Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be careful with pronunciation ("window" not "winner") and avoid small grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "for example" or "so"). Keep answers concise (maximum 5 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, once I noticed a large, green garden from the road, so I returned the next day to visit it. I enjoy spotting interesting places because it helps me discover new locations to explore.

Sugestão: This answer is clear and relevant but can be more natural by using smoother linking words and avoiding filler phrases like "like." Use a topic sentence, a reason, and a short example. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "capture" → "save" or "photograph") and correct small phrasing issues ("re-watch" or "look at later").

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I want to preserve special moments. For example, I photographed a sunset over the hills last month and I like to look at that photo later because it brings back good memories.

Sugestão: The answer is relevant but unclear at the start ("I prefer this too" is vague). Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and perhaps a brief comparison. Use linking words like "because" and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the ocean makes me feel free and relaxed. For example, listening to the waves helps me forget my problems and gives me a sense of calm and happiness, whereas the mountains feel more quiet and solitary.

× Absolutely. I always look out the winner whenever I travel by bus or by car in order to spot beautiful places.

✓ Absolutely. I always look out the window whenever I travel by bus or by car in order to spot beautiful places.

The word 'winner' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'window'. This is a word choice error causing the sentence to be unintelligible. Suggestion: replace incorrect words with the intended noun and proofread for typographical errors.

× So one day when I was going by car, I saw a beautiful garden, so much green, and the next day I visited it.

✓ One day when I was going by car, I saw a beautiful garden full of green, and the next day I visited it.

Beginning the sentence with 'So' is unnecessary and can make spoken responses less formal; also 'so much green' is informal and slightly awkward. 'Full of green' or 'with so much greenery' is clearer. Suggestion: remove unnecessary discourse marker and use a clearer noun phrase.

× So it was so much beneficial that I looked out the window.

✓ It was so beneficial that I had looked out the window.

The original mixes timing and emphasising awkwardly. To show that looking out the window caused benefit before the visit, use past perfect 'had looked' or rephrase: 'It was very beneficial that I had looked out the window.' Suggestion: use past perfect when referring to an action completed before another past event, and use 'very' rather than 'so much' before adjectives.

× Sure, whenever I look out the car window, like I like to take pictures to capture the scenery and preserve that image.

✓ Sure, whenever I look out the car window, I like to take pictures to capture the scenery and preserve the image.

The phrase 'like I like to' repeats 'like' unnecessarily (redundant filler). Removing the second 'like' yields a grammatically correct sentence. Also 'that image' is acceptable but 'the image' is more natural. Suggestion: avoid repeated filler words and streamline the clause.

× And whenever I rewatch that image, I feel pleasure in the sense of nostalgia.

✓ And whenever I rewatch that image, I feel a sense of nostalgia.

'Feel pleasure in the sense of nostalgia' is wordy and awkward. The natural collocation is 'feel a sense of nostalgia' or 'feel nostalgic'. Suggestion: use common collocations and shorter phrasing: 'feel nostalgic' or 'feel a sense of nostalgia'.

× I prefer this too because looking at the ocean makes me feel free and relaxed.

✓ I prefer the sea because looking at the ocean makes me feel free and relaxed.

The response 'I prefer this too' is vague; it should directly state the preference 'I prefer the sea' to answer the question. This is a pronoun/reference clarity issue. Suggestion: explicitly name the preferred option to avoid ambiguity.

× It helps me forget my problems for a while and gives me sense of calm and happiness.

✓ It helps me forget my problems for a while and gives me a sense of calm and happiness.

The phrase 'gives me sense' is missing the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'a sense of' to form the correct noun phrase. Suggestion: include articles where required: 'a sense of calm'.