Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix grammar errors, remove repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and avoid repeating words (e.g., "it it"). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because the scenery relaxes me. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes like rice fields or city streets, which makes the journey feel shorter. So I often take a moment to observe and unwind.

Sugestão: Correct grammar (tenses and article use) and be more specific about what you photograph and why. Use a linking word to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like "or something like that." Limit to 2–3 sentences and give a concrete example.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because they help me remember trips. For instance, I usually photograph mountain views and local street vendors selling handmade crafts, which capture the atmosphere of the place.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and one or two clear supporting reasons. Remove fillers (uh, umm) and correct grammar. Be specific about what you enjoy at the sea (e.g., sunsets, swimming, seafood) and use linking words like "because" or "so" for coherence. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I love beaches and fresh seafood. For example, I enjoy watching sunsets over the ocean and swimming, which helps me relax after a busy week.

× Yes, I always look out of the window of car or bus when I travel because it it can refresh me about the view and also the fresh air and it's make me feel more relaxed and curious.

✓ Yes, I always look out of the window of a car or a bus when I travel because it can refresh me with the view and the fresh air, and it makes me feel more relaxed and curious.

Issues: missing articles before 'car' and 'bus' (use 'a'), repeated word 'it it', incorrect preposition 'refresh me about' (use 'refresh me with' or 'refresh me by'), and subject-verb agreement 'it's make' should be 'it makes'. Also avoid 'the window of car or bus' — 'the window of a car or a bus' is correct. Suggestion: add missing articles, remove duplicate word, use correct preposition, and match singular subject 'it' with 'makes'.

× Yeah, I definitely take a lot of photo because it's can keep it as a memory when I been to any places.

✓ Yeah, I definitely take a lot of photos because they can keep memories when I go to places.

Issues: plural form 'photo' should be 'photos' (singular/plural error), unnecessary 'it's' before 'can' (modal usage), incorrect object 'it' after 'keep' and incorrect tense 'been to' (should be 'go to' or 'have been to' depending on meaning). Corrected to 'they can keep memories when I go to places' to match present habitual tense. Suggestion: use plural 'photos', drop 'it's', use plural pronoun 'they', and use simple present 'go' for habitual actions or present perfect 'have been to' for past experiences.

× So like I normally take the view of the mountains, the local people who are selling their local product or something like that.

✓ I normally take views of the mountains, and photos of local people who are selling their local products or things like that.

Issues: 'take the view' is awkward — use 'take views' or 'take a view' depending on meaning; 'product' should be plural 'products' when speaking generally. Also clearer to specify 'take photos of'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general, repeated actions and clarify the verb object to 'take photos of'.

× I uh, definitely prefer sea because I love I'm the big, I'm a beach lover, so and I'm also the big fan of a seafood as well, so I definitely choose sea.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea because I love it — I'm a big beach lover, and I'm also a big fan of seafood, so I definitely choose the sea.

Issues: missing article 'the' before 'sea', awkward phrasing 'I love I'm the big' and 'the big fan of a seafood' — 'sea' and 'seafood' need articles/ determiners and correct adjective order. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I love it'. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'sea', insert 'it' after 'love', use 'a big fan of seafood' (no 'a' before uncountable 'seafood'), and streamline phrasing.

× Uh, I want to see the sunset, umm, during.

✓ I want to see the sunset while I'm there.

Issue: sentence fragment 'during' is incomplete — 'during' needs an object or time expression. Better to use 'while I'm there' to express wanting to see the sunset during the visit. Suggestion: complete the clause by specifying when: 'while I'm there' or 'during my visit'.