Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., "by bus or by car" twice) and correct singular/plural and article use ("the houses" not "the house").

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I like to count the houses I pass and observe people on the street, which makes the journey feel more interesting and helps me notice new neighborhoods.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and correctness: use a clear topic sentence, correct collocations ("take pictures of the scenery"), and avoid awkward phrases ("I make sure I take sense"). Provide one concise reason and a linking word. Use plural/singular correctly and simplify sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially when people wave at me. I do this because it helps me remember new places and I can look back at the photos later to recall where I have been.

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and correct: start with a direct preference sentence, then add one specific reason with linking words. Correct grammar ("calm and uplifting", "think deeply", "it helps me find solutions") and avoid repeating ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because they are calm and uplifting. For example, when I hike I feel relaxed and can think deeply about my problems, which often helps me find solutions.

× Yes, I often look out the window while traveling by bus or by car and this is because I love to count the house that I see while traveling.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window while traveling by bus or by car, and this is because I love to count the houses that I see while traveling.

The noun 'house' should be plural 'houses' because 'count' implies more than one and refers to multiple items seen; this is a singular and plural issue (use plural nouns after verbs indicating multiple items). Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'houses' whenever referring to more than one house.

× Most of the time I get to watch other people through the window and it's fun for me also.

✓ Most of the time I watch other people through the window, and it is fun for me.

Avoid unnecessary 'get to' which is awkward here; 'it's' to 'it is' is optional. Placing 'also' at end is unnecessary and awkward. Improve clarity by removing 'get to' and moving to a simple present verb 'watch.' Add a comma before 'and'.

× Yes, I often take pictures of of the scenery outside the window, most especially scenes of people waving at me.

✓ Yes, I often take pictures of the scenery outside the window, especially scenes of people waving at me.

Remove the duplicated 'of' and replace 'most especially' with 'especially' which is more natural. 'Take pictures of the scenery' is the correct prepositional structure. Suggestion: proofread to avoid doubled words and simplify modifiers.

× I make sure I take sense of new places that I have just found or new area that I have never been to and this is help will help me to keep memory of the place.

✓ I make sure I take photos of new places that I have just discovered or areas that I have never been to, and this helps me keep memories of the place.

Multiple errors: 'take sense' is incorrect—use 'take photos' or 'get a sense'; 'new area' should be plural 'areas' to match 'places'; article usage and verb agreement: 'this is help will help' is ungrammatical—use 'this helps' (present tense third person singular). 'Keep memory' should be 'keep memories' or 'remember the place.' Suggestion: use 'discover' for finding new places and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I prefer the mountains because I find it calm and elevating.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I find them calm and uplifting.

The pronoun should be 'them' to agree with plural 'mountains' (pronoun error combined with agreement). 'Elevating' is less natural than 'uplifting' when describing emotional effect. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and choose appropriate adjective.

× Whenever I climb the mountain I feel relaxed and my mind gets to think deep on issues that I might be going through and then gives me solution.

✓ Whenever I climb the mountain, I feel relaxed and my mind begins to think deeply about issues I may be going through and then gives me solutions.

Use a comma after the introductory clause. 'Gets to think' is awkward; use 'begins to think' or 'starts thinking.' 'Think deep' should be 'think deeply' (adverb). 'On issues' should be 'about issues.' 'Might be going through' can be 'may be going through.' 'Gives me solution' needs plural 'solutions.' Suggestion: use adverb forms for verbs and correct prepositions.

× I solution to issues also.

✓ I also find solutions to issues.

Original lacks a verb and has incorrect word order; 'I solution' is not grammatical (noun used without verb). Rephrase to 'I also find solutions to issues' to include a verb and place 'also' correctly. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a verb and natural word order.