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Part 1

Examinador

Are there tall buildings near your home?

Candidato

No, dear aunt, the area that we live has restrictions on building highlights apartment to preserve the landscape.

Examinador

Do you take photos of buildings?

Candidato

It depends on the situation. For example when I see umm interesting building such as very tall or very strange shape, I would take photo however.

Examinador

Is there a building that you would like to visit?

Candidato

I'd like to visit Tokyo Skytree because although I've lived in Tokyo for many years, I've never been there. There are so many family friendly shops, so I'm excited to see the Panama View oversea.

Examinador

Do you want to live in a tall building?

Candidato

Not at all, because in case of emergency such as earthquake I would use the stairs even if I live in high floor.

Avaliação

Total

Total: 6.0Fluência e coerência: 6.0Pronúncia: 6.0Gramática: 5.5Recurso lexical: 6.0

Part 1

Are there tall buildings near your home?

Pontuação: 48.0

Sugestão: 回答は意味を伝えていますが、語彙や文法の誤り、丁寧すぎる婉曲表現("dear aunt"は不自然)と不明瞭な語順が目立ちます。まず冒頭は直接的に質問に答える短いセンテンスにし、その後で理由を簡潔に述べてください。例えば「There are restrictions on building heights to preserve the landscape.」のように主語と語順を整え、不要な語を省き、”heights”や”preserve”など適切な語を使ってください。日本語での改善ポイント: 1) 不自然な呼びかけ("dear aunt")は使わないこと。直接答える。 2) 「building highlights」は誤り。正しくは"building heights"。 3) 主語+動詞の構造を保ち、理由は1文でまとめる(最大5文を超えない)。 4) 接続語は不要なら避け簡潔に。

Exemplo: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. The local regulations limit building heights to preserve the natural landscape, so most houses are low-rise.

Do you take photos of buildings?

Pontuação: 62.0

Sugestão: 良い出だし("It depends")ですが、言い淀みや語順、冠詞・複数形の誤り("a interesting building", "take photo")が目立ちます。詳細を述べる際は接続詞でつなぎ、具体例を整理して1〜2文でまとめてください。日本語での改善ポイント: 1) ためらいの音("umm")を減らす。答えを少し練習して流暢に。 2) 冠詞と複数形を正しく使う("an interesting building", "take photos")。 3) 接続語("for example"の後はコンマ)と語順を整える。 4) 例は具体的に1つに絞ると良い(高さ・形・装飾など)。

Exemplo: It depends on the situation. For example, if I see an interesting building that is very tall or has an unusual shape, I usually take photos to remember its design.

Is there a building that you would like to visit?

Pontuação: 70.0

Sugestão: 内容は明確で理由も述べられていますが、文をつなぐ際の接続や語の選び方に改善余地があります。("Panama View oversea"は意味不明瞭)“oversea”は不自然で単数形・固有名詞の使い方を直す必要があります。また細部は具体的に説明し、語彙を正確に使ってください。日本語での改善ポイント: 1) 接続詞の使い方を整理する("because"の後に簡潔に理由を述べる)。 2) "family friendly"はハイフンでつなぐと分かりやすい(family-friendly shops)。 3) "Panama View oversea"は意味が分かりにくいので、何を見たいのか明確に("panoramic view over the sea"等)。 4) 1〜2文でまとめ、不要な語を避ける。

Exemplo: I'd like to visit Tokyo Skytree because, even though I've lived in Tokyo for many years, I've never been there. It offers a panoramic view over the city and the sea, and there are many family-friendly shops and restaurants to explore.

Do you want to live in a tall building?

Pontuação: 58.0

Sugestão: 答えは明快で理由もありますが、語順や表現の自然さに欠けます("live in high floor"は誤り)。また、理由を述べる際に一文で簡潔にまとめ、接続語を正しく使ってください。日本語での改善ポイント: 1) 否定の表現は簡潔に("No, I wouldn’t" または"No, I don’t want to")。 2) 「高層階」は"a high floor"や"a high-rise building"と表現。 3) 緊急時の行動は"use the stairs"で良いが、理由を流れるように繋げる("because" + 理由)。 4) 文法的に正しい語順と冠詞を使うこと。

Exemplo: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because in an emergency like an earthquake I would prefer to live on a low floor so I could evacuate more easily using the stairs.

Gramática

Incorrect use of pronouns

× No, dear aunt, the area that we live has restrictions on building highlights apartment to preserve the landscape.

No, Auntie, the area where we live has restrictions on building high-rise apartments to preserve the landscape.

『we live』に続く節では場所を表すために関係副詞whereを使うべきです。また 'dear aunt' は口語では 'Auntie' の方が自然です。'building highlights apartment' は意味不明で、意図は『高層マンション』なので 'building high-rise apartments' の語順と語彙に直しました。さらに名詞 'apartment' は複数形が適切なので複数形にしました。これにより文全体の文法と語順が自然になります.

Present tense issue

× It depends on the situation. For example when I see umm interesting building such as very tall or very strange shape, I would take photo however.

It depends on the situation. For example, when I see an interesting building that is very tall or has a very strange shape, I would take a photo.

可算名詞 'building' と 'photo' は単数形の前に不定冠詞'a'が必要です。形容詞句の順序と接続には 'that is' や 'has' を使って明確にします。'however' の位置が不自然なので削除しました。コンマが不足しているため 'For example,' を追加しました。これらの修正で時制と語法が整います.

Incorrect use of quantifiers

× I'd like to visit Tokyo Skytree because although I've lived in Tokyo for many years, I've never been there.

I'd like to visit Tokyo Skytree because, although I've lived in Tokyo for many years, I've never been there.

文自体は大きな文法誤りはありませんが接続詞 'because' と 'although' を並べるときはカンマで区切って挿入節を明確にする必要があります。句読点の改善により文の意味が明瞭になります.

Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs

× There are so many family friendly shops, so I'm excited to see the Panama View oversea.

There are so many family-friendly shops, so I'm excited to see the panorama view overseas.

複合形容詞 'family-friendly' はハイフンでつなぎます。'Panama View' は文脈から 'panorama view' または 'panoramic view' を意味すると推定されるため 'panorama view' にし、 'oversea' は副詞形 'overseas' が正しいです。大文字は固有名詞でない限り不要です.

Verb in the present participle form

× Not at all, because in case of emergency such as earthquake I would use the stairs even if I live in high floor.

Not at all, because in case of an emergency, such as an earthquake, I would use the stairs even if I lived on a high floor.

'in case of emergency' は通常 'in case of an emergency' のように冠詞が必要です。'such as earthquake' には冠詞 'an' を加えるべきです。仮定の意味を含む 'even if' の後は現実的でない条件を示すため過去形 'lived' を用いる方が自然です。'in high floor' は不自然で 'on a high floor' と前置詞と冠詞を修正しました.

Vocabulário

ExcitedThrilled; Aroused
FriendlyAffable; Amicable; Favorable; Compatible
HighTall; High-ranking; Inflated; Strong; Favorable
InterestingAbsorbing
ManyNumerous; A great/good deal of
StrangeUnusual; Weird; Unfamiliar; Ill at ease
TallIn height; Demanding
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