Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 응답은 직접적이고 이유도 제시했지만 문장이 중복되고 어색한 표현(예: "each scenario each place", "every every skies")과 불완전한 문장으로 인해 명확성이 떨어집니다. 문장을 간결하게 정리하고 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 전개하세요. 또한 예시를 구체적으로 하나로 정리해 자연스럽게 마무리하세요. 발음이나 유창성 향상을 위해 불필요한 반복(uh)을 줄이세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out the window because the scenery makes travel more enjoyable and memorable. For instance, when I travel through the countryside I notice changing landscapes—green fields, winding rivers and different skies—which help me remember each trip vividly.

Sugestão: 의도는 분명하지만 문법 오류(예: "may helps", 시제 혼동)와 불필요한 반복("even a long time past/ passed by")이 점수를 낮춥니다. 간결한 주제문을 사용하고, 단일 시제로 유지하며 구체적인 이유나 빈도를 덧붙여 보세요. 연결어로 문장을 매끄럽게 이어주세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because pictures help me recall details more clearly. Even years later, I can look at the photos and remember where I was and how the place felt.

Sugestão: 선호 이유를 말했지만 어휘 사용에 오류가 있고(예: "expensive view"는 부적절), 표현이 반복적입니다. 더 적절한 어휘(예: "expansive view")를 사용하고 구체적 이유와 간단한 비교를 추가해 답변을 풍부하게 하세요. 문장은 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and the expansive, open view it offers. The combination of sunlight and water creates stunning colors at sunrise or sunset, which makes seaside visits very memorable.

× I enjoy watching the scenery while traveling because it enriches the experience and each scenario each place has different views so I can remember the trip more vividly.

✓ I enjoy watching the scenery while traveling because it enriches the experience and each place has different views, so I can remember the trip more vividly.

Sentence had redundant words ('scenario each place') and a run-on structure. Remove redundancy and add a comma before 'so' to join clauses correctly. Use 'watching' and 'traveling' are correct gerunds here. Suggestion: Eliminate repeated words and connect clauses with proper punctuation.

× For example, uh every every skies are different and the.

✓ For example, the sky is different in each place.

'Every skies are' is incorrect because 'every' requires a singular noun ('every sky is') or use plural without 'every' ('skies are'). Also the original ended abruptly. Correct form: 'the sky is different in each place' for clarity and subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: Use singular with 'every' and ensure sentence completion.

× Of course I do, because the photo may helps me to remember that scenery more vividly and specifically so.

✓ Of course I do, because the photo may help me to remember that scenery more vividly and specifically.

After modal verb 'may' the base form of the verb should be used (may help), not 'helps'. Remove the extraneous 'so' at the end which creates an incomplete clause. Suggestion: Use base verb after modals and avoid trailing filler words.

× And even a long time past, even a long time passed by, I can still remember.

✓ Even after a long time has passed, I can still remember.

Use present perfect ('has passed') to show that time has elapsed up to now. 'A long time past' is ungrammatical; 'passed by' is acceptable but 'has passed' is clearer. Keep one concise clause. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions that affect the present.

× I prefer sea because I like to swim and the sea gives me an expensive view and its horizontal view is very beautiful.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like to swim, and the sea gives me an expansive view; its horizontal view is very beautiful.

Use the definite article 'the sea' when speaking about the sea in general. 'Expensive' is the wrong adjective; 'expansive' (meaning wide, vast) fits the intended meaning. Also split with punctuation for readability. Suggestion: Use appropriate articles and choose the correct adjective based on meaning.

× Also the scenery that sea and the sun makes, it's really beautiful and memorable.

✓ Also, the scenery created by the sea and the sun is really beautiful and memorable.

Original has awkward word order and an unnecessary comma plus a pronoun 'it' creating a fragment. Use 'created by' to show the relationship and a single clause 'is really beautiful and memorable.' Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb structure and correct modifier placement.