 'many' instead of 'so many' for formality, and 'over the past 10 years' for correct time expression. Use 'an apartment' (article correction) and avoid starting with 'As' followed by 'so' together which is redundant.

× I usually don't take photos of buildings, but I love to capture any moment of environment as I love greenery and I love to capture moments of clouds and sunsets and even sunrise whenever I wake up early in the morning.

✓ I usually don't take photos of buildings, but I love to capture environmental moments because I love greenery and like photographing clouds, sunsets and even sunrises when I wake up early.

Repetitive phrasing ('I love to capture' repeated) and incorrect noun phrase 'moment of environment.' Use 'environmental moments' or 'moments of the environment.' Use parallel gerunds and correct plural 'sunrises.' Condense phrases for natural English and maintain present habitual tense.

× And I love to capture it because it relaxes my mind whenever I do it.

✓ I enjoy capturing these scenes because it relaxes my mind.

Sentence is wordy and uses vague pronoun 'it' twice. Replace with clear noun 'these scenes' and concise verb 'enjoy capturing' to improve clarity and style.

× So yes, there is a building in which which is located in New Delhi.

✓ Yes, there is a building located in New Delhi.

Redundant words 'in which which' are incorrect. Simplify to 'a building located in New Delhi.' No auxiliary needed. This fixes sentence structure and removes repetition.

× It is named as Qutub Minar.

✓ It is called Qutub Minar.

'Named as' is nonstandard. Use 'called' or 'named' without 'as' (e.g., 'It is named Qutub Minar'). This is a collocation/usage issue.

× It is a ancient building which was uh, developed by the uh, ancient humans of India as as India is a very cultural place and uh has a very treasurious history.

✓ It is an ancient building built by people in India; India has a rich cultural and historical heritage.

Use 'an' before vowel sound 'ancient' (article error). 'Developed by the ancient humans' is awkward; use 'built by people' or 'constructed in ancient times.' Remove filler 'uh' and repeated 'as.' 'Treasurious' is incorrect — use 'rich' or 'treasured' and 'history' instead of redundant phrasing. This corrects articles, word choice and redundancy.

× So I love to.

✓ So I love it.

Fragment missing object/verb is incomplete ('So I love to.' is a sentence fragment). Provide complete thought 'So I love it' or 'So I would like to visit it.' Ensure sentence has a verb and object.

× In my own perspective, I, I would love to live in a tall building, uh, because I love, I would love to see the view from up there.

✓ From my perspective, I would love to live in a tall building because I would enjoy the view from up there.

Remove filler 'I, I' and 'uh.' Use 'From my perspective' not 'In my own perspective.' Use 'would enjoy' for natural conditional/imagining. Fix redundancy 'I would love' repeated and improve flow.

× Uh, if I live in a tall building, I would able to see the eagles view from the top and, uh, will able to capture the moments on my phone like sunsets and clouds.

✓ If I lived in a tall building, I would be able to see an eagle's-eye view from the top and capture moments like sunsets and clouds on my phone.

Incorrect verb forms: use conditional 'If I lived... I would be able' (tense/conditional) and include 'be' with 'able.' Use 'eagle's-eye view' (possessive adjective) instead of 'eagles view.' Place 'on my phone' after 'capture moments' for natural adverb placement. Also remove filler 'uh' and ensure conditional structure.