Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid hesitations and repetitions. Use linking words (for example, 'especially' or 'because') to connect ideas, and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I especially enjoy long journeys because I can spot interesting places I might visit in the future, such as historical buildings or scenic towns. As a result, time seems to fly and the trip feels more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Respond directly and avoid repetition; use a clear reason and one example. Keep sentences smooth and natural, and use linking language like 'because' or 'so' to explain motivation.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery when I travel because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I photograph unusual buildings or landscapes so I can look back on them and share them with friends later.

Sugestão: Be clear and avoid filler and repetition. Start with a direct preference, give two concise reasons with specific details, and use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'but') to contrast. Avoid unclear phrases like 'species' when you mean 'slopes' or other words.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I enjoy diving and seeing many types of fish, which I find exciting and relaxing. By contrast, I am not a fan of mountain hiking because I get tired easily and prefer activities that involve water.

× I do, I like to enjoy the view while traveling, especially on a long trip, and I like to see the special places that may be in the future I'll go visit and I it's quite enjoyable for me.

✓ I do. I like enjoying the view while traveling, especially on a long trip, and I like to see the special places that I may visit in the future; it's quite enjoyable for me.

Run-on sentence and incorrect sequence of verb forms: 'like to enjoy' is acceptable but 'like enjoying' is more natural with 'like' followed by gerund; 'may be in the future I'll go visit' is ungrammatical and awkwardly mixes modal and future clause. Reorder to 'that I may visit in the future'. Also split into shorter clauses and replace 'and I it's' with 'it's' for clarity. Suggestion: use gerund after 'like' or keep 'like to' consistently, and form future possibilities as 'may visit in the future'.

× And umm, this time just flies by.

✓ And, this time just flies by.

Only minor punctuation and filler hesitation present; grammar is fine. Removed repeated filler 'umm' and ensured adverb placement is natural. Keep 'just' before the verb for emphasis. Suggestion: avoid filler words when possible.

× I do as well. I like to take pictures while photos while traveling and it it helps me remind.

✓ I do as well. I like to take pictures while traveling, and it helps me remember.

Redundant phrase 'take pictures while photos while' is incorrect and duplicated; 'helps me remind' is wrong because 'remind' needs an object or should be 'remember'. Use 'helps me remember' or 'reminds me'. Also remove duplicated 'it it'. Suggestion: use 'remember' after 'helps' or 'reminds me of' with an object.

× It helps me capture the memory of what I see and the view as well.

✓ It helps me capture the memory of what I see and the view.

Redundant 'as well' unnecessary after 'and the view'. Sentence structure otherwise acceptable. Suggestion: remove redundant phrases to make sentence concise.

× I prefer sea cause pers personally.

✓ I prefer the sea because, personally,

Missing definite article 'the' before 'sea' when speaking about the sea in general. 'cause pers personally' contains informal contraction and typo; replace with 'because, personally,'. Suggestion: use 'the sea' and avoid speech fillers and typos in formal answers.

× I like to dive in and see can see oh tons of different species of fish and it's quite enjoyable for me.

✓ I like to dive in and see tons of different species of fish, and it's quite enjoyable for me.

Unnecessary 'can see oh' fragments and disfluent hesitations; pronoun use is acceptable but sentence needs reordering and removal of filler. Also add comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Suggestion: remove fillers and keep clear clause order: 'I like to dive in and see tons of different species of fish.'

× But mountain I'm not like a hiking person.

✓ But with mountains, I'm not a hiking person.

Incorrect noun form and structure: 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' or prefixed with 'the'/'in the'. Also 'I'm not like a hiking person' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'I'm not a hiking person' or 'I don't like hiking'. Suggestion: say 'I'm not a hiking person' or 'I don't like hiking' and use 'mountains' or 'with mountains'.

× Maybe like I'll feel tired in hiking.

✓ Maybe I'll feel tired when hiking.

Incorrect preposition 'in' with 'hiking'; use 'when hiking' or 'while hiking'. Also remove filler 'like' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'when' or 'while' before gerund activities: 'I feel tired when hiking.'

× I don't like the UMM species in that.

✓ I don't like the wildlife there.

Unclear phrase 'the UMM species in that' is disfluent and ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning is dislike of species or wildlife in that environment. Replace with clear noun phrase 'the wildlife there'. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use a clear noun to express dislike.