Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense and article errors (e.g., “I travel by car,” “the scenery outside the window,” “it shows beautiful moments”).

Exemplo: I usually travel by car, and I often look out of the window to enjoy the scenery. For example, I like watching the changing countryside and small villages as we drive, because the view relaxes me and makes the journey more interesting.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer first and then one or two specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., “I enjoy taking photos of scenery,” “I usually stop the car to take pictures of beautiful places”), remove redundancy, and use linking words like “for example” or “because” to explain reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of scenery from the car. For example, when I see an interesting landscape I stop the car and take several photos because capturing those moments helps me remember the trip and relaxes me.

Sugestão: Answer directly and add a specific reason with clear linking words. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., “I prefer the mountains because…”), correct repetitions and sentence fragments, and keep to two to three sentences maximum.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the peaceful atmosphere. For instance, reaching the summit gives me a sense of achievement and a wide, breathtaking view that I find more refreshing than the beach.

× Mostly I traveled in car.

✓ Mostly I travel by car.

The student used past tense 'traveled' but context describes habitual action, so present simple 'travel' is correct. Also use preposition 'by' with 'car'. Suggestion: use present simple for routines and 'by car' for transport.

× I have a car and I usually like to see the window scenery.

✓ I have a car and I usually like to look at the scenery outside the window.

The phrase 'window scenery' is unidiomatic and missing preposition 'outside'. Use 'look at' rather than 'see' for observing, and place 'outside the window' after 'scenery'. Also 'the' before 'scenery' is optional but 'the scenery outside the window' is natural.

× It's really amazing and it it shows a beautiful moment and experience in our life.

✓ It's really amazing and it shows beautiful moments and experiences in our lives.

There is a repeated word 'it it' and awkward singular 'a beautiful moment and experience in our life'. Use plural 'moments and experiences' and possessive plural 'our lives' to match general meaning. Also remove repetition.

× And I think that looking by in a car is very beautiful.

✓ And I think that looking out of a car window is very nice.

The phrase 'looking by in a car' uses incorrect prepositions and word order. Use 'looking out of' or 'looking out of a car window'. 'Nice' or 'beautiful' is fine; 'very nice' is natural. Suggestion: 'looking out of a car window' for clarity.

× Because of course it's my hobby to take photos outside the car window.

✓ Of course, it's my hobby to take photos out of the car window.

Beginning with 'Because of course' is redundant and awkward. Removing 'Because' and reordering makes the sentence natural. 'Out of the car window' or 'from the car window' are idiomatic.

× I usually stop the car and think that every photos of that beautiful places.

✓ I usually stop the car to take photos of those beautiful places.

Original mixes 'think that' incorrectly and has plural noun errors. Use 'to take photos' to show purpose, 'those' to refer to places, and 'places' without 'that'. Also 'photos' is plural so keep verb form consistent.

× I like travelling.

✓ I like travelling.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. (Kept for completeness.)

× Travelling is one of the beautiful and one of the best hobby in my life to do.

✓ Travelling is one of the most beautiful and best hobbies in my life.

Problems: 'one of the' requires plural noun 'hobbies'; 'one of the beautiful' should be 'one of the most beautiful' to compare; remove unnecessary 'to do'. Use 'hobbies' plural and correct superlative form.

× It gives me and it relieves everything in my life.

✓ It helps me and relieves the stresses in my life.

Original 'gives me and it relieves everything' is ungrammatical. Use 'helps me' and specify what is relieved, e.g., 'relieves the stresses' or 'relieves stress'. Remove redundant subject 'it'.

× I mostly prefer to see the mountains.

✓ I usually prefer to see the mountains.

'Mostly prefer' is awkward; 'usually prefer' is more natural for frequency. Present simple is correct for habits.

× Mountains are very beautiful.

✓ Mountains are very beautiful.

Sentence is correct; no change needed.

× They are in different shapes having having different experience when going to the top of the mountain, we feel we are in the large position and I think that mountains gives us a very beautiful and enchanting experience in our.

✓ They have different shapes, and climbing to the top gives different experiences. We feel elevated, and I think mountains give us a very beautiful and enchanting experience.

Multiple issues: repeated 'having having', run-on sentence, incorrect verb forms 'gives' should be 'give' to agree with plural 'mountains', and incomplete ending 'in our.' Split into clearer sentences, use 'have different shapes' and 'climbing to the top gives different experiences'. Use 'elevated' instead of 'in the large position'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'mountains give'.