Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법과 표현을 자연스럽게 고치고 문장 구조를 명확히 하세요. 현재 답변은 문법 오류(It's makes me, more exciting and good)와 부자연스러운 표현을 포함하고 있습니다. 간단한 주제문을 제시한 뒤 이유나 구체적 예(예: 특정 풍경, 감정 변화)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙여 연결어(for example, because)를 사용하면 응답이 더 풍부하고 논리적입니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I often look out of the car window when I travel because I find the changing scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching fields and small villages pass by, and it helps me feel calmer during long trips.

Sugestão: 내용이 혼란스럽고 단어 선택 오류(‘pillow’ 사용)와 시제·문법 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 정확한 취미를 말한 뒤 구체적인 동작과 빈도, 이유를 연결어(so, when, sometimes)를 사용해 설명하세요. 또한 온라인에 올린다는 표현은 'upload' 대신 'post'가 더 자연스럽습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I like taking photos as a hobby, so I often take pictures from the car window when I travel. Sometimes I post the best shots online to share them with my friends.

Sugestão: 문장 구성과 대명사 사용에 주의하세요(‘wave’→‘waves’, ‘she’는 부적절). 이유를 하나로 정리하고 구체적인 설명(예: 소리, 활동)을 추가하며 연결어(because, so)로 자연스럽게 연결하면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because the sound of the waves relaxes me. I also enjoy lying on the beach and swimming, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, I often enjoy looking around the scenery in the car.

✓ Yes, I often enjoy looking at the scenery from the car.

The verb phrase 'enjoy looking' is fine, but the preposition and noun choice are incorrect. Use 'look at' not 'look around' for viewing scenery, and 'from the car' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use 'enjoy looking at the scenery from the car.'

× It's makes me more exciting and good.

✓ It makes me more excited and happy.

'It's makes' is ungrammatical (extra 'it' and wrong verb form). Use 'It makes me' + adjective. 'Exciting' describes something that causes excitement; 'excited' describes a person. 'Good' is vague; 'happy' is more natural. Suggestion: say 'It makes me more excited and happy.'

× Yes, my favorite hobby is taking a pillow.

✓ Yes, my favorite hobby is taking photos.

The original sentence uses 'pillow' which is incorrect and doesn't fit context. The intended word is likely 'photos'. 'Hobby is taking photos' is correct. Suggestion: replace 'pillow' with 'photos.'

× So when I traveling in a car I take this moment and I sometimes I upload the online.

✓ So when I am traveling in a car I take photos of the moment and sometimes I upload them online.

Several issues: missing auxiliary 'am' for present continuous ('I am traveling'), incorrect noun phrase 'take this moment' should be 'take photos of the moment' or 'capture the moment', extra 'I' before 'upload', and wrong article 'the' before 'online' (should be 'online' without article). Also 'them' needed to refer to photos. Suggestion: use 'When I am traveling in a car, I take photos of the moment and sometimes I upload them online.'

× I prefer the sea because the sounds of wave makes me relaxed and I like lying on the beach so she is more like to me better.

✓ I prefer the sea because the sound of the waves makes me relaxed, and I like lying on the beach, so I like it better.

Multiple errors: 'sounds of wave' should be 'sound of the waves' or 'the sound of the waves'. Subject 'sound' (or 'sound of the waves') needs singular verb 'makes'. 'Relaxed' is fine after 'makes me'. The clause 'so she is more like to me better' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'so I like it better.' Replace 'she' with 'it' (the sea) and fix word order. Suggestion: 'I prefer the sea because the sound of the waves makes me relaxed, and I like lying on the beach, so I like it better.'