Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity, grammar and structure. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two clear supporting details using linking words. Correct common mistakes: use ‘by bus or car’, ‘look out of the window’, ‘scenery’ (uncountable), and avoid vague phrases like ‘generally targets’. Keep the answer to under 5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching the scenery because it helps me relax and gives me new ideas for my hobbies. For example, seeing parks and old buildings often inspires my photography projects.

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct. Give a direct yes/no or frequency statement, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Avoid fillers (‘uh’, ‘like’) and repetition. Use linking words such as ‘but’, ‘however’, or ‘for example’ to connect ideas. Correct verb forms: ‘I try to stay away from the internet’, ‘it depends on the situation’.

Exemplo: Sometimes I take photos from the car window, but it depends on the situation. For instance, if the landscape is unusual or beautiful, I will take pictures; however, if I am in a busy city or the view is obstructed, I usually don't.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly. Start with ‘I prefer…’ then give specific reasons and an example. Fix unclear phrases (‘being the model’, ‘count myself, Devin’). Use linking words (‘because’, ‘for example’, ‘also’) and keep to 1–3 sentences. Mention concrete reasons such as activities, atmosphere, or family time.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and hiking opportunities. For example, I often go on walks with my family in the hills, which helps us relax and spend quality time together.

× US or car? Well yes, I like looking out of the window because it allows me to see a lot of beautiful sceneries and inspire myself to new and generally targets.

✓ 'Bus or car? Well, yes. I like looking out of the window because it allows me to see a lot of beautiful scenery and inspires me toward new and general goals.'

The speaker said 'US or car' instead of 'Bus or car' (misheard/mistyped pronoun-like word). 'Sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. 'Inspire myself to new and generally targets' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect pronouns and noun forms. Use 'inspires me toward new and general goals' to make the object and pronoun consistent and natural. Also change verb to 'inspires' for subject-verb agreement.

× Car window. I mean, I'm one of these people who really try to standing away from like Internet and taking photos of anything I see in my life.

✓ 'The car window. I mean, I'm one of those people who really try to stay away from the Internet and take photos of anything I see in my life.'

'Try to standing' is incorrect: after 'try to' the base verb 'stay' should be used, not the -ing form. Use 'those' not 'these' for natural reference, and 'stay away from the Internet' is the correct collocation. Also use 'take photos' (base verb) after 'try to'.

× Uh, so I basically depends. So it basically depends on specific situation.

✓ 'Uh, so it basically depends. So it basically depends on the specific situation.'

'I basically depends' mixes subject 'I' with verb 'depends' (third person). Use 'it basically depends' or 'I basically depend'. Also add the article 'the' before 'specific situation' for correctness.

× Uh, but most of the time while traveling around around, especially where I like doing this to expand my outlook and make it special.

✓ 'But most of the time, while traveling around, especially in places where I like to do this, I expand my outlook and make the experience special.'

Original sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('around around') and lacks a clear subject for 'doing this'. Rephrase to provide a clear subject and verb sequence. Use 'places where I like to do this' and 'expand my outlook' as a natural collocation, and clarify 'make the experience special.'

× I probably prefer more being the model being in the mountains because it allows me to count myself, Devin and in generally be on the go with, specially with some of my best family members.

✓ 'I probably prefer being in the mountains because it allows me to reflect, relax, and generally be on the go, especially with some of my closest family members.'

The original contains many incorrect phrases: 'prefer more being the model' is incorrect comparative structure; use 'prefer being in the mountains'. 'Count myself, Devin' is unclear — likely meant 'reflect' or 'calm myself'. 'In generally' should be 'generally'. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. Cleaned sentence uses correct verb forms and word choices to convey intended meaning.