Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and reason). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g. “from bypass”). Use one or two supporting details linked with a connector. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching the passing scenery. However, when I drive my own car I cannot look around much because I need to concentrate on the road. So I mainly enjoy the view when I am a passenger.

Sugestão: Give a complete reason and add a brief example. Avoid sentence fragments and repeating words. Use a linking word to connect reason and example for coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I want to capture beautiful or interesting scenes. For example, last month I photographed a sunset over rice fields while traveling to my hometown, and it reminded me of that peaceful journey.

Sugestão: Answer directly naming the choice (the sea or the mountains). Give a clear reason and a brief supporting detail. Remove hesitations and repeated words; use a linking word to make the explanation smooth.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because the sound of waves helps me relax. For example, after a stressful week I like to walk on the beach at night because the waves help me forget work and sleep better.

× I usually look out the window from bypass because, uh, when I'm in my car I'm driving on my own so I don't have time to see the window.

✓ I usually look out the window when I'm a passenger, because when I'm driving my car on my own I don't have time to look out.

This sentence has incorrect preposition and phrasing (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11). 'from bypass' is not a correct prepositional phrase here; use 'when I'm a passenger' or 'from the passenger seat'. Also 'see the window' is unnatural; use 'look out'. Word order and clause connection were improved to make the meaning clear. Suggestion: use clear prepositions for location/time (e.g., 'when', 'in', 'on') and prefer natural collocations like 'look out the window' and 'when I'm driving'.

× Yes, I like to take photos of the scenery from outside the car window because. Once I look the beautiful scenery, I want to record it.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of the scenery outside the car window. When I see beautiful scenery, I want to capture it.

This contains problems with verb forms and sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type ID: 9 and 26). 'Once I look the beautiful scenery' uses incorrect verb and article; 'look' requires a preposition or should be replaced with 'see'. 'Record it' is grammatically possible but 'capture' or 'take a photo of it' is more natural. Also the original had an incomplete sentence ending with 'because.' Suggestion: use correct verb forms ('see' not 'look' without a preposition) and complete sentences; use 'When' or 'If' for time clauses.

× I prefer to go see because. The sound of sea makes me relax and forget about, uh, usual usual work all night.

✓ I prefer going to the sea because the sound of the sea helps me relax and forget about my usual work for a while.

This sentence has sentence structure and article/preposition issues (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26 and 11 and 22). 'I prefer to go see because.' is incomplete and unnatural. 'The sound of sea' needs the definite article: 'the sound of the sea'. 'usual usual work' is repetitive and missing a determiner: use 'my usual work'. 'all night' may not fit the intended meaning; 'for a while' or 'temporarily' is clearer. Suggestion: complete the main clause, add appropriate articles ('the'), remove repetition, and choose adverbial phrase that matches intended duration.