Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, avoid hesitations and repetition, and organize your response with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, when, especially) correctly and reduce filler words like "you know" and repeated words. Aim for 3–4 well-structured sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or train. For example, when I first came to Canada I spent a long time watching the changing landscape because I was curious about the new places. I especially enjoy observing local architecture and countryside views.

Sugestão: Answer directly, correct grammatical errors, and remove hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and condition) then give a specific example. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "cinematic view," "surroundings") and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window, but only when the view is especially striking. For instance, on my first trip through the mountains I photographed dramatic peaks and valleys because the light and colors were unusual. Otherwise I usually just enjoy the view without taking pictures.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give concise, specific reasons. Fix grammar ("I was born", "I was raised") and avoid repetitions. Add one short supporting detail or comparison to strengthen the answer.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains. I was born and raised in a mountainous region, so I feel at home there and enjoy activities like hiking and watching sunrise over the peaks. In comparison, the sea is relaxing, but the mountains suit my memories and lifestyle better.

× Yeah, this is really good question.

✓ Yes, that's a really good question.

The student used informal 'Yeah' and omitted the article and contraction. 'This is really good question' is ungrammatical because 'question' requires an article; use 'that's a really good question' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: say 'Yes, that's a really good question.'

× Whenever, whenever I travel in buses or trains like I used to, you know, like see the view especially like when, whenever I go to a new places, for example, when I first came to Canada, like I had you know, like I had always been looking for new places.

✓ Whenever I travel by bus or train, I like to look at the view, especially when I go to a new place; for example, when I first came to Canada, I was always looking for new places.

Multiple errors: incorrect prepositions ('in buses or trains' -> 'by bus or train'), unnecessary repetitions and fillers, plural 'places' should be singular when talking about 'a new place', and tense consistency: 'when I first came' (past) pairs with 'I was always looking' (past continuous). Remove fillers for clarity. Suggestion: use 'by bus or train', keep tense consistent, and avoid repeated words like 'whenever' and 'like.'

× I depends on the scenarios and the view.

✓ It depends on the situation and the view.

'I depends' is incorrect: the verb must agree with the subject. The intended subject is 'it' (situation), so use 'it depends.' Also 'scenarios' is awkward here; 'situation' fits better. Suggestion: use 'It depends on the situation and the view.'

× Especially when I when I go to a new places, I if I get a new cinematic or really uh wonderful view than I used to take a pictures of the environment and the surrounding.

✓ Especially when I go to a new place, if I get a cinematic or really wonderful view, I usually take pictures of the environment and the surroundings.

Errors include extra repetitions ('when I when I'), plural disagreement ('a new places' -> 'a new place'), wrong comparative connector ('than' should be conditional 'then' or use 'if'), incorrect use of 'used to' and article errors ('a pictures' -> 'pictures' or 'a picture'). Also 'surrounding' should be 'surroundings.' Use 'usually' to express habitual action. Suggestion: simplify sentence, fix article and number agreement, and use correct conditional linking words ('if' and 'then').

× So it depends on the place.

✓ So it depends on the place.

This sentence is acceptable; kept as is for clarity. No grammatical correction needed.

× I came from the mountainous country, so obviously I would prefer a mountain because I had born there and I've been like I, I was raised there.

✓ I come from a mountainous country, so I obviously prefer the mountains because I was born and raised there.

Tense consistency and word choice issues: 'I came from' suggests past relocation; present origin is better as 'I come from.' 'Prefer a mountain' is unnatural; plural 'the mountains' fits. 'I had born there' is ungrammatical; correct is 'I was born there.' 'I've been... I was raised there' is redundant; combine as 'born and raised.' Suggestion: use 'I come from a mountainous country' and 'I was born and raised there.'

× So mountain is, I believe, as a home because I was born there.

✓ So the mountains are, I believe, like home to me because I was born there.

Incorrect article and singular/plural: use 'the mountains' rather than 'mountain' when referring to the mountain landscape generally. 'As a home' is incorrect phrasing; use 'like home to me.' Ensure verb agreement 'mountains are.' Suggestion: say 'the mountains are like home to me.'