Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 문법 오류를 바로잡고, 주제 문장과 뒷받침 세부사항을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 불필요한 중복(umm, 같은 맥락의 표현 반복)을 줄이고 구체적 묘사(예: 어떤 풍경의 요소들이 편안함을 주는지)를 추가하면 더 자연스럽고 설득력 있는 답변이 됩니다. 또한 문장 수를 3~4문장 내로 유지하고 연결어(for example, because, which 등)를 사용해 흐름을 명확히 하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the scenery calming. For example, seeing green fields and trees helps me relax after a busy day. I often focus on details like the movement of leaves or distant hills, which makes the journey feel peaceful.

Sugestão: 응답을 더 간결하고 정확한 시제로 말하세요. 'Depends on the scenery' 같은 표현 뒤에는 구체적 상황(어떤 풍경이면 사진을 찍는지)을 덧붙이고, 과거/현재 시제를 일관되게 사용하세요. 불필요한 반복과 'umm' 같은 채움말을 줄이고 연결어(if, so 등)를 사용해 이유를 명확히 하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, it depends on the scenery. If I see something especially beautiful, such as a dramatic sunset or a mountain view, I usually take a photo. Otherwise, I prefer to simply enjoy the view without taking pictures.

Sugestão: 선호 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 단어 선택(see → visit/view 등)을 교정하고, 'refresh about' 같은 부정확한 표현 대신 명확한 표현을 사용하세요. 이유-예시-결론 구조(주제문, 구체적 이유, 결과)를 유지하면 답변이 더 논리적입니다.

Exemplo: I definitely prefer the mountains because the fresh air and the scent of pine trees make me feel relaxed. For example, hiking on a mountain trail helps me clear my mind and regain energy, so I often feel refreshed after a day there.

× Yes, normally our traveling by both workers.

✓ Yes, normally we travel by both bus and car.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronoun 'our' instead of subject 'we' and awkward noun phrase 'traveling by both workers'. Use the subject pronoun 'we' and the verb 'travel' to describe habitual action. Also specify the means 'bus and car' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'we travel' for general habits and place means after 'by' if needed: 'we travel by bus and car.'

× I are looking out because it makes me comfortable.

✓ I look out because it makes me comfortable.

The verb 'are' does not agree with the singular subject 'I'. Use the simple present 'I look' for habitual action. Alternatively 'I am looking out' would be present continuous for current action, but since this describes a habit, use simple present. Suggestion: Use 'I look out' for routines, or 'I am looking out' for ongoing action.

× I don't know why but normally I think the green and umm when I'm looking at the nature I feel very comfortable.

✓ I don't know why, but normally when I look at nature and see green scenery, I feel very comfortable.

The sentence has awkward structure and missing parallelism. 'I think the green' is unclear; use 'see green scenery' or 'see green'. Also 'the nature' should be 'nature' without article. Reorder clauses: place the time clause 'when I look at nature' before main clause or join with commas. Suggestion: Keep clause order clear and use 'nature' without 'the' and a noun for the green (e.g., 'green scenery' or 'greenery').

× Yes it is depends on the scenery umm when I look very beautiful I took a photos but normally I just umm looking at the eyes.

✓ Yes, it depends on the scenery. When I see something very beautiful, I take photos, but normally I just look with my eyes.

'It is depends' incorrectly combines 'is' and 'depends'; correct is 'it depends' (no 'is'). 'When I look very beautiful' is wrong—use 'when I see something very beautiful'. 'I took a photos' mixes past tense with plural 'a photos' (article and number error). Use simple present 'I take photos' for habitual action and correct article: 'photos' without 'a'. 'I just umm looking at the eyes' is ungrammatical; use 'I just look with my eyes' or simply 'I just look'. Suggestion: Use 'it depends', 'I see', and present simple for habits; fix articles and verb forms.

× I absolutely prefer to see the mountain because umm, when I go to the mountain, the atmosphere and the smell of some trees, it makes me comfortable.

✓ I absolutely prefer the mountains because when I go to the mountains, the atmosphere and the smell of the trees make me comfortable.

Use plural 'mountains' for general preference. 'Prefer to see the mountain' is awkward—use 'prefer the mountains'. Remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'mountain' in general statements and use plural consistency. 'The smell of some trees' is unnatural; 'the smell of the trees' or 'the scent of the trees' is better. Verb agreement: 'the atmosphere and the smell... make' (plural subject) instead of 'makes'. Suggestion: Use plural for general preferences and match verb to plural subject.

× I can refresh about.

✓ I can refresh myself.

'Refresh about' is ungrammatical. Use the reflexive verb 'refresh myself' to indicate becoming refreshed. Also native phrasing would be 'I can refresh myself' or 'I can feel refreshed'. Suggestion: Use 'refresh myself' or 'feel refreshed' to express the idea.