Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (um, uh) and grammar errors (word order, articles, pluralisation). Improve coherence by using linking phrases like “for example” or “because” and give a concrete example of what you notice.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like noticing how the light changes on fields and how small villages appear as we pass by, which makes the journey relaxing.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then explain when and why you take photos with specific details. Use linking words such as “especially” or “when” correctly and finish your thought—don’t leave sentences incomplete. Reduce hesitation and use accurate collocations (e.g. “with my friends or family”).

Exemplo: Yes, I do take photos from the car window, especially when the view is unusual or beautiful. For instance, when we drive along the coast with my family, I often photograph dramatic cliffs or sunset colours so we can remember the trip.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear preference and give specific, correctly named activities or reasons. Avoid repetition and hesitation. Use linking words (for example, because) and accurate vocabulary (e.g. ‘beach volleyball’, ‘surfing’, ‘sandboarding’). Keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because there are many activities to enjoy. For example, I like beach volleyball and surfing, and I also enjoy relaxing on the sand while listening to the waves, which makes seaside holidays more fun for me.

× Yes, I travel by because such as bus or a car, I often see the window at this landscape.

✓ Yes, I travel by bus or car, and I often look out the window at the landscape.

The original sentence has extra words and incorrect word order ('travel by because such as bus or a car') causing a sentence structure error. Remove filler phrases ('because such as') and connect clauses with 'and'. Use 'look out the window at the landscape' to express viewing scenery. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Umm, there are lots of subtle change.

✓ Umm, there are lots of subtle changes.

'Lots of' requires a plural noun; 'change' must be plural as 'changes'. Use 'subtle changes' to match the quantifier and convey multiple small variations.

× Subtle changes of umm, beautiful.

✓ The subtle changes are beautiful.

The original fragment lacks a verb and has incorrect word order. Convert it to a full sentence: subject ('the subtle changes') + linking verb ('are') + adjective ('beautiful'). This corrects adjective placement and forms a complete sentence.

× Yes, depends on the situation.

✓ Yes, it depends on the situation.

The sentence is missing a subject. Add 'it' as the dummy subject for clarity and correct English sentence structure.

× I often take photos of landscape outside the car window, especially with my friends or families.

✓ I often take photos of the landscape outside the car window, especially with my friends or family.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'landscape' to refer to specific scenery. 'Family' as a collective noun is uncountable here; use the singular form 'family' rather than 'families' when referring to member(s) of one family group. Also keep 'friends' plural or 'my friends and family'.

× We talk about the, uh, scenery and we have a.

✓ We talk about the scenery and take photos together.

The original sentence is incomplete ('we have a.'), leaving the object unspecified. Provide a complete verb phrase such as 'take photos together' to finish the thought and match the context.

× I favor the sea because in the sea there are a lot of activities such as uh, uh, beach ballet boy and uh, S boarding.

✓ I prefer the sea because there are a lot of activities at the beach, such as beach volleyball and surfing.

Use 'prefer' instead of 'favor' for natural collocation with choices. 'In the sea' is wrong for beach activities; use 'at the beach'. The phrase 'beach ballet boy' is incorrect—likely 'beach volleyball'. 'S boarding' should be 'surfing'. Also adjust word order for clarity.

× So there are so many activities.

✓ There are so many activities.

Remove the redundant 'So' at the start; it is unnecessary. The sentence is otherwise grammatically fine.

× So that's why I love the theme.

✓ That's why I love the beach.

'Theme' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'the sea' or 'the beach'. Replace 'theme' with 'beach' for correct meaning and a natural sentence. Remove the leading 'So' unless used for spoken emphasis.