Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. "open window" → "an open window"). Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually sit by the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy the fresh air and the passing scenery. For example, looking at trees and fields relaxes me and helps me think more clearly during long journeys.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer first, then one clear reason or example. Avoid repetition and poetic phrases that sound vague (e.g. "carve in my heart"). Reduce hesitations and use smoother linking words like "however" or "usually".

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes take photos from the car window if I see something interesting. However, because we often pass by quickly, I usually only manage to take a few pictures and instead try to remember the view.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g. "because" / "for example"). Remove fillers and correct grammar ("surrounded with" → "surrounded by", "sceneries" → "scenery"). Keep the response to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I grew up surrounded by them and find their scenery calming. For example, I enjoy hiking among the pines and watching the clouds settle over the peaks.

× I always choose window side uh, especially open window where while travelling by bus because I like air, fresh air, umm and scenery that make me so energetic and free enough to think many things.

✓ I always choose the window seat, especially a seat by an open window when travelling by bus, because I like the fresh air and the scenery; they make me feel energetic and free enough to think about many things.

The sentence has incorrect or missing prepositions and articles ('window side' should be 'window seat'; missing articles 'the' and 'a'; 'where while' is incorrect — use 'when' for time); punctuation and word order are also awkward. Use 'by' for 'seat by an open window', 'when travelling' to indicate time, and include articles before countable nouns. Also separate ideas with commas or conjunctions and use 'think about many things' for the correct verb-object structure.

× If I happen to see something exciting, I always take my smartphone and click a pic of that.

✓ If I happen to see something exciting, I always take out my smartphone and take a picture of it.

The phrase 'click a pic of that' is informal and awkward; 'take out my smartphone' clarifies the action and 'take a picture of it' is standard. The structure is improved by using correct verb collocations ('take out', 'take a picture') and a clear pronoun ('it') referring to 'something exciting'.

× Uh, but uh, most of the time as we pass through, we uh, don't get chance to take pictures, but I keep that in my mind and carve in my heart always to remember.

✓ But most of the time, as we pass through, we don't get a chance to take pictures; I always keep the scene in my mind and in my heart to remember it.

Redundant fillers like 'uh' should be removed for clarity. Missing article 'a' in 'don't get a chance'. 'Keep that in my mind and carve in my heart always to remember' is awkward — use 'keep the scene in my mind and in my heart to remember it.' Use punctuation to separate clauses and make the sentence coherent.

× I always prefer mountains as I'm surrounded uh, with mountains, a place of landscape.

✓ I always prefer the mountains because I'm surrounded by mountains; it's a place with beautiful landscapes.

Use the correct preposition 'by' after 'surrounded'. 'Prefer mountains' usually takes 'the' when referring to mountains in general: 'prefer the mountains'. 'A place of landscape' is incorrect; use 'a place with beautiful landscapes' or 'a landscaped area'. Improved punctuation clarifies meaning.

× I choose umm, mountains over sea because it is filled with beautiful sceneries and clouds and also I always love mountains.

✓ I choose mountains over the sea because they are filled with beautiful scenery and clouds, and I have always loved mountains.

Article usage: use 'the sea' for a specific natural feature. 'Mountains' as plural subject takes 'they' and verb agreement: 'they are filled'. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use 'scenery' not 'sceneries'. 'I always love mountains' -> 'I have always loved mountains' is more natural when explaining a preference over time.