Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Говорите более ясно и логично: начните с короткого утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей. Избегайте лишних слов и неверных выражений (например, «bath column»). Используйте связки, чтобы связать идеи («for example», «sometimes», «especially when»).

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching trees and small villages passing by, especially when we drive through the countryside. Sometimes I also notice animals or interesting houses along the road.

Sugestão: Сформулируйте мысль грамотно: начните с прямого ответа, затем приведите конкретные причины и примеры. Исправьте грамматические ошибки (например, «when you be calm» → «when you feel calm»). Используйте связки («because», «so», «for example»).

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is interesting and relaxing. For example, when I see mountains or wildlife I stop the car (or ask the driver to stop) to take pictures so I can remember the view.

Sugestão: Дайте прямой ответ и поддержите его конкретными причинами и примерами. Избегайте неопределённых фраз («and so»). Исправьте грамматику и употребление слов (например, «more healthy» → «healthier»). Используйте связки («because», «for example», «also»).

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I find the air fresher and the scenery more peaceful. For example, I enjoy hiking in mountain forests where the air feels cleaner, and I like the quiet atmosphere compared with busy beaches.

× Actually, yes, sometimes I look out the window at the scenery and some views, other pictures and others in the forest or other places, but I think we come in the bath column.

✓ Actually, yes, sometimes I look out the window at the scenery, at different views, at scenes in the forest, or in other places, but I think we come in the bus column.

The student used incorrect and unclear pronouns and nouns: 'other pictures and others' is vague and ungrammatical. 'We come in the bath column' appears to be a mistranslation or wrong words; likely intended 'bus column' or 'bus convoy'. Suggest using specific nouns and consistent pronouns. Replace vague 'other' phrases with concrete phrases like 'different views' and correct 'bath' to 'bus'. Suggested improvement: think of the exact noun needed, avoid repeating 'other' without an object, and check unlikely collocations (bath column -> bus convoy).

× Of course, because it's very interesting and you can take photo when you be calm and just enjoy with it and you can see some animals which you might be take photo.

✓ Of course, because it's very interesting and you can take photos when you are calm and just enjoy them, and you can see some animals which you might photograph.

Errors: 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos'; 'when you be calm' uses incorrect verb form and should be 'when you are calm' (present tense of to be); 'enjoy with it' is wrong preposition and object—use 'enjoy them' referring to photos or the view; 'which you might be take photo' mixes modal and verb forms incorrectly. Use 'might photograph' or 'might take photos'. Suggested improvement: use correct verb forms after modal verbs and be consistent with plurals and pronouns; practice: 'you can take photos when you are calm and just enjoy them.'

× I think be in mountains very useful for you because air is very more healthy for our health and might be more beautiful than sea and so.

✓ I think being in the mountains is very good for you because the air is much healthier for your health and it might be more beautiful than the sea.

Errors: 'I think be in mountains' lacks correct verb form; should use the gerund 'being' as subject. 'Very useful for you' is awkward; 'very good for you' is natural. 'air is very more healthy' is ungrammatical—use 'much healthier'. 'our health' vs 'your health' mismatch with 'you'; use 'your health'. 'might be more beautiful than sea and so' needs article 'the sea' and remove 'and so'. Suggested improvement: use gerunds as subjects and comparative forms correctly (much healthier), match possessive pronouns to the subject, and include definite articles where needed.