Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct basic grammar, and add one specific detail to make the answer more natural. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and one supporting detail. Avoid repeating words like “views” and fix subject–verb agreement and article use.

Exemplo: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy scenery. For example, I like watching green fields and rivers pass by since they help me relax and forget about stress.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar by giving a direct yes/no, then one clear example of when and what you photograph. Use linking words (for example, sometimes) and correct noun phrases (landscape, mountains). Keep it to one or two supporting sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the car or bus. For example, I sometimes photograph mountain ranges or wide landscapes when the light is good because the views look more dramatic from the road.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer, then explain one or two specific reasons using fluent language and fewer fillers. Replace vague phrases with concrete details (e.g., the sound of waves, swimming). Use linking words like because or so to connect reasons.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea because the sound of the waves and the open horizon make me feel relaxed. For instance, I enjoy swimming and walking on the beach, which helps me feel free and forget my daily worries.

× I love the views, beautiful views.

✓ I love the views; they are beautiful.

The original repeats 'beautiful views' awkwardly; use a complete clause or a single adjective phrase. This corrects style and clarity by linking the noun 'views' to the adjective 'beautiful' with a clause. Suggestion: combine or replace repetitive fragments with a full sentence.

× I often go somewhere which has a beautiful views because the view make me comfortable and relax.

✓ I often go somewhere that has beautiful views because the views make me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Issues: 'somewhere which' is awkward in spoken English; use 'that' or 'where'. 'a beautiful views' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a'. Subject-verb agreement: 'view make' should be 'views make'. Also 'relax' should be adjective 'relaxed' and add 'feel' after 'make me' for natural wording. Suggestion: ensure matching singular/plural and correct verb agreement; use 'feel comfortable and relaxed.'

× Besides you, I always take photos of some beautiful land spaces and it's happened in the car or some mountain and or the some bus it's happen everywhere.

✓ Besides you, I always take photos of beautiful landscapes, whether in the car, on a mountain, or on a bus; it happens everywhere.

Problems: 'land spaces' is incorrect—use 'landscapes'. 'it's happened' is wrong tense and structure; use 'it happens' or 'this happens'. Prepositions: use 'in the car', 'on a mountain', 'on a bus'. Remove extra articles 'the some'. The sentence was run-on; break or punctuate to improve clarity. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('landscapes'), correct verb tense and simple present for habitual actions, and correct prepositions.

× I prefer seas, but it doesn't mean I don't like mountains.

✓ I prefer the sea, but that doesn't mean I don't like mountains.

'Seas' is unnatural when speaking generally; use the uncountable 'the sea' or 'the seaside'. Also replace 'it' with clearer 'that' to refer to the previous clause. Keep 'mountains' plural as correct. Suggestion: use 'the sea' for general preference and use referent 'that' for clarity.

× And I love, uh, seas more than, uh, mountains And uh, you know, things make me comfortable, relaxed, it's, uh, make me, uh, feeling, uh, free and I can do everything with there.

✓ I love the sea more than the mountains. You know, it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed; it makes me feel free, and I can do anything there.

Multiple issues: 'seas' should be 'the sea' and 'mountains' need 'the' for comparison. 'things make me comfortable, relaxed' is vague—use 'it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.' 'it's make me' is ungrammatical; use 'it makes me'. 'feeling free' should be 'feel free'. 'do everything with there' is incorrect preposition and structure; use 'do anything there.' Suggestion: simplify and use clear subjects ('it') for the feelings, ensure verb forms match subject ('makes'), and use correct prepositions ('there').