Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự câu; loại bỏ từ thừa và sửa lỗi phát âm/viết sai (ví dụ “The I”, “some”, “when the lights”) để câu rõ ràng hơn. Nên có câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (thời điểm, loại cảnh vật) và dùng từ nối nếu cần.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus. I especially enjoy seeing trees and old buildings as they pass by, particularly in the morning when the sunlight makes everything glow.

Sugestão: Sử dụng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ (ví dụ 'photo' lặp nhiều). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, giải thích lý do và nêu một ví dụ cụ thể hoặc cảm giác khi chụp. Chú ý ngữ pháp thời hiện tại đơn và mệnh đề nguyên nhân.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because photography is my hobby. For example, I like capturing light on buildings or reflections on water, which makes me feel happy and relaxed.

Sugestão: Sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng: nói rõ ưu tiên (sea), nêu lý do cụ thể (sunset/sunrise) và so sánh ngắn gọn với núi. Tránh lặp từ, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý (e.g., 'because', 'while'). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu hợp lý.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I always enjoy watching sunrises and sunsets there. While the mountains are peaceful and beautiful, the changing colours over the water are what I like most.

× Yes, when I travel by bus, I sometimes look outside the window to enjoy the scenery. The I love to see the trees and buildings passing by some, especially in the morning when the lights.

✓ Yes, when I travel by bus, I sometimes look out of the window to enjoy the scenery. I love to see the trees and buildings passing by, especially in the morning when the lights are on.

The sentence has problems with word choice and missing verb forms. 'Look outside the window' is better as 'look out of the window'. 'The I love' is incorrect; remove the extra article. 'Passing by some' is ungrammatical; use 'passing by'. Finally, 'when the lights' is incomplete and needs a verb: 'when the lights are on'. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to spot missing words and ensure each clause has a verb. Suggested grammar type: Present tense context with missing verbs and word choice issues.

× Yeah, I love that photo outside the window. That's my hobby and when I take the photo I feel happy and enjoy the scenery by photo.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos out of the window. It's my hobby, and when I take photos I feel happy and enjoy the scenery in the photos.

Use plural 'photos' for a habitual action and the gerund 'taking photos' is more natural than 'that photo'. 'By photo' is incorrect prepositional use; use 'in the photos'. Also use 'It's' instead of 'That's' for general habit. Suggestion: use gerunds for activities and check prepositions for how something is presented (in the photos). Grammar type referenced: Article and noun form choice (article errors).

× I prefer this sea to mountain or for me I own always enjoy the sunset and sunrise.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains. For me, I always enjoy the sunset and the sunrise.

Incorrect singular/plural and article usage: 'this sea to mountain' should be 'the sea to the mountains' to compare two general places. 'I own always' is nonsense; correct phrase is 'I always'. Also include articles 'the' before 'sunset' and 'sunrise' when referring to specific events. Suggestion: use plural for general categories (mountains) and place adverbs (always) in natural positions (before main verb). Grammar type referenced: Singular and plural issue.

× The this the moment are different scenery, but both of them is a beautiful but I love enjoy, I love.

✓ These moments are different scenes, but both of them are beautiful, and I enjoy them.

Multiple issues: 'The this the moment' is ungrammatical; use 'These moments'. 'Are different scenery' mixes countable/uncountable; use 'different scenes'. Subject-verb agreement: 'both of them is' should be 'are'. 'I love enjoy' is wrong; choose one verb: 'I enjoy them'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, ensure subject and verb agree in number, and use correct noun forms (scene vs scenery). Grammar type referenced: Subject-verb agreement errors.