Part 1
Examinador
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Candidato
Yes, I really like to do it, but when I traveling by bus or call I definitely will choose the seat that's near the window. And sometimes if I think the scenery is so beautiful I will take my phone to take the photos of it and I think I really enjoy this.
Examinador
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Candidato
Sure, just like my first answers, if the scenery inspired me to impress me a lot, I definitely will take a photo for it because uh, I think uh, the scenery on the windows is not of my destination. But this is a very good process that I need to record.
Examinador
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Candidato
I prefer the mountain because, uh, honestly, I'm a little bit scared of the sea. When I see this deep sea, I really imagine some uh, horrible things such as, uh, uh, driving in it and I think mountain is very, uh.
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Pontuação: 68.0Sugestão: 注意语法和用词准确性,避免重复和填充词。回答应更直接并分成主题句与支持句,使用连接词使句子更连贯。例如修正动词时态(travelling, travel; call → car),简化重复表达(I really like to do it / I really enjoy this)。可加入具体细节如旅行目的、喜欢的景色类型。
Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I always choose a window seat because I enjoy watching the landscape, especially fields and small villages. If I see something particularly beautiful, I often take a photo with my phone to remember it.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 需要更清晰表达原因并改善语法与逻辑。避免重复(inspired me / impress me)和填充词(uh)。说明拍照的目的和拍摄的具体对象会更好,使用连接词(because, so, when)使句子连贯。
Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside because I want to capture moments that I find beautiful or unusual. For example, I might photograph a colorful sunset or an interesting building so I can look back on the memory later.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Pontuação: 54.0Sugestão: 回答要更有条理并给出具体理由,避免不断停顿和重复填充词。可以先给出明确偏好句,然后用1–2个具体原因支持,并用连接词(because, so, for example)结尾。补充描述山的优点会更完整。
Exemplo: I prefer the mountains because I feel safer and more relaxed there. For example, I enjoy hiking on trails and breathing fresh air, whereas the sea makes me anxious because I worry about deep water and storms.
× Yes, I really like to do it, but when I traveling by bus or call I definitely will choose the seat that's near the window.
✓ Yes, I really like to do it, but when I travel by bus or car I will definitely choose the seat that's near the window.
错误类型:现在时态(第6类)。原句中使用了“when I traveling”,动词形式错误,应使用一般现在时“travel”与主语“I”搭配。此外“call”是拼写错误,应为“car”。建议注意主语后动词的基本形式,并检查拼写。
× And sometimes if I think the scenery is so beautiful I will take my phone to take the photos of it and I think I really enjoy this.
✓ And sometimes if I think the scenery is so beautiful, I will take out my phone to take photos of it, and I really enjoy doing this.
错误类型:将来时/动名词使用(第7类和第8类)。原句“take my phone to take the photos of it”表述冗长且“enjoy this”通常应使用动名词短语“enjoy doing this”。建议把“take out my phone to take photos”简称为“take out my phone to take photos”,并用“enjoy doing this”。同时注意添加逗号以分割条件状语从句。
× Sure, just like my first answers, if the scenery inspired me to impress me a lot, I definitely will take a photo for it because uh, I think uh, the scenery on the windows is not of my destination.
✓ Sure, just like my first answer, if the scenery impresses me a lot, I will definitely take a photo of it because I think the scenery outside the window is not my destination.
错误类型:现在时态(第6类)、单复数(第1类)、介词使用(第11类)。错误点:1) “my first answers”应为单数“my first answer”;2) 条件从句中应使用一般现在时“impresses”而非过去式“inspired”;3) “take a photo for it”应为“take a photo of it”;4) “on the windows”更自然说法是“outside the window”,并且“is not of my destination”不自然,应改为“is not my destination”。建议注意主谓一致、正确使用介词短语以及用法固定搭配“take a photo of”。
× But this is a very good process that I need to record.
✓ But this is a good moment that I want to record.
错误类型:句子结构错误(第26类)。原句“a very good process that I need to record”表达不自然,“process”不适合描述拍照的瞬间,应使用“moment”或“memory”,并根据说话意图使用“want to”或“like to”。建议选择合适名词并调整从句,使表达更地道。
× I prefer the mountain because, uh, honestly, I'm a little bit scared of the sea.
✓ I prefer the mountains because, honestly, I'm a little bit scared of the sea.
错误类型:单复数问题(第1类)。“I prefer the mountain”应使用复数“the mountains”表示一般偏好一类景观。建议在表达喜好某类事物时使用复数形式(mountains, beaches 等)。
× When I see this deep sea, I really imagine some uh, horrible things such as, uh, uh, driving in it and I think mountain is very, uh.
✓ When I see the deep sea, I imagine horrible things, such as being swept away by it, and I think mountains are very...
错误类型:现在时态(第6类)、动名词/过去分词(第8/9类)、单复数(第1类)。问题包括:1) “When I see this deep sea, I really imagine some... such as, driving in it”中“driving in it”不自然,应改为“being swept away by it”或其他合适的动名词短语;2) “I think mountain is very”应为复数“mountains are very”。建议用恰当的动名词/被动结构表达恐惧情景,并保持主语与动词的一致性。