Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a direct topic sentence, give one clear reason, add a brief consequence and a plan to change. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "by bus or by car" repeated) and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like "because" and "so" appropriately but not excessively.

Exemplo: No, I usually don't look out of the window because I tend to scroll on my phone. This habit makes my eyes dry and sometimes gives me motion sickness, so I don't enjoy the scenery. I plan to switch off my phone on short trips so I can appreciate the view more.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence and one or two specific details. Reduce repetition ("I do" used multiple times) and correct small grammar issues ("on outside" → "outside"). Mention a specific example or limitation briefly to add interest.

Exemplo: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside. If I notice a particularly beautiful scene—like a sunset or a field of flowers—I will quickly snap a picture, although reflections and the car window often reduce the photo quality.

Sugestão: Open with a concise preference statement, then give two vivid but controlled reasons with clear linking words. Avoid poetic or awkward phrases ("boulders bite on the coastline")—use precise, natural descriptions. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because I love the bright blue water and the sound of waves on a sunny day. The scenery feels refreshing and relaxed, and I enjoy walking along the shore where waves crash against the rocks. The atmosphere helps me unwind.

× I usually just scroll on my phone

✓ I usually just scroll through my phone

The verb 'scroll' commonly collocates with the preposition 'through' when referring to moving through content on a device. Replace 'on' with 'through' to use the correct verb+preposition collocation and make the sentence natural.

× which is a very bad habit because it makes my eyes dry and sore and I'm a bit carsick

✓ which is a very bad habit because it makes my eyes dry and sore, and I get a bit carsick

Use of 'I'm a bit carsick' is acceptable but 'I get a bit carsick' is more natural to describe becoming carsick as a result. Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity. This corrects awkward phrasing and improves fluency.

× So I think this is a bad habit that I need to overcome in the future

✓ So I think this is a bad habit that I need to overcome

The phrase 'in the future' is redundant when 'need to overcome' already implies a future action. Removing the redundancy makes the sentence more concise and natural while keeping the intended meaning.

× Sometimes when I'm not scrolling through my phone, I do

✓ Sometimes when I'm not scrolling through my phone, I take photos

Repeating 'I do' is vague. Replace it with the specific verb 'take photos' to match the question about taking photos. This corrects the implicit verb usage and clarifies the action.

× I do appreciate the scenery on outside

✓ I do appreciate the scenery outside

The preposition 'on' before 'outside' is unnecessary and incorrect. Use 'outside' alone to indicate the location of the scenery.

× so I usually snap some pictures when I see a very beautiful scenery

✓ so I usually snap some pictures when I see very beautiful scenery

The noun 'scenery' is uncountable and should not take the article 'a' or be preceded by 'very' with 'a'. Remove 'a' and optional 'very' can remain, but 'very beautiful scenery' is correct without 'a'.

× But the car window usually prohibits me from taking really amazing photos

✓ But the car window usually prevents me from taking really amazing photos

The verb 'prohibit' is possible but typically used in formal contexts and requires 'from'; 'prevent' is more natural here. Use 'prevents me from' to express the intended meaning in conversational English.

× I think I prefer the sea more because I just simply love the seaside on a sunny day

✓ I think I prefer the sea because I simply love the seaside on a sunny day

'Prefer' already expresses comparison so adding 'more' is redundant. Also 'just simply' is redundant—use one adverb, here 'simply', for clarity and conciseness.

× the intense blue of the ocean and the white fluffy foaming waves

✓ the intense blue of the ocean and the white, fluffy, foaming waves

This is not strictly a pronoun error but an adjective punctuation and coordination issue. Add commas between coordinate adjectives ('white, fluffy, foaming') to improve readability. Ensure adjectives are in a logical order (opinion/size/age/shape/color) though here the sequence is acceptable.

× When the waves hit, the boulders bite on the coastline

✓ When the waves hit, they crash against the boulders on the coastline

The original uses the metaphor 'boulders bite on' which is awkward and unidiomatic. Replace with 'they crash against the boulders' to convey the intended image clearly and use correct verb and preposition ('against' instead of 'on').

× It's really beautiful and the intensity of the nature astounds me

✓ It's really beautiful, and the intensity of nature astounds me

Remove the definite article before 'nature'—'nature' is generally uncountable and does not take 'the' in this context. Add a comma before 'and' to join the clauses correctly.