Travelling— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve fluency and sentence completeness. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fragments, and use linking words to add specific details. For example, say you enjoy observing changing landscapes and give two concrete specifics (buildings, farms, people) connected with linking phrases like “for example” or “such as.” Also correct tense and agreement (we are → when we are, place to place → from place to place). Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery changes a lot. For example, you can see farms, towns and different styles of houses, which tell you about local culture. I often notice how people work in fields or how shops are arranged as we drive from place to place.

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain why with a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like “because” and complete your final clause. Avoid vague phrases like “scenery state.”

Exemplo: No, I don't usually take photos from a moving car. I have tried once, but it is difficult to get a clear picture because the car is moving and images often turn out blurred. If I want a good photo, I prefer to stop and take it from a safe, stable spot.

Sugestão: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add two specific reasons with linking words (firstly, secondly, because). Correct grammar (father take → took) and avoid repetition. Mention a concrete memory or feeling to make it vivid.

Exemplo: I prefer the sea. Firstly, I love the sight of the deep blue water because it feels peaceful and refreshing. Secondly, I have fond childhood memories—my father took me to the beach often, so the sea feels familiar and comforting.

× Yes I do. I prefer to look out the window where I. We are traveling by bus or car because you can see many cultures and the difference between the place to place and. For example, you can see the farm and.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer to look out the window when I am traveling by bus or car because you can see many cultures and the differences from place to place. For example, you can see farms.

Errors: sentence fragments and incorrect tense/form. 'where I. We are traveling' is a fragmented, mixed-subject construction. Use 'when I am traveling' for ongoing action in present tense. 'the difference between the place to place' is incorrect word order and count; use plural 'differences' and the phrase 'from place to place'. 'the farm and' is an incomplete phrase; plural 'farms' fits general observation. Suggestion: keep subject consistent, use 'when I am traveling' for habitual/ongoing present actions, pluralize general nouns and complete clauses.

× No, I don't actually. I have tried to do that, but it is difficult to take a good picture from moving car because you cannot get the scenery state or.

✓ No, I don't, actually. I have tried to do that, but it is difficult to take a good picture from a moving car because you cannot capture the scenery clearly.

Errors: missing article before 'moving car' and awkward phrase 'get the scenery state or' which is incomplete. Use 'a moving car' (article required) and 'capture the scenery clearly' to express ability to photograph well. Present perfect 'I have tried' is fine. Suggestion: include articles before singular nouns and use clear verbs like 'capture' and adverb 'clearly'.

× I prefer the sea and firstly I like the blue and the ocean blue is very beautiful. I would like to see that blue. And also when I was a child, my father take me to the sea often, so there are many memories at the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea. First, I like the blue of the ocean; it is very beautiful and I would like to see that blue. Also, when I was a child, my father took me to the sea often, so I have many memories of the sea.

Errors: tense and word choice. 'firstly' is awkward in speech; 'First' is natural. 'the ocean blue is very beautiful' needs rephrasing to 'the blue of the ocean is very beautiful.' Main error: 'my father take me' uses present tense 'take' instead of past 'took' to match 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'took'. Also 'there are many memories at the sea' is unnatural; use 'I have many memories of the sea' to indicate personal memories. Suggestion: match verb tense to time reference and use natural collocations like 'memories of'.