Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct awkward phrasing ("enjoy my eye," "this clean").

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching changing fields and towns pass by, and I often notice small details like farmers working in the fields, which makes the journey interesting.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and reduce repetition. Use a linking phrase to add a specific reason or example (e.g., when or what you photograph). Avoid filler sounds and correct grammar ("it helps me").

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because they help me remember special trips. For instance, when I travel through the countryside I photograph old bridges and colourful fields, and later I organize these pictures into albums to share with friends.

Sugestão: Answer directly and coherently. State your preference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons, linked logically. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences; finish your thoughts and use correct vocabulary ("sea").

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the peaceful atmosphere. For example, when I reach a summit I feel a strong sense of achievement and I can see wide views of valleys and forests, which is more exciting to me than relaxing on the beach.

× Yes, I really like looking through the window at the landscape when traveling by bus or car uh because uh, it uh, makes me feel relaxed and uh and enjoy my eye uh, with the, with the this clean.

✓ Yes, I really like looking through the window at the landscape when traveling by bus or car because it makes me feel relaxed and pleases my eyes with the clean view.

Original contained unnecessary filler words and incorrect phrase 'enjoy my eye with the, with the this clean.' The verb 'like' correctly takes the gerund 'looking'. Replace wordy fillers, remove repeated conjunctions, and use 'pleases my eyes' or 'is pleasing to my eyes' to express visual enjoyment. Also correct article use ('the clean view'). ID:8

× Umm I I capture a lot of photos because it's help helps me remember special trips.

✓ Umm I capture a lot of photos because they help me remember special trips.

Original had subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issues. 'It's help helps' is incorrect. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'a lot of photos' and plural verb 'help'. Remove duplicate 'I'. The structure uses simple present to express habitual action, which is appropriate. ID:9

× Uh, also I take a lot of photo.

✓ Uh, also I take a lot of photos.

The noun 'photo' should be plural when modified by 'a lot of'. Use 'photos' to agree in number with the quantifier. ID:1

× I usually like more mountains, uh, instead of Sia uh, because I like hiking and uh, when I am on the top of the hills, I feel like I am at the top of the world, umm, at mountain I uh, take.

✓ I usually prefer mountains to the sea because I like hiking, and when I am on top of a hill I feel like I am at the top of the world.

Multiple issues: 'like more mountains, instead of Sia' is unnatural; use 'prefer X to Y'. 'Sia' is corrected to 'the sea'. 'On the top of the hills' should be 'on top of a hill' or 'on top of the hills' depending on meaning; singular 'a hill' is clearer. The fragment 'at mountain I take' is incomplete and was removed. Use consistent pronouns and complete clauses. Replace casual fillers and ensure correct comparative structure. ID:12

× Umm I I capture a lot of photos because it's help helps me remember special trips.

✓ Umm I capture a lot of photos because they help me remember special trips.

The phrase 'helps' was duplicated and incorrectly matched with 'it'. For plural 'photos' the correct verb is 'help' and the pronoun is 'they'. Remove the extra 'helps' and use proper subject-verb agreement. ID:2