Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Also correct basic grammar (e.g., article use, verb forms) and unclear phrases like “favorite sport.”

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel. For example, on flights I always try to get a window seat so I can watch the landscape and clouds pass by, which I find relaxing and interesting.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons with linking words (e.g., because, so, therefore). Remove filler and repair repetitions and unfinished thoughts. Use precise vocabulary (memory, share) and correct small errors (double words). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos through airplane or car windows because I want to remember the places I visit. For instance, I take pictures of mountain ranges and city skylines so I can share them with my family and look back on those memories later.

Sugestão: Start with a direct, well-formed topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / although). Avoid vague or incomplete phrases and correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'expans[e]' → 'expanse', 'on the sea'). Make sentences complete and coherent.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the wide expanse of water and the variety of activities it offers. For example, I like photographing boats and people relaxing on the beach, although I also enjoy mountains for hiking occasionally.

× Yes, I always do that I enjoy looking out through the windows while traveling, especially when on airplanes I love to look out for the window whenever I book my flight, I try to make sure that my seat is actually near the window is my favorite sport when traveling because I.

✓ Yes, I always do that. I enjoy looking out through the windows while traveling, especially on airplanes. I love to look out of the window whenever I book a flight, so I try to make sure that my seat is near the window because it is my favorite part of traveling.

The original contains run-on sentences and unclear phrasing. Separate independent clauses with periods or conjunctions to avoid run-ons. Use 'on airplanes' rather than 'when on airplanes', and 'look out of the window' is the correct prepositional phrasing. Replace 'is my favorite sport' with 'is my favorite part' to correct word choice and meaning. Suggestions: break long sentences into shorter ones, use correct prepositions ('out of'), and choose appropriate vocabulary ('part' not 'sport').

× Yes, I do take a photo of the scenery outside the airplane windows. I do it every time. Whenever I'm traveling, I'm always ready with my phone to take a picture. I want to be able to remember and the the time you want to have a memory of that particular time and also want to be able to share it with friends and family. So.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside airplane windows. I do it every time I travel. Whenever I'm traveling, I'm ready with my phone to take pictures because I want to remember the moment and I want to be able to share it with friends and family.

Problems include unnecessary repetition and incorrect phrasing 'remember and the the time you want to have a memory of that particular time'. Use plural 'photos' for habitual action and simplify tense: 'I take' or 'I do it every time I travel.' Remove extra words and restructure the clause: 'remember the moment' is clearer. Suggestions: avoid redundant words, use consistent tense, and use clear noun phrases ('moment' or 'memory').

× I love to be able to take pictures of the view from up and I love how expans those sea is.

✓ I love to take pictures of the view from above, and I love how expansive the sea is.

'from up' is incomplete; use 'from above'. 'expans' is a misspelling; use adjective 'expansive'. Also 'those sea is' mixes plural demonstrative with singular noun—use 'the sea is'. Suggestions: choose correct prepositions ('from above'), correct spelling ('expansive'), and ensure determiner-noun agreement ('the sea').

× I I want to see different activities going on on the same. I like to see both. I like see kind of men doing what.

✓ I want to see different activities happening on the shore. I like to see both; I enjoy watching people doing various things.

Original has repetition 'I I', awkward phrase 'going on on the same', and incomplete sentence 'I like see kind of men doing what.' Replace with 'happening on the shore' to convey seaside activities. Use 'watching people doing various things' to complete the thought. Suggestions: remove repeated words, complete the sentence with a clear object/place, and use gerund forms 'happening', 'doing' correctly.